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New Prospects: Chapter 9

Friday, February 10, 2006

(*CONTAINS MOVIE SPOILERS*) After being trapped aboard a doomed cargo freighter by a vengeful Niska, Serenity and her crew have worked together to rescue the situation, and now it's time for some payback...

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Chapter 9, as promised!

9

Ossie Chen was clearing his office. He made it a rule never to stay in one place too long, and the money Niska had sent his way was burning a hole in his pocket. He hadn’t misled Reynolds on that point, at least – it was his retirement fund, or at least it would be if most of it wasn’t already marked for his creditors. He’d already decided, however, that his creditors could go spin.

So he’d had to step on a few decent folk to get hold of it, but that was okay. His conscience had remarkable wipe-clean properties, which was good considering how many people he’d stung in the past.

He was attempting to stuff the last of his bond papers into a bulging attaché case, when a change in the light made him look up.

His mouth popped open.

Jayne Cobb was standing tall and wide in the doorway. There was a big knife in his hand, and the glint on the silver blade matched the one in his eyes.

Ta ma duh !” Ossie exclaimed, at once shocked and terrified. He fumbled on his desk for a weapon, but he had already packed them away. He snatched up a radio ‘com instead, which he brandished like a grenade. Another perk to having money was the amount of hired muscle it could purchase, and his goons were more muscled than most.

“Hey, now don’t go startin nothin’ – I can have this room full a’ my people in a coupla seconds…”

“You mean, all these big, tough hwoon-dans out here?” Jayne indicated the room behind with a flick of his dagger. “The ones lyin’ on their backs an’ faces?”

Ossie weighed up this information and turned to run out the other door, but there was a slip of a thing standing there in a summer dress and boots, hands folded behind her back, head tilted demurely to one side. The way she was smiling made him think twice about trying to barge past her.

“Where you goin’, Chen?” Jayne stepped into the circular room, grinning evilly. “Got us some catchin’ up ta do.”

“Cobb – listen… ‘bout the job… it was all Niska, he threatened me, forced me to dupe you guy

Comments
ANONYMOUS
Friday, 10 February 2006 13:35
Nice start to ones day.

Loved it. Still want more!
TAMFAN
Friday, 10 February 2006 14:31
Read chapters 5 through 7 today and figured I'd better finally register here so I could comment on how much I've been enjoying your story. You said in on of the previous chapters that you were trying to pace it like an episode and I think you've done that. I haven't commented in the individual chapters, but I loved your numerous cliffhangers. Keep up the good work.
Friday, 10 February 2006 15:34
Great chapter! I've throughly enjoyed your story having picked it up yesterday. The action has been easy to visualize and the dialogue on target. Good plot, too. Thanks!
Friday, 10 February 2006 16:01
hee

Yes, let them get distracted on the way...

River calling Mal a curmudgeon...hee
I'm very much enjoying this. Keep up the good work.
Friday, 10 February 2006 19:28
<“We’re going to ask you some questions>
<first,” she said softly.>

WOOT! SCARY...I loved it I bet after that Mal's friends think before sellin' 'im out...WOOT!

<“Curmudgeon: noun. Surly or miserly <person.”

<“Huh. Ain’t never needed no reader to <tell me that.”

<He returned to the girl’s side and <rested a hand lightly on her <shoulder. “Get prepped to take us out <of here,” he instructed. “Full burn, <on Kaylee’s mark.”

<River nodded. “Back to business. <What’s our heading?”

<As if you didn’t know already, he <thought.

<“Sihnon.” He caught Inara’s eye; the <Companion smiled appreciatively. “Got <me an agreement to keep.”>>>>>>>>>>>>

Great interaction...I love it...perfect Mal voice and River bein' all mouthy is what you'd be expecting from his little albatross...

I have so thoroughly enjoyed this story! I mean I check every morning to see if you have updated before I even get coffee...so, there your writting is better than coffee to me...That is the highest praise you can get from a coffeeholic such as me.

I like the pace and I love the voices you give the characters.

I also really enjoyed Jayne and his talk with Ossi about River...I like that they have come to a sort of peace. I think after Miranda he would re-evaluate his opinion of her...if only 'cause she could kick his gorram arse!

You are an all inclusive author and that is rare...IT is gorram hard to stay true to (7) seven characters.

I read yesterday that you have a second story all set up...HOT DAMN! I can't wait.

You are the Firefly/Serenity Fic Author extraordinaire!!!


SID :-)



Friday, 10 February 2006 19:57
Thanks, everybody, for sticking with me through this, my first fic. You guys are the super shiniest!

Got one more chapter to complete, and then I'm moving straight on to the next one. It'll be a canon fic, but set during the Firefly series arc. I wanna write me some Wash and Book this time!

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"I'm babbling like a moonbrain."
Friday, 10 February 2006 22:24
Loving this visual:
The girl smiled sweetly. There was blood drying on the front of her dress.


Taya!
Friday, 10 February 2006 23:39
Brilliant, I was so hoping our Big Damn Heroes would win the day and this was spectacular. I loved the notion of Mal returning Niska's ship to him and using it to destroy his Skyplex and hopefully that *liumang* with it! Hooray for our heroes, Ali D :~)
You can't take the sky from me
ANONYMOUS
Sunday, 12 February 2006 22:53
Brilliant!

Thank you for writing such a wonderful fic. The characters and situations were dead-on. It was like watching (reading) an episode.

I can't wait for more.

~Shinigami_senpai
Thursday, 11 January 2007 17:10
The thoughts while they were watching the Skyplex blow up were right on character. And funny.

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