As usual I didn’t make these characters I just get to play with them, all credit for creation goes to the Joss.
To Washie, thanks again for the Beta, could have done it without ya, your comments always bring a smile to me face. People this woman deserves a prize. CosmicFugitive it must be said thanks for the help that night I was bashing my head against a wall and ya helped out with a bit of Mal speak (I don’t care that you said I did all the work! It was still helpful man). Eric Sardinas must be thanked for the title, there’s a lot to be said for learning from a bluesman people. But enough chit chat.
Killin’ Time Blues.
Inara stepped down from her shuttle’s airlock and walked out into the ship's hold. She surveyed the somewhat shabby but all the same loved ship she now felt was more home than anywhere else. Sighing contently and humming a tune she remembered from when she was a child she headed for the ship's galley.
It was funny, she mused, how something as simple as being held by someone, or just spending a night cuddled up against them could cast such a radiant glow on life. It seemed that the whole of Serenity had been tinted two shades of brighter drab and rust. She smiled as she slipped into the galley like a finely perfumed rose in the stream of an ornamental garden.
Book was seated at the ship's dining table reading as he often pleased. He looked up to smile at Inara, but his expression flashed briefly to that of a far too knowing look.
"Fine day isn’t it."
"Mmmm…it does look that way." Inara smiled as she moved to the food lockers to fix herself some tea and perhaps a late breakfast.
"I trust that you found your silver lining Inara." Book smiled knowingly, closing his book. Inara smiled while dropping her gaze.
"Mmm… I think it found me more than anything."
"Humm…they often do. It's nice to know that in a universe this big solace can be found right under one's nose." Inara smiled at this, Book had a tendency to be a somewhat wily man at times and this didn’t surprise he
It's Mal's second comment after Inara leaves the dining room; I can see him fume over her supposedly being a "whore" but the use of "tchen wah" seems a tad bit too much, even for Mal in a grumpy mood.
I say this mainly cuz I couldn't see Mal get pissed enough to call Inara a drunken slut (English translation of "tchen wah") unless they had really had gone at it verbally. Mal would be peeved, confused and probably a bit sad...but irate enough to go that low? Possible...but I can't really accept it. Maybe the whole fact Book just smirked at Mal and dismissed the matter as just another spat between Mal and Inara. Personally, I think Book would have torn Mal a new a-hole for getting that crude and demeaning in his remarks.
Now...you're the author here, and it's your call about what the characters say...but Mal insulting Inara like that just seems a tad bit OOC to me:S
BEB
I do appreciate the advice though. may be you should post that in the refrence section so others dont make the same mistake i did. I could go on, but i wont, pehaps BEB this is a sign you should perhaps write your own series on these two and let the characters speek how you would have them.
I also loved the sections that dealt with Inara's inner thoughts. It was beautifully written and completely in character.
The talk with Simon, and the following rendezvous with Kaylee was great too.
I'm loving this series a lot! It's chockablock with emotion and a lot of heart. Roll on part 5! Supershiny work Cowboy.
- Cos.
*hysterically searches for part 5*
Post Your Comments
You must log in to post comments.