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The Treasure of Lei Fong Wu -- Chapter Eight

Thursday, September 15, 2005

River discovers the appeal of a good night's sleep, and Inara learns a lesson in macroeconomics

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The Treasure of Lei Fong Wu

Chapter Eight

River was soundly asleep, surrounded by her flock, when it happened.

Voices. In her mind.

Unfriendly voices.

She opened her eyes, immediately awake.

They were not here yet. But they were coming. She could feel them coming. Five of them.

Bad men.

She swept aside her flock and bolted out of bed in her nightgown – one of Kaylee’s too-big hand-me-downs – and ran to the door of her room without turning on the light. She cracked the door a hair, just to confirm what she already felt.

There they were. Five men. Four Sinic men in bad suits, garish ties, and uncomfortable shoes. The fifth man – he was the leader, she knew – was an Anglo who looked quite at home in his suit, even though he disliked the cut and color. He also disliked the four thugs in his employ. He thought they were incompetent.

They had dishonorable intentions towards the Captain. Even if they didn’t know him or know why, they aimed to do him harm.

She couldn’t allow that. He owed her. Four days.

He pinky swore.

Not making a sound she opened the door wider and padded across to the other hallway, unseen and unheard by the criminals who were searching for the Captain’s room. She was reeling, inside, and despite her own internal protests she was lighting up those areas of her mind that They had put there. The ones she hadn’t wanted. The special knowledge that seventeen-year old girls shouldn’t know. The ones They wanted her to have when they crafted her into a tool.

She made it to Zoe and Wash’s door without a sound and without being noticed – They taught her that, too -- and tapped quickly three times. She waited ninety seconds and repeated. She was about to do it again when Zoe answered the door.

“River. What is it?” she asked. She was naked. Her eyes were sleepy. They had just made love a while ago. Zoe had thought it was one of Wash’s better performances, although he lingered too maddeningly long on the foreplay. She smelled of sex and whiskey and

Comments
ANONYMOUS
Thursday, 15 September 2005 05:19
FIRST POST!!!!

WOOOHOOOOOO! :D
ANONYMOUS
Thursday, 15 September 2005 05:19
Oh, right, and this story rocks!
Thursday, 15 September 2005 08:46
Violence, deception and economics. What's not to like? ;)


“I got a gun, though,” she reminded. He quit trying to look.

Hee heee!
Thursday, 15 September 2005 11:40
I second the violence, deception and economics.

And combat River is always fun.

易弯曲
ANONYMOUS
Thursday, 15 September 2005 17:59
Now this is getting better and better! I love how you capture her very real business knowledge - her business, other people's - and combine it with her humanity, letting her gather the information and leading it to its conclusion - and reacting to it.

Perfect.

Not to mention - one hell of an unsettling angle on the stability of their vicilization.


Also: Hee. Guns, guns everywhere.

Lovely chapter!
Thursday, 15 September 2005 18:04
River's solution to excess paper wealth was a nice underscore to her inherent OCD. Another fine chapter, StA!

I like your Campbell character. Reminds me of the blonde Captain pursuing Anonio Banderas' Zorro.
Thursday, 15 September 2005 19:30
Compelling read once again! I'm really enjoying your descriptions of River. It's fascinating to watch her thought patterns dance between crazy brilliant and plain 'ol crazy. I loved that her last little bird climbed to his flyer to "flutter away."

I also really appreciated the scene with her flock, and the fact that you didn't explain what the flock was until Zoe, Jayne and Mal got to her room. One of the things that made Firefly brilliant was the fact that it respected the intelligence of its audience. Joss didn't feel the need to explain everything in detail, either because the audience would be smart enough to figure out what was going on, or because some things just don't need explainin'. That's something you do well here. If we need to know, you'll tell us, otherwise you let us just enjoy the story as it unfolds naturally.

Looking forward to chapter nine!
Friday, 16 September 2005 00:06
Again, bravo.

Mal's characteristic "Huh" - as usual, at the perfect moment.

However, when you mention that the Ginger group is contemplating buying "huge tracts of land," all I can think of is Monty Python & the Holy Grail:
HERBERT: But I don't like her.
FATHER: Don't like her?! What's wrong with her? She's
beautiful, she's rich, she's got huge... tracts of land.

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Patiently waiting for more ...
Friday, 16 September 2005 02:34
puppies. now birds.
reminisant of the stick and gun from objects. things aren't what they seem.

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