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Firefly Season 2:1 the Wreck part 4

Wednesday, January 24, 2007

the final chapter of episode 1

CATEGORY: FICTION    TIMES READ: 2482    RATING: 8.0 (PG)    SERIES: FIREFLY

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(Act 5)

Team 1) (Mal, Kaylee and River)

“Jimmy’s lose!” explains River

‘Got that right’

At the sound of the voice Mal turns but is slammed hard through a door and into a wall – river attacks but Jimmy is like a phantom he whirls her around throwing her into Kaylee and rushes after Mal who has just staggered up slamming him against the wall again before closing and jamming the door – jimmy waits in the darkness for his prey to get up a smile playing on his face

Reaver group) the Reavers are attacking the Turbo lift doors with various appenges – Drills, claws and pistons

Smashing the doors open they surge in but the lift is empty – one of the Reavers picks up a grenade, growls and bites it

Team 2) (Zoe and Jayne)

They are crawling along a series of cables when a distant ‘Booom’ is heard, they exchange glances

Jayne: “Well what do you know – they fell for it, guess I owe you twenny Platinum”

Zoe: ‘Keep going – this shaft should lead us to the docking bay’

T1) Mal gets to his feet groggily

“Hey what are you up to?”

Staggers slightly

“It’s not fair to prey on a guy while he’s down”

‘Should I be concerned with fairness?’ asks Jimmy

‘But lets be fair about this – you have a point, I mean what’s the challenge in killing someone while their at their weakest?’

‘Maybe just maybe I’ll give you one chance’

Mal pulls out his gun and peers through the gloom trying to guess his opponents move

Rest of T1) “whys he doing this” asks Kaylee

River grits her teeth as she helps Kaylee work on opening the door

‘War games – huh – boys and their games’

Shakes head

‘Seek and destroy – Target is Captain Bad – to be eliminated post haste!’

Kaylee is shocked “he’s going to kill the Captain!”

‘That’s his intent

Comments
Wednesday, 24 January 2007 10:51
so here it is my first episode of the 2nd season (a replacement for the BDM compleated

I lay the gauntlet down to anyone who can find fault with the masterpiece that is this chapter - my form was perfect and my style flawless
Wednesday, 24 January 2007 22:09
Well...I will take up that gauntlet, jeraxus. Mainly because, while you've noticibly improved in style and clarity, you're spelling is still on the atrocious side at times.

Really? Practice makes perfect. You're well on your way to writing in a manner that will net you lots of positive and helpful feedback. But you still have a few issues to handle;)

BEB

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