Blue Sun Room FICTION - GENERAL

From Bad to Worse, pt 04

Friday, August 11, 2006

The gold is recovered, and a getaway is planned.

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“Keep your hands where I can see ‘em, both of you.” Claire smiled, happy to have the advantage on this infuriating man for once in her lifetime. “Now turn, slowly, and I’ll put a bullet in either of you if your hand goes anywhere near iron.”

Mal and Zoe simultaneously lifted their hands to shoulder level, both turning an about face to their left. They didn’t risk a glance at each others’ faces, not wanting to give away their relative advantage. Upon verifying with his eyes what his ears had already told him, his face broke into a toothy grin.

“Claire Jameson, how wonderful it is to see you again,” he said as he continued smiling, the sarcasm dripping heavily from his words. “To what do I owe this, uh, pleasure?”

“Seems to me you are having a pretty bad day, an’ I thought my presence might make it better.” She stated, the sarcasm in her voice equaling Mal’s as she loosely held her pistol on him. Tom and Anya had entered the room behind her both with weapons trained on the pair, and they could see Amos in the hallway scanning the area, oblivious to Jayne’s hiding spot. “Your crew’s up and left with your ship, you are still the same sad and lonely man you always were, and I just caught you red-handed packing up my gold.”

Mal winced a little, but kept the huge smile on his face. “You always were such a little ray of sunshine Claire, it’s a wonder you have been reduced to petty thievery. I suppose the people with you have personalities that are just as shiny?” Mal’s hands went from being halfway raised to being crossed over his chest. “So what now dearie? It’s your move.”

“Well, I think you and your first mate here are going to carry my gold out and load it on my mule, then lie down in the dirt like the snake you are as I fly off in the only ship that is still here.”

“Seems like you’ve got it all figgered out then.” Mal quipped, not taking his eyes

Comments
Friday, 11 August 2006 18:13
ahhh, the saga continues *puts empty popcorn bowl next computer*

Very action packed and enjoyable. I love that Jayne is the guy who didn't get caught by claire. I mean if you've got one thing in life your good at... and i guess that's Jaynes.

I enjoyed hearing the mal/claire money bantering. I'm so excited to see where this is headed and how River's comments fit in.
Friday, 11 August 2006 18:13
ahhh, the saga continues *puts empty popcorn bowl next computer*

Very action packed and enjoyable. I love that Jayne is the guy who didn't get caught by claire. I mean if you've got one thing in life your good at... and i guess that's Jaynes.

I enjoyed hearing the mal/claire money bantering. I'm so excited to see where this is headed and how River's comments fit in.
Friday, 11 August 2006 18:14
*furrow's brow in annoyance to the double post*

Curses you "submit" button!!!
Saturday, 12 August 2006 15:29
So many good lines in this one, I can't pick them, all out. But these few were just great.

>I can make you hurt like you have never hurt before, and I’ll sit here and watch you slowly bleed out from parts of you that would be better off never seeing the light of day again.”

Ahh, i really do like Claire.

>“You do that, dear,” Jayne cocked his high powered rifle loudly, “And you’ll be breathin’ through a hole the size of a grapefruit for the last few seconds that you’re alive.”

Ahh, so very Jayne. Great comment!

>“You can’t win by distracting me, Simon, it just won’t work.”

I just love River!

Hope you don't keep us waiting long for the next chapter.
Sunday, 13 August 2006 04:46
Ah...River..Goddess....you bring us such shininess;)

Definitely been missing this series, and I find the predicament you've placed the BDHs, Claire and her crew in to be totally par for the course:)

Oh...and your Mal/Claire banter was brilliant;)

BEB
Thursday, 17 August 2006 02:31
It's taken me a while to get to this. Sorry, you have a great series here and I'm excited to get back to it.

Simon closed his eyes in concentration, feeling another headache coming on as a result of trying to understand what was going through his sister’s mind. *Man, what a great line...

The grin re-appeared on Mal’s face as he leaned back on the crate they had found the gold bars in, his arms still crossed across his chest. “I have a better idea. How about you and your man-apes carry my bags full of my gold down to my new mule?” *Again, Mal, the deal maker at his best, loved the Claire - Mal exchange here. Great job!

“We wait. We pray. We hope that the feds act like feds normally do.” *Yeah! You know it too!

This is a great story Riv...I'm glad you're doing it.
Wednesday, 17 January 2007 01:17
I was reading this and I realize I do it all the time too... do we really think that River sits there and counts holes? And if so, is it really just a bunch of holes to her? Remember in the Message, she counted to see if the storm was coming or going... or Objects in Space, the gun was a tree branch... What is she really counting?

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