Bedlam: Part 11
By Kaynara
Mal/Inara. Zoe/Wash. In the wake of the BDM, Serenity’s crew is still trying to find its way. There’s also drinkin’. Serenity *spoilers.*
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The water spouted hot enough to steam but Zoe was cold. Blood red rose petals stuck to her skin, leeched on to her arms and legs. A morbidly romantic bath for one. She slid deeper into the water, feeling the bubbles rise over her breasts, the tops of her shoulders, inching up to brush her chin. So close to the bottom now. She had only to push herself under, let the bubbles and love flowers gather, form a covering on the surface above her head. She took a hard breath and sunk. Oh, the relief. She felt the promise of rest, peace. She felt something akin to hope. Then she felt fingers fisting in her hair, tugging her up by the thick bundle of curls she’d piled atop her head.
Though the stinging soap, her eyes made out Mal glaring down at her, his hand still clutching her hair.
“Gorramit, Zoe. What the hell you think you’re doin’?”
“Looking for her,” she told him, not bothering to be ashamed of her nakedness. “Looking for serenity.”
“That where she is, Zoe? Serenity in death?”
“No way of knowing, sir.”
He slid his free hand down her wet body, spread his fingers over the bump that grew more prominent each day.
“And her? She gotta go down with the ship?”
Zoe had forgotten. She put her hand on top of Mal’s, felt the roundness that was still so unfamiliar, so foreign. Beneath both their hands, something shifted, shrunk, flattened until there was nothing at all.
“No. Sir, no!”
“I ain’t the one responsible,” Mal protested. “You’re the one courtin’ death.”
Zoe closed her eyes, covered her ears.
“Go away,” she whispered weakly.
“Baby?”
She was hallucinating--only explanation.
“Not so, Baby. Could a hallucination do this?”
And suddenly he was kneeling between her legs in the warm water--for it was warm again--and pressing kisses to her face.
“Time to wake up, Zoe.”
“Wash?”
She knew before
You can't take the sky from me
Can't wait to read the finale!
#1. Simon's reaction to Kaylee and Inara's kiss
#2. Kaylee drinking as much as them and not getting a hangover... loved that!
#3. Kaylee's suggestion to cure Simons hangover... I laughed so hard!
Go ahead and break my heart. *g* You have such a perfect hand with Zoe and Wash here... Ouch. Pain. Lovely.
Then everything else. I love plot taking shape! Inara and Mal still excell at un-talking... Kaylee is the cutest drunk ever and then the whole Miranda business, swept under a big Alliance rug, at the very best. Ouch.
The conversation between River and Jayne was great. The perfect person to make her predictions for, really, since he is the one most likely to either misunderstand or completely take them to heart.
Squee! I'm sooo looking forward to the season finale!
and the plot thickens...dun dun dun...
look forward to more :-P
I mean, seriously, just, wow.
This is pretty much awesome in every way. I mean, for starters, you've got plot -- primary, secondary, tertiary, and it's all quite compelling.
Then there's the characterization. Even if this was just straight, unmarked dialogue, I'd still know who way saying what, because you've done a great job of capturing each character's distict voice. It makes their interactions that much better.
Which, of course, leads to the character relationships themselves. I think I'm in love with just about every dynamic on board that ship. Your Simon and Mal have such a fun antagoniastic relationship, and one that makes a lot of sense in light of Simon's progression in the BDM. Mal/Inara is just awesome, the right mix of avoidance and confrontation to keep it both interesting and true to what we know of them. (Plus, y'know, I'm a sucker for confused, emotional Mal.) Simon and Kaylee is too giggly cute, and River's tormenting/flirting with Jayne is hilarious...
I guess what I'm saying is, your writing is excellent, this story is wonderful, and I sort of went through it all in, oh, a day. Thanks for this; I can't wait for the next installment.
But let's pretend I've just said something relevant and supportive, and twice that! <g>
Can't wait for more!!!
Can't wait to read 12A (which I'm gonna do right now!)
Keep up the good work!
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