The Shiny Affair of Mr. Pink - Chapter 18b
Wednesday, January 25, 2006
on with the caper!
CATEGORY: FICTION TIMES READ: 2304 RATING: 9.0 (PG13) SERIES: FIREFLY
Mal an’ Kaylee was both leanin’ up against the mule when Jayne came toward ‘em. Mal straightened up as they neared. Jayne could see his hand stray toward his gun.
“It’s alright, Sir. Everything’s clear.”
Mal turned toward Zoe. “Then what’re these?” He tipped his head toward Stella an’ Marie.
“These are Marie an’ Stella Johnston, elite gentleman’s escorts. This one’s Marie.” Marie ambled over ta Mal. “You an elite gentleman?”
Mall looked at Jayne. “These your whores?”
Jayne nodded. “Them’s my whores.”
Marie was eyein’ Mal like she was starvin’. “Can we pretend you’re an elite gentleman?”
“This is Stella. That one’s Marie.” Jayne gestured at Marie with Vera.
Mal was tryin’ ta ignore her. “Gathered that.”
Jayne turned ta Stella an’ nodded in Mal’s direction. “That’s Mal.”
“Mal. Bad. Have you been bad, Mal?”
Mal looked at Marie. Then he turned ta Zoe.
“I know, Sir.”
Kaylee was lookin’ at Jayne from behind Mal like she was afraid ta come out.
Stella spied her anyway.
“Kaylee!”
Kaylee backed up against the mule as Stella lunged toward her an’ threw her arms around ‘er. She let out a nervous kinda laugh an’ gave Jayne a look.
Jayne just smiled.
Stella pulled back an’ held Kaylee at arm’s length. She turned ta Jayne. “I like ‘er. She’s got a good face, Zeek.”
“Jayne.”
“I like Zeek better.”
“Oh! Look at that smile!” Marie left Mal alone an’ joined Stella in appreciatin’ Kaylee. She turned ta Jayne. “I could just spread ‘er on a buiscuit an’ gobble ‘er up.”
“Thanks.” Kaylee sent Jayne another look.
“Ya know, if you weren’t sa gorram cute, I reckon I’d have ta kill you.”
Kaylee’s eyes got real big.
“I thought we were here for platinum.”
Stella turned ta Mal. “Right! Follow me.”
Marie grinned an’ pulled Mal along by the hand. “Reckon you should be up front with us, should somethin’ happen.”
Jayne wated Stella an’ Marie herdin’ the captain toward one of he outbuildings. Zoe followed with her gun.
Kaylee came u
Their plans never go smooth. I love Stella and Marie meeting Mal and Kaylee. And Zoe all "I know, Sir." Heeee.
Keep 'em coming.
Couple of typos, though:
Jayne wated Stella an’ Marie herdin’ the captain toward one of he outbuildings. should be "watched" and "the".
“I’d snap ‘em in half if I thought they was a treat. Just got ya. Ain’t even sick’ve ya yet.” should be "threat". I love those last two lines, btw! So sweet. *g*
Looking forward to the next chapter.
"I love my captain."
Stella and Marie are turning into quite the comedy duo. They are possibly my favorite original fanfiction characters ever.
(That sounds weird. Can you even have original fanfiction? Isn't fanficton by it's very nature UN-original?*contemplates for a moment* Huh. The things that come to mind when you're writing a review, eh?)
Ignore my rambling and just concentrate on the "I loved this" bits, okay? Oh, and write more. ;P
You can't take the sky from me
I love Kaylee's nervousness with Stella and Marie.
The Captain 'an elite gentleman'??
'Zoe turned around at the door. “Sir, you couldn’t even get another firefly for that mangy hide. Sell his guns.”
Jayne tightened his grip on Vera.'
Love it!
"Just got ya. Ain’t even sick’ve ya yet.”
"That’s sweet.”
ahh, jayne knows how to make a girl feel loved.
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jayne always has the best one liners, and you have done that perfectly!!
jayne always has the best one liners, and you have done that perfectly!!
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