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The Way Chapter Four

Thursday, April 6, 2006

Life on the farm isn't all it's cracked up to be. All kinds of truths will come to light in this one. Much talk and less action in this one. Critiques welcomed.

CATEGORY: FICTION    TIMES READ: 2402    RATING: 9.0 (PG13)    SERIES: FIREFLY

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Disclaimer: Joss Whedon et al own the characters, ‘verse and everything else in them. I’m only playing with his toys and not making a single bit of credit off this.



Thanks to Jacqui for the helpful advice. And I'm glad you liked the pic!

See Chapters one, two and three.



Rating: Teen and up



Chapter four

For the fifth time, Jayne cursed a streak that would have even made Mal reddened. For the fifth time, Jayne silently wished for Kaylee to arrive on the scene. She was the mechanical genius. He was just a merc. And mercs didn’t know how to fix gorram ta ma duh tractors. This was not his area of expertise.

Holding his finger to his lips, he sucked on the blood that was freshly sprung from the screwdriver that Jayne had lost a grip on and jammed into his finger. Examining his wound, he sat on the hard ground and leaned heavily on the tractor tire.

This wasn’t where he was supposed to be. No way in ruttin hell was he supposed to be trying to farm a farm that weren’t meant to be growing anything other than dirt. It was crazy and it was just the kind of stubborn that his mother was known for. The woman was determined to claim her stake and damn the consequences.

Feeling his stomach rumble, Jayne rose and trudged the half mile back to the homestead. Maybe some food in his belly, even protein rations, would help him focus and give him the motivation to want to fix the tractor.

The wind blew through the sheets that Emma Jayne had put on the line. It did bring a sense of comfort to her son, reminding him of younger times when the dirt had been a playground. He got swatted more than once for playing in those sheets and causing them to fall and thus, to be re-washed. He snorted on the memory and smacked his hands across the front of his pants to clear away some of the dust. With the amount of swirling debris, he didn’t see how his playing with them made a bit of difference. Sheets always had a bit of brown to them.

He entered the small home through

Comments
Thursday, 06 April 2006 04:42
Ok...first post:) Simon's still a boob but I think he has trust issues from his family being either negligent or cruel, so I can see he has issues with Jayne being an A-hole most of the time.

Still...Jayne has got to bat for the crew on several occasions. Besides, I think a little back-and-forth ass saving will help Simon to see that Jayne is part of the family....the black sheep of the group, but still a family member.

Write on, ArtemisPrime!

BEB
ANONYMOUS
Thursday, 06 April 2006 05:40
Very interesting points everyone made all around. Does kaylee know Jayne tried to turn River and Simon in on Ariel? She may understand Simon's hesitation a bit more if she did.

I truly hope that Simon and Kaylee's issues are resolved at some point and you don't turn this into a Jayne/Kaylee fic.

ANONYMOUS
Thursday, 06 April 2006 05:53
Oh man the more you write the more hooked I become. You are an excellent story teller. Please, please update soon. I'm dying to see what happens next.
Thursday, 06 April 2006 06:33
I'm so sad for Jayne losing his Ma so soon after Mattie. (Not to mention Book and Wash). :(

Most folks are aware of my Jaylee leanings, so I'm crossing my fingers that that's where you're headed. Seems to me that Kaylee's starting to realize that she didn't know what she (coulda) had 'til it was gone.

Now, get on with the rescuin' already...
Thursday, 06 April 2006 08:23
I like this Simon much better. ;)

This chapter works very well, I hope you're not gonna make us wait too long for part five.

And of course I liked the pic, who wouldn't?
Thursday, 06 April 2006 11:20
Good chapter. I like the crew interaction and their realisation that Jayne is probably family.

I hope that Jayne gets rescued and like CH hope that Jayne & Kaylee end up together.

looking forward to the next installment
ANONYMOUS
Thursday, 06 April 2006 12:17
I'm not really a Jayne fan but your writing is so delightful to read that I'm thoroughly hooked on your story. I especially enjoy how you include the whole crew in your plot - you definitely have talent and skill for creative writing! Need more soon!
ANONYMOUS
Thursday, 06 April 2006 16:44
must have more soon!!! i love your writing and you have the characters down.....please don't make this jaylee....(yes, i lean towards river/jayne) simon and kayle belong together even though he's a boob! looking forward to more!!!!! :)
ANONYMOUS
Thursday, 06 April 2006 21:43
Hmm, Simon seems a bit too mean. But maybe you're painting him that way to open up a reason for Jayne and Kaylee to get together.

I certainly hope that doesn't happen.
MERCENARYSONG
Friday, 07 April 2006 03:47
I'm hooked! Please more. longer chapters...am I getting too demanding? and by the way, please let there be Rayne.
ANONYMOUS
Sunday, 09 April 2006 02:42
I think it's about time for chapter five.... and I also see (hope to see) a possible Jayne/Kaylee future. Sigh.
Sunday, 16 April 2006 04:53
How did I miss these updates?! I feel like Simon!

Seriously, good chapter. You have the characters voices down really well.

And even though there are two more chapters I need to read and this is probably not necessary: Let your story unfold the way you want it to (I'm sure you did and I'm pretty sure I know where it's going, but still. It's your fic after all and you can go wherever you want with it.)

Off to read the next one!
Friday, 12 May 2006 01:50
Awesome story. Excellent character voice. I'm desperate for more, so I'm off to go read more.

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