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Tom, Amos, and Claire still had their guns trained on Mal and Zoe as Zoe turned to face them, her sidearm already in her hand. Mal’s hand rested lightly on the butt of his pistol, though he hadn’t drawn it.
“Better tell your first mate to stand down, Mal. Ain’ no way she can drop more’n one of us before we drop both of you.”
Mal stared into her fiery green eyes with his cold grey eyes, his face devoid of emotion. He was determined not to let her see any sign that he was disappointed in himself for letting her get the better of him. Looking over at Zoe, he let her know that they had no choice with a nod of his head, causing her to lower her weapon but not holster it.
“Ya see Mal, two can play at the game of turning on someone when it is least expected. Now I’d call us even, though I should find some way to charge you interest for the three years it took to run into you again.”
“This is nowhere near the same,” he exclaimed angrily, his voice rising but barely contained. “I saved your ass today, so you decide to rip me off in return, not to mention a bullet in an uncomfortable place?”
“It sounds exactly the same to me,” Claire snarled, not backing down an inch. “There I was, working to get the feds off of your trail, and what did you do? You tossed me out on my ass, no explanation, no apology, nothing. I figure you owe me the difference in the money, so I think I’ll keep it.”
“Getting the feds off my trail, Claire? You were talking directly to them! Seems like quite the opposite...”
“He was a Browncoat sympathizer, you moron!” She was practically yelling her arguments at him, the rage evident in her face. “Which I told you a countless number of times, you are just too stubborn to listen. He is a Browncoat I knew from t
Love Jayne's reaction to the gold and Simon's to Mal's wound.
Looking forward to the next chapter!
"...continuing to stare at her with venom and cold steel in his eyes." Liking this line. Can see Mal in that pose.
“That’s enough. I got shot, that’s all. Crazy woman shot me in my ass.”~~LOL @ this whole exchange, Zoe asking if it's bad, Mal's response and then Mal imagining Simon having to work on that.
"...weighing the heft of the solid block..."~~Good line, always have liked the word "heft".
Pretty good Jayne in this part. Good voice for him.
Excellent fight or flight response, very believable for Claire: "...she could see the green glow of an electromagnetic net. She stood, instinctively reaching for her gun as she realized that it was a futile reaction."
“So, he took one in the ass?”~~LOL, Simon! “Yeah, but it wasn’t the first time.”~~HEH HEH, Wash! And good on Mal for ordering Jayne get gunshot attention first. That's our cap'n.
“Claire Jameson, if you present yourself at once I will guarantee that you and any who are with you will be allowed to leave this ship alive. Otherwise, you know I can send a current through the ship and fry you all from the inside out. Make sure you keep your hands where I can see them.”~~Good line. You've an eye and ear for threatening behavior-type dialogue.
Good fic part here, River. Folks ain't reviewing people's fics much lately. Even Frell's smut don't get much play. Don't let non-reviewers keep you from writing though. On to the next part.
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