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That Old Yeh Shen Story - Part IV: Happily

Saturday, March 1, 2003

Taking some cryogenetically frozen breeding stock to Paquin, it's a bit of a bumpy ride as Simon and Kaylee's budding romance brings out the worst in Mal.

CATEGORY: FICTION    TIMES READ: 5349    RATING: 9.0 (PG13)    SERIES: FIREFLY

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Part IV - Happily

There were men waiting for Serenity when she landed at the rendezvous co-ordinates; three men–two heavy lifting types, and one slim and bored looking assistant. The cargo was loaded onto an anti-grav dolly, and flanked by Jayne and Zoe, Mal was escorted into town.

Paquin was a civilised sort of place–miles ahead of most of the frontier towns where they did most of their business. Not as posh as a core would, but then, few of the planets on the Rim could come close to the opulence of Ariel or Osiris. The people they saw on the street seemed well-fed and groomed. Badger would have been entirely out of place, though Mal could easily picture Wash and Kaylee just fine, milling through the bustling streets which were crowded even at this early hour. Mostly, folks seemed to be in a hurry to get on with their business.

The transport took them trough the wide boulevards to what looked like the city centre. Office plazas gave way to elaborate parks, and he could see statues and fountains here and there. The sounds of the city faded as they pulled up to the magistrate's estate, and Mal felt his stomach lurch, seeing a purple belly who guarded the main gate. But he reminded himself that he had legitimate business–well, business anyway–with the magistrate of Han Province. The Alliance soldier didn't even spare Mal and his companions a second look as they were taken around the back to the delivery entrance.

The magistrate's estate was walled, lush gardens surrounding the clutch of single storey buildings connected by small stone and wood bridges. Koi swam lazily through the stream that wound its way between the teak and rice paper walled buildings, their golden scales shining in the early morning sun.

They were deposited in an ante-chamber while, Mr. Bored informed them, the cargo was inspected. Zoe sat on a bench, back straight, dark eyes surveying the landscape. Jayne, on the other hand, lounged in a chair that looked like it had cost as much as all of Sere

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ANONYMOUS
Sunday, 02 March 2003 02:43
Jesus gawd! Is there any more? It has an endy feelin' to it, but I maybe there's more? If not, did I take the lord's name in vain already? This makes me want to slap somebody. In a good way. I'm going to read it 8 or 10 more times and email you.

The overarching "brotherhood" theme is remarkable and something we haven't seen before. Furthermore, the family symbolism hits new depths here. Okay... I'm going to read it again and take more notes.

Christ on toast this is wondermous.
Sunday, 02 March 2003 02:44
That was me with all the commandment breaking. I really do need to read it over some more and take more notes. It says I was logged in but it came up "anonymous" down here. Sorry.
LJC
Sunday, 02 March 2003 04:05
That's all for this story--but not all for me. I'm outlining a new story now, and might have some short stuff finished between now and the posting of that (If I learned anything from "Yeh Shen" it's that 20,000 words of plot-driven fic takes me roughtly 2 months to write, and the Book story? Plot up the yin yang).
Sunday, 02 March 2003 18:19
Wha? Hun? NO! I just reviewed this story on another site and begged you to continue! You can't stop now. (Sighs, and wipes and a tear) Alright. If I can live through Firefly being cancelled, I can make it through another amazing fic ending. Once again through, this is a great story, and I can now look forward to your next new fic. Thanks.
Sunday, 02 March 2003 23:57
I enjoyed this one a lot! Great fic!
Monday, 03 March 2003 00:40
Sigh... Happiness. Flowers and puppies and love, hugs and happy endings. You sure know how to write a spell-binding story. A pleasure to read and I can't wait for the next one.
ANONYMOUS
Monday, 03 March 2003 05:41
Loved it! I enjoyed the Kaylee and Simon plot but I think the thing that really captured my attention was the Inara/Mal subplot. I felt it was very realistically done. Kudos :) I hope you continue!
ANONYMOUS
Monday, 03 March 2003 16:11
Bravo! Well done! You really captured the spirit of each of the crew, and it had a happy ending with the evil cloners getting caught, and everyone being decent to each other. Can't wait to read your next story.
Monday, 03 March 2003 19:33
I had tears.

which, by the way, is my requirement for good fiction.
LJC
Monday, 03 March 2003 20:05
<i>blushing madly</i> Thanks guys, for all your encouragement and kind words! I'm so glad folks have been enjoying the story! Makes 2 months of tearing my hair out over the plot worth it :)
ANONYMOUS
Tuesday, 04 March 2003 22:47
Love the long lenght! Enjoyed the story too! :D Maybe even more than the Kaylee/Simon aspect was the role Mal played thru it all. I especially was taken with his reaction to their cargo this time and the results of their profitable trip. Keep plotting away! Love it!
ANONYMOUS
Tuesday, 04 March 2003 22:56
Wow GREAT Story,

This would make a good episode!

---Greg---
ANONYMOUS
Wednesday, 05 March 2003 19:46
Loved it!

I thought the magistrate getting arrested was too neat, but since this wasn't going to be full novel length, it fit well. (Otherwise, that would be grounds for a whole new adventure)

ANONYMOUS
Wednesday, 05 March 2003 22:41
Incredible story! I love happy endings! Keep writing and I will DEFINITELY keep reading!
FANGIRL42
Monday, 17 March 2003 04:44
This was great! You captured the feel of the characters so perfectly- and I love the image of Wash, Simon, Jayne, the dinosaurs, and the alcohol... ;)
Wednesday, 19 March 2003 04:25
Go get an agent. You should be published.
ANONYMOUS
Wednesday, 07 May 2003 18:53
Ok, glad to see your still writing FF stories JOSS! What a great story. It was a pleasure to read. I didn't think this was long it was short, too short. I was being good and pacing myself then I go and read the rest of the parts in one day. I can't say enough good things about it to actually match how good it was. Thanks for sharing!

Gabe~anangke
Friday, 16 May 2003 04:10
perfect ten.
i can't wait for the next story.
thank you again.
Monday, 09 June 2003 03:42
wow, this was amazing.

(as is all your fic, I now realize)

and it should have come with a warning! The scene with Wash, Simon and Jayne drinking? "My women always come"? I laughed so hard I honestly thought I'd done myself an injury.
Tuesday, 09 September 2003 17:19
Excellent, excellent, excellent work. You really ought to see about getting your work published, maybe not fanfics because of legal hassles and all, but you're own stuff! I wish I had 1/5 of your talent. You really have all of the characters pegged. Never once did I think that anything you've written didn't fit in with Firefly's verse. Thank you for posting this.
Wednesday, 07 April 2004 20:45
i loved this. It seems liek i actually watched this one night. well done.
ANONYMOUS
Tuesday, 10 August 2004 20:52
Canton Here.

Outstanding! I agree with thatweirdgirl. . .seems like this played through my head.

Simply outstanding.
Wednesday, 25 August 2004 08:41
I've just read all four parts in one sitting. How bloody fantastic. Great Plot, brilliant charcater writing (go on, admit it - you hear those voices in your head too!) Seriously, this has got to be one of the best Firefly ffs around. I have to admit, I was surprised by the almost abrupt-feeling ending, but I like how both couples seemed to get a resolution of sorts. I have to admit I'm a fan of both couples, plus the Zoe/Wash interaction struck true, as did Jayne and Book.

I will be on the lookout for more of your work! Best Wishes...
Jak
P.S. Obviously, all that plotting work is worth it!

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