Blue Sun Room FICTION - GENERAL

The Losing Side, chapter 30

Monday, October 16, 2006

30 chapters already? Egads! Anyhow, post-war POW fic for those of you not already reading it. This chapter deals with the aftermath of the escape attempt.

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Nobody spoke at first; the bleak little housing unit served as a home and a refuge, and there was a sense of relief that came from being back inside. Inside might mean grey walls, cement floors, and metal bunks, but also warmth and friendship, even comfort. Unfortunately, it trapped them as well, preventing them from taking time alone to recover from the rush of hostility, fear, and adrenaline.

Wash walked to a corner of the building and pressed his head into the wall, shaking. Tears trickled from his eyes as he thought about what Gray and Straaker had just gone through, and what might happen to them now. In his mind’s eye he saw Khiloh standing before them, exhausted and betrayed. Lacking the ability to do anything about it, Wash pressed closer to his corner and simply grieved.

Zeke sat heavily on a bunk and sighed, burying his head in his hands. A million confused thoughts were running through his head as he questioned whether there was anything he could have changed, any way he could have stepped in to prevent what he’d just seen.

Matty retreated to the back of the building, breathing heavily. His heart was pounding as he tried to process the implications of what he’d just seen and wondered if their easygoing friendships had been destroyed. He relied on the relaxed conversations to keep him sane, and now everyone seemed primed to hate one another. He curled up on a far bunk in misery, unwilling to face the others.

Mal simply stood. He stood just in front of the door, able to see faintly through the back window what was happening outside. His own heart was hammering his chest, but he didn’t notice. Straaker was on his feet and being led out of the yard. Gray was dragged to the gate, struggling weakly, and Mal watched as it was rolled shut and one of the guards handcuffed Gray’s limp form to its bars.

Khiloh walked away with the rest of the group, leaving one of the three other officers outside the gate, and Mal looked away. Almost by instinct, he took stock of the men inside th

Comments
Monday, 16 October 2006 14:49
So...very...Mal. Just spot-on with his wisdom, introspection, humor, everything. I could totally see him behaving this way to everyone. Nicely done!

I'm on tenterhooks, waiting to see what happens next! And, whee, I'm all caught up. *g*

"I love my captain."
Monday, 16 October 2006 23:07
Always do a little celebration tap dance when I see you have posted a new part and as always you do not disappoint. Loved this, you had Mal spot-on and that was a neat little insight with Wash. Somehow I think things are going to go even further downhill for Gray with Khiloh not meeting Mal's eyes as the gate is opened. Hope the next part is up soon! Ali D :~)
You can't take the sky from me
Tuesday, 17 October 2006 06:08
Oh wow...this was a brilliant chapter, jetflair! Especially how you had Mal deal out some hard-earned wisdom to housemates and his conversation with Grey in the end. Though I do gotta wonder about whether Wash's comments about getting beaten and chained up to the fence relate back to his earlier comments about pulling all manner of crazy shit to make himself seem tough for breaking during interrogation...

BEB
Tuesday, 14 November 2006 13:19
Sorry I'm so far behind. Excellent chapter. Just be careful of repitition within conversations. Otherwiese, wonderful characterization.

"You got a wife? All I got was that dumb-ass stick what sounds like it's rainin'."

Rob O.

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