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Drops of Jupiter - Now She's Back in the Atmosphere (Chapter 1)

Monday, January 30, 2006

Mal gives the crew some pleasing news; Simon and Kaylee make plans. Part one of an I-have-no-idea-how-many-parts fic.

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A.N.: This story will focus on some pairings, but because its not solely about the romance, I put it in general fic =) Other chapters might end up in romance though, so just keep a lookout for that.

"Can I get all crew to the kitchen area please!"

The captain's voice reverberated around the ship, into every room and area. Inara, who had been sleeping after a particularly long engagement with a client, was jolted awake. She groaned and turned over, annoyed at Mal for buzzing her shuttle when he wanted crew. Suddenly his voice sounded again.

"Inara, you as well."

Inara groaned again and sighed, then heaved herself out of bed. In the cargo bay, Book helped Jayne finish his set on the bench press, and then they headed up the stairs together. Kaylee, Simon, and River made the short walk from the passenger dorms and Zoe and Wash wandered down from the bridge. Inara arrived last, draped in a silk dressing gown and trying not to yawn, cursing Mal inwardly.

Mal stood up from where he was sitting at the table and began to address them.

"I know you all are wonderin' why I called you... Well, seein' as we've got no cargo, and no job as of this moment, we're going to be havin' a bit of a vacation." He paused as they all cheered, waiting somewhat impatiently for them to stop. Finally they did and he continued as though there'd been no interruption. "We're landing planetside on Verbena in--" he glanced at Wash.

"Two hours."

"--two hours." Mal continued. "We'll have a week to stay on the planet, enjoy the sites, eat in the restaurants, yadda yadda." he sounded as though he thought it a crime to be doing such when they could be out in the black, but he didn't comment on it directly. Over to the side, Inara looked pleased with herself, and the rest of the crew cottoned on to the notion that it was Inara to be thanked for Mal giving them a week off.

"So we can do whatever we want?" asked Kaylee, smiling. Mal nodded curtly.

"But I expect some duties still to be done. Kaylee, yo

Comments
Monday, 30 January 2006 15:30
Good beginning!! I loved the detail of Inara's sleepy grumpiness, hehe.



However, no way would they vacation on a planet like Ariel. Core planet = crawling with Alliance = Simon and River in constant danger.

Plus, in the episode of the same name, Mal basically forbid them to leave the ship (before the heist) and Zoe loudly refused to enjoy the sights with Wash.

So, I don't think that anyone but Kaylee would be enthusiastic about spending time there. And that's including Simon.

Soooo... maybe that could be changed. Otherwise, it's a very promising beginning. :)
Monday, 30 January 2006 15:36
*sighs* Its just that most of the rest of the story was going to be about stuff with a bioluminescent lake... so unless they have them other places as well as Ariel, I dont know what to do... *scratches head*

But I know you're right, and I already thought of that... but yeah.
Monday, 30 January 2006 15:39
Alright... I took a look at my Serenity Companion guide and there's a list of the planets... Verbena looks blue enough to have a bioluminescent lake, so I'm going to change it to that!

Thanks for bringing it up so that I did something about it!! ^^
Monday, 30 January 2006 16:11
Good beginning. I was going to comment on Ariel as well but someone already did that. THE RPG book has a lot of planets listed. Choose one of those?

I read somewhere that Ariel was one of Osiris' moons. Anyone else read that?

This chapter was far too short! :)
ANONYMOUS
Monday, 30 January 2006 16:13
Excellent start, can't wait for more.

-goblueguy

"I can be terse" :)
Monday, 30 January 2006 17:24
Good start, I cant' even imagine the crew having a WHOLE WEEK off! What the good gorram did Inara do to get that little concession out of the Captain and how much is she going to make him regret it? Love Simon planning a picnic for Kaylee. Ali D :~)
You can't take the sky from me
ANONYMOUS
Monday, 30 January 2006 18:14
Good start. Just a note, though. When Simon is stuttering his asking Kaylee out, you didn't change the name of the planet from "Ariel" to "Verbena." Might wanna grab that one.

This line: "I was just... wondering... if you'd like to.. do something with me.. on Ariel..."
Monday, 30 January 2006 18:16
Aw crap, sorry! Thanks for telling me xD

Thanks for everyone's kind words so far!!
Monday, 30 January 2006 19:27
Okay, my turn to make things right!

If this is set after the BDM, then the Alliance wouldn't be so keen on catching River and Simon, so Ariel wouldn't be such a threat anymore. Just to downplay some of the hype on that topic.

Still, I like how Verbena sounds... It's very... I just like the word. *giggle*

Excellent start to this story, and you know I can't wait to read more (and I can boast that I'll be the first to read more: plus side of being the beta)! Wonderfulness!
ANONYMOUS
Monday, 30 January 2006 19:40
lol meimei, yes you do get to read first xD

As for set after the BDM, I already thouught of that, but I want Wash and Book alive!! Especially Wash *nods*
Monday, 30 January 2006 19:41
Argh, I keep getting logged out!
ANONYMOUS
Monday, 30 January 2006 20:07
sweet, make sure to give us more ;)
Saturday, 11 February 2006 16:53
yay!!! simon does something right for once!!!

b
Thursday, 16 February 2006 03:39
Great start. My interest if sparked. Will read the next chap
Wednesday, 06 September 2006 04:24
Might fine start you got here, Yanlei! Definitely wanna see what kind of hijinks the crew's gonna get up to;)

BEB
CASSANANDRA
Monday, 19 February 2007 06:45
Just got back to reading this bit. It was a great start!

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