I as always didn’t make these characters, that was Joss.
Washie thanks again so much, your wonderful guidance is always appreciated, and your comments make for a shiny day. Also a BIG thank you to The Datsuns for the title…for those of you who don’t know it both them and I are from New Zealand, and as a result I felt compelled to write them into my fic somehow…harmless promotion I guess.
Sky is Falling
The first few days back on Serenity had settled into a kind of a comfortable routine. Enhanced by the fact that upon their return no one save her and Kaylee looked any differently at each other. Mal had been his usual self, insulting and boisterous, but still reasonably personable.
Simon was still incredibly besotted with Kaylee, and with River very much coping better with her condition he would no doubt be taking more of an interest in her. Inara mused on this for some time, then thought that perhaps River may be her best bet at assisting in subtly discouraging the younger man. Not that she was worried about his reaction so much; she just didn’t want Simon to be crushed when the truth about Inara and Kaylee’s relationship reached him. Inara also figured that River would understand. In the young woman’s more lucid moments she had shared with Inara, she seemed to have a great grasp of (the concept of) empathy. Inara also had the strangest feeling that River would understand more than most about her and Kaylee’s relationship; the companion had noticed how River had stared a little too intently at her and Kaylee as they sat at the dinner table on their first night back.
Still, the young girl did have a habit of staring…'I’m probably just over thinking, splitting hairs as Kaylee would say’. Inara laughed, and returned to her usual routine. Much of her day she would busy herself looking into clients that she could take, making plans for her impending departure from companion life, and when the day was done she'd find her Kaylee. Or if Kaylee beat her to it, she would go seek out her lover.
Mostly they
~'bout damn time
Serenity's heart turned and hissed like the churning maelstrom of some forgotten poetic manuscript.
~Excellent descriptive words here.
"So help me god, if you give me and ‘Nara any more grief you best be looking for a new mechanic…good luck findin’ one that knows Serenity like I do."
~Right on, Kaylee !!!!!
Mal eventually being understanding about Kaylee and Inara is really cool.
Inara strode out of her shuttle like a cool breeze off a glacier, with little purpose, but a single mind to gereally good descriding,,,i like,,it was awsome cowboy,,,keep on going!!!!
And why do I get the feeling that Mal's got a plan percolating in his head right now to help Inara out;)
BEB
This was dripping with lots of beautiful description and it flowed exceptionally well.
I LOVED this. Especially the parts where we, as a reader were inside the mind of the Companion. Lots of great touches there, like suggesting that River paints or plays solitaire in the lounge. It described daily life on board Serenity beautifully.
My favourite part had to be when Mal caught Inara and Kaylee in a lip lock. It was bloody fantastic! My jaw dropped when I read that part. I had no idea how he was gonna react! It was a fantastic moment that was handled perfectly - and made even more brilliant with the interruption by Wash. :D
It was SO good.
The character voices were bang on, and the Book/Simon moment at the end was a great touch.
This was pure gold. I am off to read the next chapter.
Well done Cowboy!
- Cos.
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