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Carrying the Burden

Sunday, May 13, 2007

Mal does a little introspection and gets a little shock.

CATEGORY: FICTION    TIMES READ: 2839    RATING: 9.0 (PG)    SERIES: FIREFLY

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“Malcolm.”

The captain turned his head towards the direction of the voice and squinted. Too much gorramn fog about the place. Couldn’t make out a hand in front of a body’s face.

“Malcolm.”

Mal looked another way, still unable to tell who was calling his name. He stopped. Ain’t no one called him Malcolm, ‘cept the Feds - then only including his last name - and his...

He pushed his chin out, leaning a little. “Ma?” He blinked and gave his head a shake. Going feng luh, he was. Mama Reynolds had been on Shadow when the Alliance come through. He shut his eyes. Thinking on that was only to cause heartache and Malcolm Reynolds, captain of Serenity, had seen more than he cared to.

“Malcolm.” The voice had greater authority. “Come here.”

Without thinking, Mal’s legs took him towards the voice, feeling himself the thirteen year old boy having been caught behind the barn with Melinda Chiu. He grinned; first girl in his class to start developing.

‘Course, that didn’t matter no more if the rumours he’d heard about her hooking up with Henry Colson were true. Henry’s folks had the largest cattle ranch on Shadow and he was destined to take over. There’d been talk about how they managed to keep the place secure and more than one tongue wagged about purple palms. Figured now that the stories weren’t true or that they weren’t enough to keep the purplebellies from storming.

“Malcolm Reynolds, if I have to say your name once more...”

“Yes, ma’am,” he heard himself reply and wondered when he started believing that this voice was that of his mother’s.

He continued to stride through the thinning mist until a form came into view. Finally, he was able to see clearly and it nearly scared him to death.

Her face was softer than he remembered and her dark hair fell onto her shoulders. Her lips were coloured a little red and her eyes were bl

Comments
NBZ
Sunday, 13 May 2007 01:06
Totally not what I expected. In a good way.

The timeline threw me for a spin once I realised. :)
Sunday, 13 May 2007 02:05
Oh, very O'Henry ending. Well done.
Sunday, 13 May 2007 02:41
Well done! Nice take on the episode's time gap.
Sunday, 13 May 2007 05:07
Commented about this over at FanFiction.net, but I will do so again.

Absolutely....fabulous, ArtemisPrime! The setup for this brilliantly done and the moment between Mal and his mother was just heart-wrenching. Though I was kinda waiting for a Whedon-style twist of Mrs. Reynolds actually being Satan or something in disguise. Hey...what can I say...I like Elvis;D

BEB
Sunday, 13 May 2007 08:03
I figured it out about 2/3 of the way thru. But that don't mean there's anything wrong with it. Very nice...
Sunday, 13 May 2007 09:09
I figured it out part way through as well...but it was the awesome sort of figuring out, the sort that comes with a grin and an internal "oooh, cool!"

Awesome story!
Sunday, 13 May 2007 10:52
Wow, this was fabulous, not that I like the idea of our noble Captain being tortured. Very well put together. Ali D :~)
You can't take the sky from me
Sunday, 13 May 2007 22:53
Yay! =) A new Artemis fic! I liked this very much. I only wish it wasn't so short. =(

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