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The Losing side, chapter 32

Sunday, December 24, 2006

Mal becomes a mermaid and Wash tries his hand at motivational speaking, but a malicious Alliance guard ruins their attempts to lighten the mood. This is a continuation of my post-war drama with Mal and Wash in a POW camp.

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Gray was lying on one of the now bare metal platforms in the far corner of the darkened building, and Mal approached with Khiloh’s supplies. “How you feelin?” he asked.

Gray didn’t move. “Rutting wonderful,” he said sarcastically, a very slight quiver in his voice belying his tough tone. Mal fetched a cup of water, handing it to Gray along with some of the pills Khiloh had given him. The man accepted it silently and then turned away, and Mal let him be, looking at the other members of the downcast group in the darkness. Nobody spoke, and Mal made his slow and frustrating way over to his bunk.

**

There was a sad, uncomfortable silence in the small building the next morning. Mal had slept easily enough, having spent so much time sleeping under combat conditions that the lack of minor comforts didn’t faze him. The others were awake most of the night, lying unhappily on the cold metal platforms trying to imagine themselves warm and comfortable. Every time one of them would start to drift off, the very awake Gray or the sleeping Mal would shift position and the sound of chains grating on the metal bunk would jerk them awake. When day finally dawned on the seemingly endless night, nobody spoke or moved about much.

Mal’s eyes blinked open sleepily, and he stretched with a yawn, startling at the abruptly loud sound of the shackles attached to his ankles. He rubbed a sore shoulder and glanced around sheepishly to see who he might have awakened. Seeing the others were awake, he laid his head back down and closed his eyes.

Finally Wash couldn’t take it any more and rolled to a sitting position. “Guys? We’re all friends, right? Can we act like it, please? I don’t know about the rest of you, but I’m about miserable with this suffering in silence nonsense. We’re having a rough spell, and I reckon we need each other right about now,” said Wash.

Mal opened his eyes and looked at the pilot. He looked cold and unhappy, but his voice was steady and he met Mal’s eyes with an affectionate smile. Ma

Comments
NBZ
Sunday, 24 December 2006 16:04
Good to see you back!

The Khiloh stuff is intriging.

But I want to see some ViolentMal. he is getting a little too soft. Well not really, but ya know... :)

PS is this a Mal/Wash backstory or a Mal backstory with other significant people?
Sunday, 24 December 2006 17:37
What a lovely holiday surprise to find a new chapter here! Thanks.

Another intriguing chapter developing this storyline and the characters. My favorite line was: The puzzlement in his eyes made him look like a confused beagle. Good description.

Mal does seem a tad soft, as Gray was questioning him. I keep expecting the explosion, or the turn to darkness.
Sunday, 24 December 2006 22:06
Thought I'd chip in on violent Mal......I can't wait to do more of that myself, but remember what happened last time I wrote him into an action scene? With him in a POW camp, I really can't write him into anything particularly violent unless I either don't mind him dying at the hands of the Alliance, or he's the victim of said violence. He's trapped in a situation where he really can't be himself here. The most he can do without getting killed is be cranky and snarky from time to time. But I do have some interesting plans for after his release - let's just say the death toll is already up to six ;) Fear not, oh bloodthirsty ones.....he just needs to get his gun back first :)
Sunday, 24 December 2006 22:08
Oh, sorry - missed a question. It started as a Mal backstory, but Wash is becoming a bigger and bigger part of it. The focus will always be Mal, but I find Wash getting more and more "screen time."
Monday, 25 December 2006 00:12
Ah, such a good Christmas present...

I'm trying to be a helpful critic and pick out something I thought was particularly good, but I just liked it all too much to be specific about any one bit. Bring on the Mal-getting-his-gun-back!
Tuesday, 26 December 2006 21:15
Brilliant to see you posting again, I hate the waiting between chapters so this was a great reason to celebrated. I am glad we finally got Gray's story, it makes him more human. I can't wait to see how you are going to get our boys out of their and wonder who will go with Mal when he takes his revenge. Ali D :~)
You can't take the sky from me
Wednesday, 27 December 2006 21:59
Oh...I don't think Mal's gone soft. I think he's gone flexible: able to bend and flop over when struck but come back with a vengeance when allowed. I get the feeling that when Mal's finally free of the POW camp...there's gonna be a reckoning. Probably during his inaugural U-Day bar fight;)

Still...I am concerned for Khiloh. Just hope he wasn't on duty because of something serious but not fatal with his son. Cuz if either he's dead from Alliance retribution or stemming from his son's death? I don't know how Mal and Wash will deal with knowing the truth...

BEB

P.S. Before I forget....loved how you humanized Gray with the story about the Alliance's actions during the aerial portion of the Battle of Serenity Valley. Especially how it makes a lot of sense about why no medships tried to rescue the wounded once the surrender had been offered!
Friday, 29 December 2006 14:48
Beautiful continuation of a captivating story. I'm always glad to see secondary characters given a real backstory to justify their actions. Makes them more concrete, more human.

You have a gift for relaying the horrors of war with good taste. Keep up the excellent writing.


"May have been the losing side. Still not convinced it was the wrong one."


Rob O.
Thursday, 04 January 2007 18:10
Fantastic chapter, as always. *g*

On the one hand, it was hard for me to imagine Mal being goofy enough to do the mermaid thing, but otoh, he's not quite as embittered here as he is 6 years later when we first meet him, and I can see him doing everything possible to boost morale, so, yeah, I'll buy it. *g*

Everything else was spot on. The sadistic guard, the medevac ship, Mal's support of Gray in the aftermath of telling his story, Wash's worry for Khiloh, all marvelous.

Looking forward to the next chapter!

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