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Firefly Season 2:1 The Wreck part 3
Monday, January 22, 2007
Cyborg Reavers, an insane boy – the salvage operation is humped and the bullets start flying
CATEGORY: FICTION TIMES READ: 3007 RATING: 5.0 (PG13) SERIES: FIREFLY
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Monday, 22 January 2007 12:09
hey guys - yjust wait for part two - yep weve got another attempt at a traumatised or Alliance experimented boyfriend for River
Will it work out? well that would be telling
please mention any errors
to horatiofrog
to BlueEyedBrigadier
if your reading this i chose that format on purpose - there are ussaly enogh clues in the speech to identify whoose talking plus when its not clear you the reader can decide depending on your knollege of firefly
Episode 2 should be in production after i've finished part 4 - the final chapter
Will it work out? well that would be telling
please mention any errors
to horatiofrog
to BlueEyedBrigadier
if your reading this i chose that format on purpose - there are ussaly enogh clues in the speech to identify whoose talking plus when its not clear you the reader can decide depending on your knollege of firefly
Episode 2 should be in production after i've finished part 4 - the final chapter
13REDLIONS
Monday, 22 January 2007 12:35
<i>Hey, just read this as a first timer on this site. It is pretty good. How does the site work…someone logged me in after telling me about it all.
13RedLions
13RedLions
13REDLIONS
Monday, 22 January 2007 12:35
Hey, just read this as a first timer on this site. It is pretty good. How does the site work…someone logged me in after telling me about it all.
13RedLions
13RedLions
Monday, 22 January 2007 19:28
"if your reading this i chose that format on purpose - there are ussaly enogh clues in the speech to identify whoose talking plus when its not clear you the reader can decide depending on your knollege of firefly"
Um... wow. Ouch. That's just a tough approach to take. As a reader, I want to be able to follow a story without having to stop and figure out who's talking.
I'm sorry, but I can't follow your fic at all! Spelling, punctuation... yikes!
Um... wow. Ouch. That's just a tough approach to take. As a reader, I want to be able to follow a story without having to stop and figure out who's talking.
I'm sorry, but I can't follow your fic at all! Spelling, punctuation... yikes!
Monday, 22 January 2007 20:40
Jeraxus....your plan would be a lot more successful if you utilized a beta reader, since you seem to have a rather obvious issue with spelling, grammar and formatting here:(
Now...I never like laying down harsh words, but even a forgiving person like myself will reach an end to their patience and just forgo reading something if they can't understand it. Struggling to understand who's saying what, where and why every few moments will only net you either a stream of negative commentary or a lack of feedback.
BEB
Now...I never like laying down harsh words, but even a forgiving person like myself will reach an end to their patience and just forgo reading something if they can't understand it. Struggling to understand who's saying what, where and why every few moments will only net you either a stream of negative commentary or a lack of feedback.
BEB
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