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Unfinished Business -- Chapter Twenty

Monday, June 11, 2007

The inefficiency of lust, eighteen candles and two boxes of booze.

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Unfinished Business

Chapter Twenty

The next two days saw Dr. Simon Tam, fugitive from justice and former trauma surgeon, become Inspector Simon Marshal, Agent of Parliament. A suitable uniform was found and fitted. The many electronic appliances a true Inspector would be expected to carry were procured – scientific instruments, record keepers, medical encyclopedias, and a priority cortex relay. And Simon had two full fourteen-hour days cramming for the part, learning background information and minutia that might trip him up.

The rest of the crew was almost as busy. Kaylee was so enthusiastic about a real overhaul, however brief, that she spent nearly every waking moment in the bowels of Serenity. She didn’t even miss Simon much, she was so distracted.

When he wasn’t otherwise in briefings and planning sessions, Mal spent his time talking with his fellow captains and discovering a few old friends from the War who had disappeared into the Gopher Hole afterwards. His unease about the trappings of the Independents mellowed in some ways, deepened in others. Seeing old comrades he had thought dead, and discovering them no more radical or crazy than he remembered helped mellow him. A large part of the deepening was due to Zoë.

Zoë had found her own role. At her insistence – and against Mal’s moderate objections – she had volunteered to lead one of the assault and evacuation teams.

“Why?” he had asked, when she had told him – with only a trace of guilt in her eyes.

“Because they need experienced people for the assault teams, Sir. Remember Turk from the 223rd Recon? He’s here. He remembered me from the Gideon Offensive, and recommended me, and they asked real nice.”

“Woulda been nice to have asked me,” Mal said, rubbing his chin.

“Consider this me askin’, Sir,” she said, almost serenely. “I’d be obliged if you went ahead and said ‘yes’. Not like you truly need me on the boat.”

“This ain’t like you, Zoe,” he said, shaking his head. “Can’t say I ain’t concerned.”

“It

Comments
FIREFLYCRACKHEAD
Monday, 11 June 2007 07:49
Three updates in a week? What did we do to deserve this? And what a cliffhanger!
Monday, 11 June 2007 08:03
“Mother?” River whispered. “Daddy . . . ?” she squealed.

That brought tears to my eyes. Wonderful writing Scew, just wonderful.

Monday, 11 June 2007 08:06
I just love the Inara/River conversation, particularly the thoughts as spoken. And Simon's surprise? Excellent!
Monday, 11 June 2007 13:56
I really enjoyed this and loved the way it seemed like Simon had run away or something, but in fact had been trying to give River something she rarely had, a surprise.
Monday, 11 June 2007 15:35
Interesting discussion Inara and River had. River seems to be a bit too coherent, but I'm sure there are things in this story that I've forgotten which would explain why she sounds that way.

I'm thinking the other shoe is going to drop pretty heavily on all the revelry when Simon leaves. Is he going to tell anyone, or just go? He seemed to dismiss Kaylee at every turn in this chapter, which isn't boding well for their continued relationship. Even if she didn't seem to notice.
Monday, 11 June 2007 16:20
She seems "too coherent" because she's "sane", again, post-Serenity. She still has issues, she has just started to adapt.

And Simon was using the prospect of him leaving and doing something stupid as a ruse to keep everyone occupied while he pulled off the party. He'll be with everyone else when the rescue begins.

StA
Monday, 11 June 2007 16:51
Well now...you trying to eradicate all of Simon's flubs and bloopers since he joined Serenity in one fell swoop or something? Cuz I will be damned if you haven't made Simon look mighty shiny with this stellar little plan of his. I do wonder if this is a foreshadowing of a future con Simon will get going for getting the POWs off the Suri Madron though;)

And I too thought the River-Inara conversation about River's abilities acting like a receiver dish for every hormone-fuelled thought from the male (and female, to be non-exclusive) Browncoats on the stations was hilariously brilliant! I would imagine Joss, Summer and Morena just milking this for all it would have been worth:D

BEB
MISAIM
Monday, 11 June 2007 19:04
Your Firefly fanfiction remains the best I've ever had the pleasure to read. It must be a bear to handle such a big picture while keeping a mind towards the nuance, and I think this story alone proves you a great writer, to say nothing of your past ones.

What I like especially is the depiction of the under ground Browncoats. They're not as bad as the Alliance, but their anger at their defeat still resonates and are just as dangerous in their own fashion. Just like real life, there are no ideal answers. You keep writing, and I'll keep reading!
BEATLEJESSIE
Tuesday, 12 June 2007 01:47
3 new chapters! Hooray! And they have all been great reads, I'm glad we got the crew all back in one place in this chapter, though.

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“This was a lot easier to deal with when I was batshit crazy,” River sighed.
~

That may be one of my most favorite lines ever!!!

Tuesday, 12 June 2007 03:16
What a wonderful piece of work! Love everyting about it - even Jayne's new reputation. Scary to see Zoe without Mal, though.
Tuesday, 12 June 2007 05:00
I know it's not a popular sentiment, but I love the idea of Zoe in command without Mal. I think she may need to travel alone on her new path, at least for a little while. Change is good.

Simon's birthday suprise made me teary- eyed. Thanks! I knew you were a softy, Screw.

I liked Inara's POV and how her future is uncertain and how she's mentally preparing herself for the worst in regards to the Guild. Her political shifts are logically unfolding and well written. Mal giving her space and shopping cash is probably wisest at this juncture, so she's not scared off.

The Tams scare the hell out of me. I'm so glad I don't know rich people that act like that. So no comment on them.

I'm enjoying this story... best plot and characterizations. love it
Wednesday, 13 June 2007 15:23
Gah! I hate being all caught up, and having to wait for the next installment. Loved the banter on this one, and this line especially:
“My butt looks fantastic, thank you, and there is NOTHING wrong with my gorram ankles!” she said quietly, but intently, and passed by, leaving a very confused young man in her wake.

You actually write Inara so that I like her. There's something to be said for that. :)
Saturday, 16 June 2007 17:58
Brilliant stuff as is always the case.


“I ain’t seein anyone at th’ moment,” Jayne said conversationally.


Hee hee!!
RANKTYRO
Sunday, 01 July 2007 05:51
He still got that gorram tree on his ass, don’t he?” Rowan accused.

That brought a very big smile to my face.

Well done chapter, like always.
FIREFLYCRACKHEAD
Wednesday, 26 September 2007 02:39
Where are you? I, and hundreds of your other fans, are dying for the next chapter. Sorry for the petulance. I just need my fix man...whimper.
Monday, 01 October 2007 08:07
Gah I can't wait much longer hope all is well and we will see more in the near future. Just finished the whole 3 series again.
RANKTYRO
Saturday, 12 January 2008 03:16
<prayer> Dear God, please tell me that Screwthealliance did not have a stroke before finishing this great story.</prayer>

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