Blue Sun Room FICTION - ROMANCE

Wardrobe Malfunction

Tuesday, June 27, 2006

Inara recieves a garment that the House requires her to try on at least one customer, and Inara has trouble dealing with it. Kaylee and Simon each (seperately) help her out. (Ha.) *Maybe* PG13, Simon/Inara <3

CATEGORY: FICTION    TIMES READ: 2930    RATING: 9.0 (PG13)    SERIES: FIREFLY

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Hehe. I wrote this fic a long time ago but I forgot to post it. I like it now that I read it over, I wasnt too sure before... Please enjoy! I love the sensuality in this piece ^^ <3


"Kaylee?" Inara pressed the button on the comlink, buzzing the engine room. A second later, she heard the click of the button on the other comlink being pressed.

"Yeah, Inara?" asked Kaylee's cheerful voice.

"Could you come to my shuttle? I need help with something..." Inara told her, trying to keep some frustration out of her voice.

"Sure thing!" said Kaylee happily. She hopped out of her hammock and headed down the corridor towards the shuttle. Inara moved towards her bed and sat, pressing a half done-up corset to her chest. Kaylee entered the shuttle a minute later, saw where she sat and went over to her. "Hey Inara, what did you need help with?" Kaylee asked, looking curiously at the half-dressed woman.

"Can you help me do this thing up?" Inara asked, standing up. "Its pretty much impossible to do on my own, I already tried..." she said, turning around and showing Kaylee her exposed back, framed by the open corset. Kaylee smiled and stepped closer, looking at how the laces interweaved with each other.

"Its beautiful, Inara!" said Kaylee, as she picked up the laces and began to thread them through the loops. "Where did you get it?" Inara looked over her shoulder so Kaylee could hear her better.

"From the Companion House. Apparently they sent every Companion one. They've encouraged us to try it with at least one client." she said lightly, trying not to wince as Kaylee did the garment up and it squeezed her tightly.

"Well, it sure should work wonders." commented Kaylee, pulling a bit harder as she moved up to Inara's ribs where it became tighter. Inara gasped involuntarily as Kaylee tied the very top parts, feeling uncomfortable and too confined. "You okay?" Kaylee asked in concern, tying the laces into a bow and then sitting down on the bed in front of Inar

Comments
Tuesday, 27 June 2006 17:28
Interesting pairing, but I like the way you did it.
Tuesday, 27 June 2006 18:05
Sorry but this pairing didn't seem right, I couldn't imagine Simon acting like this - it felt like you were writing Mal (all except for Simon knocking on the shuttle door) but Kaylee was completely in character. Ali D
You can't take the sky from me
Tuesday, 27 June 2006 19:40
I don't see why people are picking on this because of the pairing. If you don't like the pairing, that's your issue, deal with it, or better yet, go and flame me for the pairing, because I've written it too. Comment on the writing. Strictly speaking about the writing, I thought the characterization was excellent, and that the story was beautifully, sensually written. This could very well happen, even if some people don't think it plausible.

I think Simon's acting the way he did was perfect. Just because it isn't canon doesn't mean it couldn't work. Please, in the future people, refrain from knocking it because of the pairing and comment on the writing. I know that if you'd written a non-canon pairing, you'd want comments on other things and not rants about it not being right.

All in all, telling people to stuff it aside, I think this was a brilliant fic. It was beautiful, romantic story that I would love to see a sequel to.

Don't let those other people getcha down, hun! I love it!
Tuesday, 27 June 2006 19:55
I'm always so glad to see your fic's Yanlei.

"Its late... why don't you take it off?" he suggested calmly. *uh...hu, thats our Simon.

Great job, looking forward to more...as usual.

Spacie
Tuesday, 27 June 2006 21:04
I got to say, thank you Wanmei. I completely agree with you. Just because a pairing isn't cannon you shouldn't rate a story lower. I'm sick to death of seeing that happen. You should be rating the writing.

I think this is an excellent well thought out piece and I totally believed the Simon/Inara thing. They're so alike I can see it working.
Tuesday, 27 June 2006 21:08
Thank you so much, Wanmei and Mordsith...

I know a lot of people cant seem to accept Simon/Inara, I've no idea why, but yeah.

Thanks to everyone that commentedon the writing itself ^^
Tuesday, 27 June 2006 21:33
I'm definitely not a fan of the pairing, so I won't comment on that. It takes a LOT to get me to like non-cannon pairings, but you already know that:)

I do, however, like your writing. The descriptions are lovely here.

Simon does seem a little off, but maybe its because this story is set during the series and he was never so confident with Kaylee, like he is here with Inara.

Tuesday, 27 June 2006 21:45
I don't see anywhere that the time is actually specified. This could well be set near the end of the series, where Simon becomes more confident, or even after the movie. Before I get harped on for the fact that Simon and Kaylee are together after the movie, let me tell you that even THAT isn't set in stone, so they could very well have broken up and this could have happened.

It's fiction, this is one person's take on it, there's NO reason to harp on the author because the timeline isn't right for you, or because Simon seems off (which comes right back to the timeline, apparently).

I don't see why EVERYTHING has to be compared to the canon Simon/Kaylee pairing. This is something else, this should be exclusive, separate from that. I don't think a review should be based on what WAS in the series, it should be based on what IS in the story.

I still think the story is amazing, all canon-ness aside. This isn't the series, Yanlei, don't let people's limited perspectives in bias of that get you down. It takes talent to pull this off and maturity to accept it. :)
Tuesday, 27 June 2006 22:04
>I don't see anywhere that the time is actually specified.

Well, since Wash is alive, its obviously set before the movie :)

>I don't think a review should be based on what WAS in the series, it should be based on what IS in the story.

We'll just agree to disagree as I don't feel the desire to get into a debate here.

I wasn't even going to comment, but I did want to support Dani in some way, because I like her writing.

Again, if one doesn't want constructive criticism, one shouldn't post in a public forum. At least I tried to be diplomatic in my review.
Sunday, 25 March 2007 08:45
I agree that just because the parings aren't cannon, that it's less of a story. There's plenty of Jayne/River pairings out there, and I can't stand those, although many of the actual stories are very good. Although I'm a big Simon/Kaylee fan, I enjoy a nice break from cannon for a taste of what-ifs. I can totally see Simon beibg with Inara, even for a short while, as she would be a small piece of home. Lovely story.

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