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Kaylee's Lament -- Part Seventeen

Thursday, August 18, 2005

The Caper begins . . .

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Kaylee’s Lament

Part Seventeen

When the first surveyors came to this system, two hundred years ago, they found metaphorical gold in the giant mottled green ball of gas that was the fifth planet. It was a titanic Jovian sphere, and it had more than thirty moons – over half of the material in the solar system – ringing around it. Four of the moons looked promising for terraforming. Two of them were ideal. The surveyors called the emerald gas-giant Vajra, and the two moons that were eventually coerced into becoming life-harboring worlds were named Varuna and Agni. Air and Fire.

Varuna was the larger of the two, nearly 10,000 miles across, while Agni made do with a only a tad over 6,000. Both surfaces were warmed as much by the proximity of Vajra as they were the bright but relatively cool star.

Once they were simultaneously beaten into submission by the Chartered Vajra Company, they became warm, lush paradises, and settlers rushed in from the other worlds. Under the political regime in place at the time, Varuna was primarily settled by Anglo descendents, while Agni became the home for the Sino peoples. It was an experiment in peaceful cooperation. As no war ever broke out between the two closely-linked worlds, it had to be seen as a success.

After 150 years of human habitation, warm, wet Varuna was home to nearly twenty million souls, and her sister world boasted sixteen million – Varuna’s prolific oceans kept the total livable land mass on each one relatively equivalent. Varuna made up for it by hosting dozens of gigantic geodesic flying cities, where the rich and powerful descendents of the original stockholders played sophisticated and pointless games and occasionally worked.

Agni didn’t get the oceans – she didn’t have Varuna’s natural water ice to start with – but she did get an Alliance military training facility and the Alliance Exploration Academy. It also got the lion’s share of industrial production, and the eventually lavish headquarters building of the Chartered Vajra Comp

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Thursday, 18 August 2005 19:40
I have a concern.

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You're nearly done and the caper's only started. This isn't going to be an Easy Rider-style ending, is it? All pointlessly killing the main characters?

Thursday, 18 August 2005 19:55
Relax! I won't end the story until it ends itself -- the way it is supposed to be. I'm not going to stick by my "oh, it's 18 or 22 or 24 parts" plot idea if I can't make it work that way. I want everyone to finish reading this thing and go , "Wow!" not "I'm gonna hunt the SOB down for such a crappy ending!"

I'd like to think that the best stuff (and certainly most of the action) is just starting. It's just taken me a little longer to set it up than I originally predicted.

Keep writing, folks! I love the comments! They keep me pounding 'em out!

ScrewtheAlliance
Thursday, 18 August 2005 22:13
More quality writing superbly delivered!!
ANONYMOUS
Thursday, 18 August 2005 23:56
I love my daily dose of crackfic, keep em comin ;-)
ANONYMOUS
Friday, 19 August 2005 02:12
i just started reading this like 3 days ago and cant stop. i need another chapter. like yesterday.. i shiver in fear of the day when this story will be over and i will not longer have a Firefly story to aquire. i guess you'll have to start another story or i'l try another author (with much less success i assume). some dialog slightly cheesy.. but in the Joss Whedon cheesy style.. which i like. this could have been a sweet three partner in season 2.
Friday, 19 August 2005 02:39
Um... Kaylee?

You have to update and update now. I seriously can't wait to see what happens next.

This whole fic is brilliant.
Friday, 19 August 2005 02:49
mmmm . . . rice cakes. They french?
ANONYMOUS
Friday, 19 August 2005 04:10
I have been reading this for about 2 weeks now and I love it! It is really very good, quite realistic to the characters. So realistic, in fact I forget it isn’t the real thing.

I just have one tiny comment to make, and I am sorry if this comes off as picky, but it sounds to me like you want to make this as realistic as possible. The problem is with the Jovian worlds. It is very unlikely that a Jovian planet would warm its moons to a habitable temperature. Jupiter is many orders of magnitude too small to produce heat and/or light other than internal heat from gravity - Jupiter’s average surface temp is –153 C. Most Jovian planets form (as far as we can figure) beyond the frost line, which is too far away for earth-like temperatures. We have recently discovered several 'hot Jupiters' in other systems, but most of those are closer than Mercury is to our sun (Mercury’s average surface temp is 179 C) and thus too hot for humans.

As I say, this is a VERY small detail and detracts very little from the greatness of the story as a whole. I am in grad school for Astrophysics though, and I thought you might want to know.

Keep up the wonderful work! I look forward to them every day.

-L
Friday, 19 August 2005 04:31
i just realized that you posted another chapter before i finished this one... bravo.

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