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Drops of Jupiter - Absolute Chaos (Chapter 10)

Monday, September 1, 2008

Inara and Zoe struggle to get away from the Reavers attacking the city. Back on the ship, Mal and the rest learn of the reavers and hurry to the rescue. Can they get there in time to save the girls?

{{{{I'm back, finally. Sorry for the wait. See inside for links to past chapters!}}

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Wow, so… I’m so sorry it took me so long to update, guys. Over a year and almost another half this time! Well, I hope it was worth the wait. Here it is: Drops of Jupiter, Chapter 10.

Thanks to Wanmei for betaing!

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“Reavers.”

Inara gasped and took a step back, closer to Zoe, trembling at the unexpected shock. Reavers? Here? Now? Zoe had a grim look on her face but as usual in battle, her instincts had taken over. Zoe was still maintaining a fierce grip on Inara’s arm, and the Companion could tell the woman was doing some quick thinking, trying to figure out how to get them out of here.

Inara glanced over at the shopkeeper and noticed that he looked frozen in terror. He was a young man, maybe twenty at the oldest, and Inara could tell he’d never seen reavers before but had heard all the tales about them. The Companion wanted to do something to comfort him, but at that moment, Zoe shoved her towards the back of the shop, yelling something Inara couldn’t quite hear as a huge noise sounded outside.

Seconds later Inara realized it was an explosion, and screamed in fright as the front of the shop they were in blew in on them. Zoe and Inara hit the ground hard and covered their heads, trying to protect themselves from the worst of th

Comments
Monday, 01 September 2008 23:04
Well written!

A great next chapter in the series. Lots of emotion, lots of action. Good work!

Can't wait to read more!
Monday, 01 September 2008 23:39
I finally escape and then you draw me back in! Now I'm going to have to keep reading/writing new parodies! Grrrrrrr.
Tuesday, 02 September 2008 10:47
I really never thought we would ever get another chapter from you, it has been that long. So glad you are writing again, please don't leave gaps of over a year between chapters! This was a rip roaring action sequence from start to finish, very good and exciting but I have to wonder why, when Zoe and Inara were faced with that Reaver, Zoe shot it three or four times in the chest before it went down when a head shot would have taken it out and saved bullets. I know it's more exciting this way but Zoe is a professional soldier and Inara doesn't have a gun. Then when Mal and co were being pursued by the Reaver mule I wondered why Mal didn't use his grenade to disable their vehicle and lastly when they were all on the ship and Mal raced to secure the top hatch I kept thinking, why would it be insecure in the first place? But the biggest hit to the gut was you killing Jayne, I can't believe you did that. Also, that River wouldn't have snapped into assassin mode the moment the Reaver hit Simon. Having her act just like any other person going to pieces in the face of such savagery somehow felt wrong. I am hoping that Jayne can be revived in some way, that Simon takes another look and pulls out all the stops. Because Jayne being dead for real would really suck. Great writing, Ali D :~)
You can't take the sky from me
Tuesday, 02 September 2008 20:32
Burnandboil - Hehehe. I was hoping you would see my message! I'm glad I lured you back ;)

Amdobell: Thanks for the feedback! Wow!

I think when I was writing, I was thinking more along the lines of all of them are bloody terrified of the reavers, and even insanely calm-in-a-calamity Zoe wouldn't be quite her normal self. Perhaps that wasn't a good call, but I'm learning =)

And Jayne is really dead, I'm sorry. Prepare for angst in the next chapter, but it should be exciting! Its coming to an end soon, only a few more chapters. I have an idea for another fic, and I hope you will like it as much as this one.

Thanks for your support, all three of you!

And Amdo: Don't worry. I will NOT make you wait so long this time, the next chapter is already started! =D
Tuesday, 02 September 2008 20:35
Oh, I forgot to say about the grenade... I thought about it, but it seemed more dangerous to use it than not, since they were SO close behind them... Mal didn't want to have anyone blown on by flying machinery!

And the top hatch was not secured because they had just landed not long ago and they were doing normal maintenance... Sorry for not mentioning that, I have all these routines that I imagine they go through at every stop, but I didn't write it in at all. Another thing to add in the future! =D
Thursday, 04 September 2008 22:31
And I come back to Jayne dying! What are you trying to do to me! Next chapter soon please! :D
Friday, 21 October 2011 04:00
Such a shiny story, are you going to continue? Please?(:

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