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Adam's Rib Ch 1: Timely

Monday, August 8, 2005

River helps Kaylee, Kaylee helps River.

CATEGORY: FICTION    TIMES READ: 6811    RATING: 9.0 (PG13)    SERIES: FIREFLY

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Disclaimer: Joss, Fox, many people richer than me. I own naught. Tell ya what, I ever make any money from fanfic, I'll send you all a check.

Comments: This started out as one little scene to help Kaylee get over a few issues, it turned into something bigger and I'm not even sure if it's done.

Rated: PG-13 overall at the moment, not really for this part, though.

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"So there we were," The two voices giggled through the engine room and Simon stopped just outside to listen. "flush up against the wall, when in walks the Captain."

His face reddened at Kaylee's words. River's voice was soft and muffled, he couldn't hear what she said, but there were more giggles. There was a change in the air next to him and he turned to see Mal as Kaylee's voice carried out again.

"And that's how I got the job."

Mal nodded at Simon.

"True story, Doc."

"Cap'n?" Kaylee rushed, red faced, to the door. A non descript engine part in her hand, several streaks of grease on her coveralls. Her eyes flickered towards Simon, but didn't linger. "We're nearly finished in here."

"Simon?" River's face joined Kaylee. She looked from one to the other. "You're not very timely."

"River, it's... uh... it's time for your meds." He stumbled over the words, not looking either of the girls in the eye.

The color drained from Kaylee's face.

"Oh, surely it ain't gonna hurt her to stay a bit longer. We'll be done soon." She gestured futilely at the engine behind her. "I just got a few parts to tinker with is all."

"You go on, Doctor." Mal watched Simon lead River away, he turned to Kaylee. "You got some mighty fine notions, sometimes, but encouraging that girl to skip her medicine is not one of them."

She blushed.

"I didn't mean... it's just." Her brain tried to think up something to cover and threw out the first thing it thought of. "Sometimes it gets lonely here."

"You?" Mal raised his eyebrows, his disbelief obvious. "Lonely in the engine room?"

"Yes." She nodded, quick and de

Comments
Monday, 08 August 2005 05:34
Excellent characterization, especially for River. I had a hell of a time following what she was saying, but that's inevitable for me.
Monday, 08 August 2005 11:35
Absolutely excellent! I am delighted you have decided to post it here where this story belongs. Ali D :~)
You can't take the sky from me
Monday, 08 August 2005 17:49
Very good story so far.
Tuesday, 09 August 2005 04:25
It really drew me in. The story was true to the main characters. Thoroughly enjoyed it!
ANONYMOUS
Wednesday, 04 January 2006 03:43
I've never had trouble understand River, is that good or bad? LOL

S
Sunday, 05 March 2006 17:39
This is excellent fiction, it's complex and compelling. I'm catching up with this series!
Tuesday, 06 June 2006 01:03
This is great. I love the way you write River, which i hear can be very difficult. You do it well. i especially like the line about Zoe glaring at Kaylee's back while they planned the job. great idea.
Monday, 20 October 2008 13:17
I really love this story, I have read this chapter and plan on reading the rest. It sets a whole new meaning to the relationship Kaylee and River can have for each other. Think for writing this and posting it on here.

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