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The Losing Side, Chapter 58 - To Create Hope

Wednesday, December 12, 2007

Wash experiences his first taste of freedom, and Mal steps up to the challenge of leading a different sort of squad. Lee goes public with some very pointed criticism, and the new Alliance sergeant proves to be someone Mal can get along with.

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I'm back :) Sorry about the long delay, I've been off on the (wonderful) Browncoat Cruise and neglecting my writing duties ;) Without further ado, here is the next chapter.

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Wash blinked upward at the sky, holding the tangled mess of webbing connected to the survival pack that had been cut off him when he was taken prisoner, and the belt holster containing his now unloaded service pistol. His uniform was there too, but they’d warned him that wearing it might not be good for his health. In truth, he didn’t want to wear it, or any uniform. Maybe a hula skirt.

The sky shouldn’t look any different on this side of the wall, but it did. Bigger, brighter. Most likely should stop staring at it, but -

“Lieutenant Washburne?”

Wash startled and came back down to earth, sizing up the short, dark man making the inquiry. He held himself with an air of self-assured power that rankled; he’d had quite enough of commanding military types who expected deference and obedience just as much as they expected to breathe. “My name’s Wash.”

The man extended his hand. “Commander Tenaka.” Wash shook his hand, a little stunned. Tenaka was practically a household name in this quadrant. “It’s a pleasure to finally meet you,” said Tenaka.

“That’s – very nice for you,” said Wash. “Did we skip over – um - why?” His eyes strayed; Matty stood next to a hovering taxi, wrapped tightly in the embrace of his wife and daughter. They were frozen in place, clinging to each other as if daring the universe to make them let go.

It caused him a pang of loneliness. Or maybe it was Tenaka, standing there like he expected Wash to invite him to dinner at the good old boy’s club. Sure. Just forget the others and chat up the enemy. Matty stepped into the taxi, waving to Wash as the vehicle skimmed away.

“Your attack took more guts and skill than any of us thought possible,” said Tenaka, slight irritation creeping into his voice over the realization that he was the last person on Wash’s mind. “I’m here to tell you

Comments
Wednesday, 12 December 2007 13:13
worth its WAIT in gold ha ha!

nice tonal shift from prior darkness.
Wednesday, 12 December 2007 14:44
Excellent chapter! Welcome back!
Wednesday, 12 December 2007 15:52
This chapter just left me wanting to post slobbering, gibbering exclamations of delight and admiration, rather than anything coherent. Woo hoo! Fantastic, Jetflair!

Wash was... perfect. When he doesn't break stride when ordered to stop, when he talks about fences needing to be torn down, not mended, the past literally chasing him--all that coupled with the visuals and sensations of being outside the prison were wonderful.

Then, the shift... back inside. Low key, not crashing down, and more effective for it. Mal taking charge very well, doing what needed to be done.

Excellent chapter! Thanks.

(Chapter 57 missing from the reposts?)
WOONSOCKET
Wednesday, 12 December 2007 16:30
You're back!!!!! oh frabjous joy!!

Great dialogues, nice nuance.
Lee is what one hopes for in a commander, and Daniels as an es-pow is a nice touch.
Wednesday, 12 December 2007 23:48
Welcome back! If anyone deserved to go to the Browncoat Cruise you did if only for this brilliant ongoing story. I loved the way you wrote Wash especially the way in which he dismisses Tanaka. And Mal taking up the reins of command with the new guys in prison was inspiring. The new guard sounds like a chip off Lee's block which is good for everyone and I really liked Lee speaking out against the way politicians have been manipulating the truth about the prisoners to their own less that glorious ends. Hope the next part is up soon. Ali D :~)
You can't take the sky from me
NBZ
Thursday, 13 December 2007 00:50
Nice.

Now that is two prolific authors (the other being Mal4Prez) who have done a lighter chapter after going on the cruise. What were they serving?

Good stuff.
Thursday, 13 December 2007 02:58
Glad to see more of this wonderful story!
Thursday, 13 December 2007 05:09
Glad to see you writing again. It was well worth the wait. Can't wait to see what happens to Wash and Mal now that they aren't together.

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