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Girl

Tuesday, February 11, 2003

Set during "Serenity." In Simon's mind, River was frozen forever at fourteen.

CATEGORY: FICTION    TIMES READ: 4003    RATING: 9.0 (PG)    SERIES: FIREFLY

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Author's Note: Just a little "Serenity" missing scene. Written as an Improv, using the words "ten, inside, find, colour."

Girl
by Tara O'Shea

In Simon's mind, River was forever frozen at fourteen.

It had shocked him, when he'd guided her carefully from the cargo bay to the infirmary, Inara's coat draped wrapped loosely around her, that her head was almost level with his. In his mind, up until that moment, she had still been his xiao mèimei, all knees and elbows and the eventual promise of height. Dance classes had given her grace, but nothing could disguise a coltish body only half-done growing. Three years had made her a stranger, for all that he knew the planes of her face, the curve of her eyes, the timbre of her voice as she cried his name.

Her hair was longer now, a tangle of waves that flowed down her back.

Their mother had braided her hair every morning since she was ten years old. He hadn't seen it loose since they'd been children. And even then, it had been smoothed into curls, pulled back from her face and held with ribbons or small metal clasps. Whatever had been the prevailing fashion of the day. River had been a creature of fashion then—setting the trends among her small group of playmates. Always ahead of everyone else. Always in love with ruffles and lace. She was every inch the girl, his baby sister.

Now, suddenly, halfway to womanhood, with a child's terrified eyes.

The gold brocade robe brushed the tops of her bare feet as they'd walked through Serenity, the sleeves coming down to the knuckles of her hands. When she curled her fingers closed, they disappeared completely int

Comments
Wednesday, 12 February 2003 01:13
Love how you give a glimpse of what River and Simon's life was like before the academy. You didn't depict River as a completely different girl when she was fourteen compared to now like some other fic's tend to do. Great job, very descriptive.
Wednesday, 12 February 2003 03:47
This is very beautiful. The descriptions are remarkable. Simon's voice is clear and very sad.
Wednesday, 12 February 2003 04:43
Excellent! I like particularly that you didn't make Simon out to be a 'saint' as a young man. :) I appreciate the fact that he loved his little sister, and admired many things about her, but that he wasn't always the overly sensitive & worshipful boy some stories paint him as. :)
Wednesday, 12 February 2003 06:12
I love this piece, all the more so because of its simplicity--it takes the common, everyday situation, and weaves it into a dramatic and powerful vignette. The images are clear and sharp, the emotions strong and real, but the last lines are what tie the whole thing together and makes it chilling. Thanks much.

Phil.
Wednesday, 12 February 2003 14:53
What can I say that hasn't been said already?

Maybe, that this rings true among the sea of fanfic, and makes me really miss the show.
Wednesday, 12 February 2003 18:40
Oh, I got chills!
ANONYMOUS
Wednesday, 12 February 2003 20:42
Shui Ljc...you really feel these characters, No?
Friday, 14 February 2003 08:46
How old are you, LJC?
LJC
Friday, 14 February 2003 16:49
ManiacNumberOne: I'm 29. Why?
Friday, 14 February 2003 19:27
I was just wondering. You kind of sound like me a little in your writing style, so I was curious if we were around the same age. We are. Good strong story.
LJC
Sunday, 16 February 2003 06:40
Thanks!
ZELLION
Tuesday, 08 April 2003 06:33
Ooooh, I want more... Heck, now I want to go rewatch Serenity...
Wednesday, 03 September 2003 01:04
Powerfull vinette. I can picture the little houses emitting smoke! Great job.
Saturday, 03 September 2005 16:12
aaw, cute lil' housies!!! i like it v. much...bad simon, how could you not pay attention on your last day together? tchuh, boys...

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