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Firefly Season 2:1 The Wreck Part 2

Thursday, January 18, 2007

some action – the crew explore the ‘dead’ vessel and as you would expect encounter trouble (watch out for a cameo appearance by a Reaver

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(Act1)

Dining room – serenity Interior

“its Reavers ain’t it gorram Reavers we gotta get outta here Mal!”

Rolling his eyes ‘for a start it ain’t Reavers’

The rest of the crew are relieved

‘Its alliance’

The crew start

“um captain..me and River I…”

‘don’t worry doc it’s a dead fed…ship’

Smiles at own joke

“Dead boat – its just floating in the black” supplies Zoe

‘oh’ says Jayne who thinks it over before adding ‘ya mean were gonna pull some illegal salvage?’

“you catch on quick Jayne”

Scowling ‘wanna go little man?’

Zoe places her hand on her hogleg and moves between Wash and Jayne causing him to back down

“we done?”

The crew nod there heads

“good got us some crime to be done”

‘Mal do you have to do this – its dangerous’

With a fixed gaze “’Nara so’s every dam thing in the ‘verse, now I figure it best if you were in your shuttle” turns back to crew “we get compromised I expect you to run”

‘there’s nowhere in range of my shuttle Mal’

Turns back “you’d still have a chance”

Inara storms of to her shuttle

“Wash need you on the bridge –remember we keep the coms open and report in frequently – you ought to get back up there Wash”

‘You keep safe honey’

“thank you Wash but try to be more formal in future will ya”

‘I was talking to my wife’

“Sir are you making a move on my husband?”

‘He came on to me! He came onto me!’

“can we get back to the job now please sir”

Pause

‘sure thing’

Wash snorts and heads to the bridge

‘Now that we’ve got the silliness outtove are systems – we go in, in two teams’ looks at Zoe ‘Zoe your with Jayne –your to find the armoury…’

‘um point of interest I guess’

“yes Jayne”

‘Now I like guns as much as the next man’

“No really? We’d never have guessed”

Simon receives a glare from the disgruntled mercenary

‘but surly an alliance ship has something we can sell ta git some coin’

“Alliance weapo

Comments
Thursday, 18 January 2007 10:53
Remember to let me know about any errors and ill get right on it

Part 3 should be ready in a week
HORATIOFROG
Thursday, 18 January 2007 13:17
I for one am really liking this tale. It's keeping me on my toes, and your characterizations are quite good.

If I may, though...you might want to use some sort of system to differentiate which character you have speaking. I can follow along okay, but there's times I get confused as to who's talking.

Looking forward to the next part...:)
Thursday, 18 January 2007 21:16
There's some mighty good stuff here, jeraxus...but you really need to have someone look over your chapters before hand that could help iron out the rough formatting and lack of clear indication about who's speaking and when. You have some really great ideas down here...but they're getting lost in the jumble.

BEB

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