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Have Wings, Will Fly Chapter 3: Jailbreak

Friday, December 9, 2005

Simon employs the help of an old friend to help the young man escape from the Academy's transit point on Londinium.

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Have Wings, Will Fly

Chapter 3: Jailbreak

Wow, I cannot thank you all enough for the wonderful and encouraging comments. Gypsylife, I took your comments into consideration for this chapter. The idea about the crew intercepting them through transit was brilliant, but for some reason, I never thought transit as in “they capture another ship with him on it”, I thought “holding place”. Duh. So, I hope this chapter gets things moving a bit, moves away from “mysterious boy” to “mysterious boy crew member”. Much more interesting for me to write, too.

I’m excited to actually start developing relationships after this, but for now, we need backstory.

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“He’s so scared…” River whispered in the copilot’s seat as a fresh wave of emotion flooded her mind. She lingered on that thought while the crew continued to speak with Garcia. He had suspect that the Academy had just brought in a new group of unsuspecting young minds to play with. There were about 50 new students that were as of now in the process of being evaluated and sorted into “categories”. It was easy to see that River had been sorted into one of the most secretive categories: assassin. It pained Simon that they could look at a bright, beautiful, young and gifted fourteen-year-old child and think “She’s going to be wonderful for killing someday.” A child. Someone’s daughter, someone’s sister. He just didn’t think that people could have such disregard for life. That is, before he left Osiris.

The crew had been discussing the plan for such a long time. Code names, ID’s, passageways, rooms, the works. It seemed complicated and dangerous to be trying to bust out someone they had never even seen before, especially someone only seen through the eyes of a crazy girl. But River’s conviction was unwavering. She had seen him in the early stages of processing at that place, and knew it wasn’t too late.

River stared at the viewscreen without actually looking at it, and then it came to her. A name. A name for the face that haunted her dreams even while she stoo

Comments
Friday, 09 December 2005 07:52
I can't wait to see the next chapter, more character interactions and development. MASSIVE kudos for the little bit between Mal Simon and Rick. That was too cute. Nothing to make Simon notice Kaylee better than jealousy huh? (makes silent plea for a cute simon kaylee scene next chapter). Keep it up.
ANONYMOUS
Friday, 09 December 2005 18:08
Very good and gypsylife picked out my favourite bit too! Very shiny, Ali D :~)
You can't take the sky from me
CUB
Saturday, 10 December 2005 05:15
Just wanted to chime in with the others and say I'm enjoying this. This is some strong storytelling. Looks like you might have an issue with your italic coding toward the end. Also, your quote attributions can be a bit awkward at times.

It's well-written overall, though, and like I said, I'm enjoying it.
Tuesday, 13 December 2005 19:29
"Hey! Where's Steggy?"
BWAHAHAHAHAHAHA!!!! and go crew for bustin' out arden!!!

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