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Firefly Season 2:2 Showbiz part 4

Tuesday, February 20, 2007

the Blue Sun Corporation is furious, Zeke is helpful and River and Jimmy have a chat

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(Act4)

“hand over the Gerrelds or else” snarls the manager

‘nope – no can do – na ha – no’ states Mal hand on his gun

“if I may Hardgrieves” asks one of the black suited men

‘but you said…’

“shut-up”

The manager is silent

“we represent the Allied Union of Entertainment”

‘Good for you’

“you have some Employees of ours who we want returning – unless you want us to call the Feds for the theft of AUE property”

‘we don’t count people as property – never could stand slavery on principle, so go ahead call the Alliance but as they told you in the theatre they have no contracts holding them to you’

“easily forged and a bribe would go a long way towards getting the law on our side, and were not slavers – just long term employers”

‘is that so’ calls a familiar voice across the space port

Zoe looks across its Zeke with his gang

‘can’t stand stinkin’ slavers’ he spits ‘slavers got my sister and my niece – never saw ‘em again’

His gang are hefting rifles and shotguns – the AUE heavies are nervous and intimidated

‘you can go about your business Reynolds but I think me an some of the lads would like a chat with your fancy friends’

The gang starts herding the AUE group away – the manager is pale and frightened

Mal, Zoe and Jayne back into Serenity’s cargo bay – lifting up the ramp and closing the inner doors

Zoe speaks into the coms ‘Honey – take us out of the world’

Serenity lifts off from the space port and heads out to the black

In space Serenity hits hard burn leaving the planet far behind – heading for a new horizon

Serenity cargo bay – several camp beds have been laid out in 2 rows one on each side of the cargo bay, the luggage has been placed in a corner

Mal with Zoe (as Jayne has left for the galley) is with the Gerrelds

“now my name is Malcolm Reynolds I’m the captain of this boat – this here’s my first mate Zoe, you just met Jayne – you’ll meet the rest of the cr

Comments
Tuesday, 20 February 2007 14:23
very difficult to make this chapter.
Did you like the analogy of Rivers alias Spring?
also the River and Jimmy moment so touching.
i appolagise for all errors and will correct them if you point 'em out.
the 5th and finaly chapter will be posted in due course.

Wednesday, 21 February 2007 08:33
Not to sound harsh, but it's not a simple matter of a small handful of errors that can be quickly corrected; the entire document, while great at its foundations (story idea and basic character behaviour), the formatting and setup of the chapter is still rather rough. My suggestion of asking around the Blue Sun Room for a beta reader to help things run smoother is still a good one, jeraxus:(

Still...I am intrigued at why the AUE is so gung ho to get the Gerrelds back from the BDHs. That and River's "conversation" with Jimmy was rather amusing before getting mighty sad;)

BEB

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