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Kaylee's Lament -- Part Eighteen

Friday, August 19, 2005

Because you demanded it -- the exciting part, twelve hours ahead of schedule!

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Kaylee’s Lament

Part Eighteen

The stevedores were doing a fast and efficient job of stacking and securing the freight in the cargo hold. There were six of them, plus a foreman, all dressed in gray coveralls with the station logo on their shoulders, and they all worked with the efficiency of insects. They didn’t even talk while they worked. They took their breaks exactly on time, and were back to work exactly on time. They even seemed to sweat in unison.

That was one of the things Mal really didn’t like about the culture Core. All bland efficiency, no soul. On Polycarp he watched a dozen slaves do half the work in twice the time these men were doing. But they sang like birds while they did it, not enjoying the work, but suffering through it. These guys weren’t suffering. But they were handy when there was work to be done.

He stood on the catwalk, overseeing the details of the stowage. He tried to look as scruffy and disreputable as possible to avoid prolonged conversation – and it had worked admirably. No one had said a word to him that hadn’t been about business. They had been going like this for six or seven hours, now, and they had gotten more than half of the job completed in that time. The medical supplies, pharmaceuticals and hard-to-find items like prosthetics and advanced medical equipment, had been loaded first. Crate after crate of expensive Alliance gear was loaded up, tied down, and readied to withstand the trip to the fictional Heracles Station. The larger pieces were going to be last, the huge, heavy masticator (the part of the TR-10 that processed the raw materials, Simon had informed him) would be the last piece on, first piece off, and it would be loaded up in less than eight hours. Then they could depart the station early.

That would be fine by him. The sooner they were clear of this orbiting anthill, the better.

He was a little wary of the coming shift-change. Wendell had warned “Captain Kuan” that a new team would come in at 16:00 local to finish the job. The

Comments
Friday, 19 August 2005 03:17
Yes, I'm as adicted to telling this story as you are to reading it. I have written over 10,000 words in the last twenty-four hours, and I'll likely start on Part Nineteen tonight.

Hope y'all don't mind.

Lovin' the feedback!

ScrewtheAlliance
ANONYMOUS
Friday, 19 August 2005 03:32
I've been reading them all as they come. Fabulous! Really captures the spirit of Firefly.
Friday, 19 August 2005 03:47
Tis nice when stories are written quickly.
ANONYMOUS
Friday, 19 August 2005 03:57
I love this story! And have never loved something enough to actually post a comment before. I laugh out loud, I get worried, I wonder how they'll get out of it and I can't wait for the next part!

River's "feminine wiles" comment had me laughing for five minutes because it was so true to the character.

All the characters are true in your story and though you ask for constructive advice, I have to say that I can think of nothing. You are really on a roll. Keep going!
ANONYMOUS
Friday, 19 August 2005 04:13
How the heck do you churn these out so fast? Whatever you're paying your muse, double it!

Great pacing! You've got such a great momentum going, keep it up!
Friday, 19 August 2005 04:57
i just thought of something, have you ever writted anything else? because i would be OH so happy to read it.
Friday, 19 August 2005 05:01
I have, and I will tell you at the end of this book. But it was a while back, and I've practiced since then.
ANONYMOUS
Friday, 19 August 2005 05:16
I agree, pay your muse double because quite frankly you're astonishing me with this pace and with your ability to keep the characters... well, in character. Keep the drama and well working quips coming!

Sibeal
ANONYMOUS
Friday, 19 August 2005 05:22
Two installments in one day, you are WAY too good to us.



I didn't say stop!
Friday, 19 August 2005 06:49
I reiterate... I dig this. The only thing I can ask for is more.
Friday, 19 August 2005 08:46
I really, really, really, really, really can't wait to see how this turns out!

Shiny!!
ANONYMOUS
Friday, 19 August 2005 12:30
Is it time for some thrilling heroics? Rock and roll!

-Canton
Friday, 19 August 2005 12:59
IT'S LIKE RUTTIN' CHRISTMAS! THANK YOU THANK YOU!

. . . and i would just love to see some hands of blue just TRY and take this from me.
Friday, 19 August 2005 14:25
YOU'RE addicted?!? i'm gonna need rehab when ya finish
Friday, 19 August 2005 22:38
Gorramit! Betrayed! Can't wait to see those rutting *tamade hundan* get their come uppance. Loved Kaylee being only fighting upset when it came to the thought of losing Serenity - hum, puts everything else into gorram perspective. Ali D :~)
You can't take the sky from me
Sunday, 21 August 2005 03:46
Sometimes, you make me just laugh out loud. Jayne as a Companion? That was priceless.
ANONYMOUS
Wednesday, 14 September 2005 00:10
LOL...this fic is priceless!

And I TOTALLY got the mental image of Jayne dressed like that with the weapons and the sunglasses and--GUH! Way hot.

On to the next part...
ANONYMOUS
Friday, 23 December 2005 06:06
“We’re going to use some feminine wiles.”

“I guess if all you got is a stick, everything’s gonna look like a kneecap.”

“Oh, it won’t be me – I have to fly the shuttle up to the next emergency airlock and pick you up before Traffic Control notices and sends someone to check on us.”

“Whattayamean, it won’t be you? You ‘spect me to play kissy-face with a bunch o’gorram cops—”

“Not you, Jayne. River.”

“River?” asked Jayne, mystified.

“River?” asked River, startled.

“River,” Inara said.

“I have no feminine wiles,” she said flatly.

ROFL!!!!!!!!! That's is so River.

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