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Bedlam Part Six: A Part of the Strange Bedfellows Series

Sunday, December 4, 2005

The usual pairings. In the wake of the BDM, Mal and Inara find themselves kidnapped by a familiar foe. Mal channels an old friend, and Inara’s sad past begins to take shape. Serenity *spoilers*

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Bedlam: Part Six

By Kaynara

It’s Joss’s verse--I just borrow it. Leave me feedback!

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River shook with the convulsions, seeing it all, feeling everything. Simon carried her to the infirmary, laid her on the table.

“River?” He held her shoulders, trying to make the shaking stop.

“Oh, God,” Kaylee whispered, near tears. “Poor sweetie.”

“What in the gorram hell’s goin’ on in here?” Jayne demanded from the hallway. “Girl’s hollerin’ loud enough to wake the--” He stopped short in the doorway, seeing River’s slim, shuddering body writhe around on the table. A strange sensation twitched in his chest. Suddenly, she sat straight up, smacking her head on the hanging lamp.

“You’re the one he needs. Go to him, go to Daddy now. Go!”

Jayne scrutinized the little witch, cheeks wet, eyes blazing, hair in disarray with damp strands plastered to her forehead. He looked at Simon who shrugged helplessly, already using gauze to dab at the spot where River had hit her head.

“Something’s wrong with the cap’n?” Kaylee asked. “Oh, and Nara! Jayne!”

“I’m takin’ Inara’s shuttle,” he muttered. “Stay on the gorram ship.”

He went to find Vera.

“What about Zoe?” Kaylee murmured, holding River’s hand as Simon bandaged her temple.

“Zoe don’t go,” River said firmly. Then, whimpering, she lay back down on the table, curling her knees up to her chest in preparation for the next wave of pain.

***

A bullet, tearing through flesh, muscle. Mal let Zoe wrap his arm with a strand of fabric torn from her shirt. And suddenly it didn’t hurt anymore. Actually, felt like nothin’ more ‘n a pinprick. And then he was slipping away again. The Valley faded into the background, the sky going gray, then white. In place of star light and gun blasts, he saw the warm glow of Chinese lanterns. The smell of death became incense, maybe vanilla. He sucked in air, so clean after the filth of the valley. Then he remembered.

“Just a few drops of the antidote, Mr. Reynolds.” A small, bespectacled face loomed be

Comments
ANONYMOUS
Sunday, 04 December 2005 19:22
WOW....umm go Inara!? Great chapter! And I love the cuddling comfort at the end...*sigh* Mal and Inara are just so cute!
ANONYMOUS
Sunday, 04 December 2005 19:30
Wow, didn't know Inara had it in her. I loved that bit at the end, where Mal's comforting her :) She's always the one who comforts other, it's nice that she too can be allowed to break down in someone's arms.
ANONYMOUS
Sunday, 04 December 2005 19:33
This fic is truly top notch. You've done an excellent job capturing characters. Your sense of voice is brilliant--the characters come alive with your dialogue. Excellent work.

(oh, and if you ever want a beta to help you with those small flaws that occasionally make it through, I'd be thrilled to help--first read and all that :) )
Sunday, 04 December 2005 19:39
You have Wash's voice down. The way he talked Mal through the torture was such a beautiful mirror to War Stories. Pushing him and needling, sex and guilt, and althewhile he managed to make Mal forgive himself.

That was absolutely lovely. And hilarious!! You have a great hand for dialogue! Bwaha!

Equally lovely was Inara killing Niska, and her backstory. That's downright fascinating! It's a very plausible scenario, Inara coming from a problematic family and being so awed by the alternative in female role model when her own mother didn't provide much care. Can't wait to hear more about that.

Not to mention, after the beautiful hotness of Mal and Inara in the last chapter, he we get gut-wrenching desperation and warm sweetness. Mal would hate to see her touched by this part of his life, that's true.

An excellent part. Absolutely great! And the best was how soon you posted it, whee!

Looking forward to more!
Sunday, 04 December 2005 19:54
yee-haw inara, always knew that the girl had it in her ;)

fantastico, I love your Wash as well.


can't wait for more as always!
Sunday, 04 December 2005 21:28
Gotta follow the trend here and say this was a right shiny pic of fic:)

Loved how Wash was paying Mal back for all he did for him during "War Stories." Definite Whedonesque moment, though I have to say that I thought the whole "Mal gets tortured by Niska, with Wash taunting him constantly" scene was gonna go on longer...get some more special moments out for our enjoyment. However, Inara knifing the hundan for calling her a whore seems rather right for Firefly...one gets the twisted idea that only Mal can call Inara the W word and not suffer her wrath cuz only he seems to use it with concealed love.

Definite series material, though probably something for a later season or a hypothetical full first season finale ending.
Sunday, 04 December 2005 21:57
I know we all want another season on TV or another movie at least, but this is exactly the kind of story that could slide the 'verse into literary realms. Several other science fiction series and film have more canon in books than on film. I can't wait to read more!
Monday, 05 December 2005 02:20
Absolutely brillo pads! I was hanging on by my fingernails when Inara found the switchblade and decided to send that twisted creep Niska to his eternal unrest. That'll teach the morally bankrupt *hundan* for hurting Mal. So many lovely touches and Wash's dialogue touched so deep with him wanting to keep Mal going the way the Captain did for him when Niska tortured them last time. Gave a cheer when Inara killed Niska then laughed at Jayne's reaction when he burst into the room only to find all the excitement already over. Loved River too. And Mal and Inara holding each other close at the end? Ah, perfect! Ali D :~)
You can't take the sky from me
ANONYMOUS
Monday, 05 December 2005 04:13
Uh----what everyone else said. This is beyond my lowly superlatives of praise. Absolutely love this story!! Thank-you for sharing your talent with us.
ANONYMOUS
Monday, 05 December 2005 16:13
PLease do NOT stop there!!!!!!!!! I love this story!!
Monday, 05 December 2005 16:41
*punches air* WHOOP!!! GO INARA!!!! etc etc

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Monday, 05 December 2005 21:34
This just keeps getting better. Hurry up with part 7!
ANONYMOUS
Saturday, 21 January 2006 09:20
these are awesome! i'm on the edge of my seat! you're a wonderful writer!
ANONYMOUS
Monday, 30 January 2006 03:58
Shiney... I have been going back and re-reading all your works since I started with your most recent, seeing it posted earlier today.. OMG I LOVE YOU!!! hehehe the writing is amazing, keep it up!!
Monday, 10 July 2006 21:10
Love him telling her to shut up so he can hold her. Just perfect.

I'm here late, but catching up.

Incredible story.

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