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Firefly Season 2:2 Showbiz part 1

Thursday, January 25, 2007

:- serenity makes land fall on Paquin, but the crew lose their downtime
and find some trouble

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(Teaser)

Mal is in the bridge observing Wash at the controls – through the Bridge windows a planet is becoming bigger

Simon enters

“How’s are guest?” asks Mal

‘He’s healing impossibly fast’

“Impossible huh”

‘He should have died from his injuries as certain as if he had been shot between the eyes’

“Hey do you know that it is or was depending on how you look at it aerodynamically impossible for a Bumble bee to fly?”

Mal and Simon just stare at Wash

“Ahh um we’ll be hitting planet side within a few minutes – after a little chat with air traffic control”

‘I’ll be going then’

Simon leaves

“We won’t have any trouble getting permission to land?”

‘Huh?’

‘oh no, no trouble – maybe we’ll have to get Inara to put in a good word or two for us, you know just to speed things up but everything’s shiney’

Smiles

Outside serenity the ship pulls into a tempory orbit and a piece of the ship falls of and starts burning through atmo

The ship shudders for a few seconds

‘No were okay – were good – Oh My God Were All Gonna DIE!’

“Um Wash are we…?”

Over the coms ‘Kaylee a little extra thrust and I need to offshoot the burn out to keep [ us in orbit’

“Will do”

“Are we going to be OK Wash?” Mal is worried but as the controls respond Wash appears relieved

‘Nah were good’ eases the ship back into orbit ‘Were A OK Mal’

Smiles again

“promise me you’ll never smile again when you say that – things a jinx”

Wash frowns

Mal picks up the com from the co pilots side and speaks into it

“This is your Captain Speaking – so long as Wash and Kaylee don’t crash or blow up the ship in the next five minutes we should making landfall on Paquin – it’s…”

Looks at Wash expectedly

Sighing ‘Local time its night where were going’

“…night time on world – so we’ll land and have some restful downtime – Zoe your with Wash in your bunk”

‘Hey!’ Wash exclaims indignantly

Smirking Mal co

Comments
Thursday, 25 January 2007 12:30
I tried a more sscript like method for epesode 2 with a couple of camera shot comparasons (blame my Film studies class at college) in the next chapter i will introduce a new charater i created in the serenity role playing game (but we won't see him and he won't join the crew)
orriginally simon stayed on the ship but this way i can add a bit of simon/kaylee romance into the mix
Thursday, 25 January 2007 16:20
Well...I gotta say I am both liking where you're going and that you're coming along nicely with the writing of tales. Not perfect, since I noticed more than a handful of tiny boobs...but definitely had leagues less issue reading it;D

So...Serenity's past owner has turned up, eh? That's gonna make for some fun. Especially if there's something valuable or dangerous hidden somewhere aboard that the BDHs don't know about;)

BEB
Friday, 26 January 2007 07:47
Dude,
good stuff, good ideas, good words and dialog.

But , Dude, ya gotta get yerself a beta reader/ typist/ secretary/ editor ta clean yer stuff up before ya post it.

It's not unreadable, but it takes so much energy to figure out what you mean that the work almost makes it not worth the trouble.

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