Blue Sun Room FICTION - GENERAL

The Shiny Affair of Mr. Pink - Chapter 16

Tuesday, December 20, 2005

The plan's laid out. Jayne an' Kaylee finally do some talking. And...

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Zoe was waitin’ fer ‘em about halfway ta the ship.

“Good plan.” She fell inta step with ‘em.

“Thanks.” Jayne shifted in his saddle. “Now you wanna tell me why the gorram hell you didn’t come get us outa there?”

“Nobody said turtle. Coulda said turtle anytime you wanted to, and I’d’ve come in there guns blazing. ‘Sides, seems to have worked out just fine.”

“Fine? FINE? Gorram… ta ma de hun dan was questionin’ my manfulness!”

The doc snorted. “Didn’t seem to be a problem when he was questioning my… manfulness.”

Jayne scowled at ‘im. “You SAYIN’ somethin’? Gorram mumbler.”

“Would you stop? Tyen shiao duh. You’re worse than an old married couple.”

Jayne turned back ta Zoe. “What the hell’s that supposed ta mean?”

The doc let out a huffy little noise. “How soon you forget. I thought you loved me.”

Jayne clenched his teeth so hard his head near exploded. Took all the strength in ‘in not ta leap off his horse and wipe that gorram smile off the doc’s face.

Mal was waitin’ for ‘em in the cargo hold. River, Kaylee an’ Inara was sittin’ in a corner, laughin’. Playin’ jacks, from what Jayne could see.

Kaylee tossed her hair back an’ looked up. She smiled. At Jayne. Not at the doc.

Jayne smiled back.

Took a second fer him ta notice how Inara an’ River was lookin’ at ‘im, too. Inara was smilin’. Looked away real discreet-like when he noticed ‘er. River had her head tipped ta the side. Noddin’ kinda slowly.

“Tell me you worked your wiles, doc.”

Jayne turned back ta Mal.

“Hardly.”

Mal looked at Jayne, then over at Zoe. “Tell me we know where to goods are.”

Zoe smiled. “We know where the goods are.”

“No thanks ta the doc.”

The doc scowled at Jayne, then turned ta Mal. “No thanks to Mr…. Mr…. Obvious.”

Jayne snorted. “Clever.”

“Hey!” The doc turned on Jayne again. “I was doing just fine until you came in and made it obvious we knew each other and then sat there staring at me and ignoring your whores!”

“You ignored your whores?”

Comments
ANONYMOUS
Tuesday, 20 December 2005 07:59
First response/reaction?

About bloody time!!!
Tuesday, 20 December 2005 10:04
Very fine. I especially like the way you have written Jayne. Ali D :~)
You can't take the sky from me
Tuesday, 20 December 2005 10:10
Excellent, beautifool!

Finally the two of them admitting how they feel and an honest-to-God snog! And I loved your description of Jayne's reaction to this.....

"His heart was poundin’. He felt like he couldn’t breathe. Kissin’ Kaylee was like dyin’ an comin’ back ta life ten thousand times. An’ he let himself die. Let himself go. ‘Cause there weren’t nobody in that hold ‘cept him an’ his girl."

Awwww!!!
Tuesday, 20 December 2005 10:48
YES!! Woo-hoo! *does own little Mexican wave* Roaaaaahh!
Perfect, perfect, perfect.

The plan for gettin' the goods from Mr Pink is fine and all, but this here's the real pay-off.
"Any man worth his salt’d realize you was the only thing in the world first time they saw ya.”
Why she didn't just jump him then is beyond me. Girl's got grit.

Can't wait to see:
1) How the 'Kinda Accomplished Jayne Plan' plays out.
2) If Stella and Marie meet Kaylee.
3) How Simon is going to react.
More soon, PLEASE!!
*wave comes around again* Roaaaaahhh!
Tuesday, 20 December 2005 11:05
Roahhhhhhhhh!

*continues the wave*

Jayne and Kaylee... sitting in a tree...

Le sigh.

Best. Chapter. Ever. (until the next one).
Tuesday, 20 December 2005 14:58
SQUEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEE!

They's kissin'!

I LOVE IT. I love how it was Jayne's plan, and Mal accepts that. I love how Jayne and Kaylee were all smily at each other when he came back. I love the KISSING!!! Amazing and beautiful and I can't wait for more!
Wednesday, 21 December 2005 01:24
Heeee! They finally got to the kissin'!

I hope the whores get to meet Kaylee!

So great!
ANONYMOUS
Wednesday, 21 December 2005 07:45
“Simon, I need you to come run tests on me.” She grabbed the doc’s hand an’ looked at ‘im all intent-like. “I think I’m going crazy again. Crazy River. Wooooo!” She turned toward the infermary, tuggin’ the doc behind her.

ROFL!!!!!!!!!
BEAUTIFOOL
Wednesday, 21 December 2005 17:20
yaaaaaaaaaaaaay! I'm so glad someone thought that was funny!
Friday, 23 December 2005 22:51
“Jayne? This is a Jayne plan?”
*pouts* what's wrong with a jayne plan?

“Simon, I need you to come run tests on me. I think I’m going crazy again. Crazy River. Wooooo!”
crazy river saves the day!!! that girl surely is a genius...

An’ he let himself die. Let himself go. ‘Cause there weren’t nobody in that hold ‘cept him an’ his girl.
you evil person. i promised myself i wouldn't cry today and look what you go and make me do!!!

b
Sunday, 25 December 2005 13:14
I love crazy River, glad she's on their side.
"It was like electricity. Like two charged batteries finally touchin’. Lettin’ of a spark. Makin’ his heart jump" This sort of just sums it all up, doesn't it?
XOXBREYOXO
Thursday, 18 October 2007 05:12
I promised myself I wasn't going to comment on this because it was written nearly two years ago, but I can't help it.

<i>“Simon, I need you to come run tests on me.” She grabbed the doc’s hand an’ looked at ‘im all intent-like. “I think I’m going crazy again. Crazy River. Wooooo!” She turned toward the infermary, tuggin’ the doc behind her.</i>

This line as genius and made it impossible not to comment. I LOVE crazy River LoL

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