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Kaylee's Lament -- Part Two

Saturday, July 30, 2005

Why you should never call a woman a whore more than three times in one night.

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Kaylee’s Lament

Part Two

Wash and Kaylee stood in the foyer of the Belladonna House – at least Wash was standing up for the both of them. Kaylee swayed in the nonexistent breeze, one hand wrapped around the pilot’s arm to anchor herself. Wash looked as uncomfortable as a man who is happily married to a cold-blooded killer could be in a whorehouse. But he was also a professional.

There were certain duties that one had to one’s crewmates while in port. It was basic, unwritten space law, as old as rocket fuel, stuff you learned in flight school or picked up through your skin your freshman cruise: You never failed to buy a round when your turn came up. You never failed to loan up to fifty credits when a crewmate came up short, no questions asked. No matter who threw the first punch, you backed a crewmate up -- even if you were the only two in the bar. If a mate needed bailing out, you did it even if it meant hocking something or breaking a date.

And when a crewmate needed to get laid – and there was no doubt in his mind that Kaylee needed it, bad – you did what you could.

It was common decency.

Wash occasionally felt a twinge of guilt at the fact that he, Zoe, and Inara were the only ones aboard with a bona fide shipboard sex life – and it really didn’t count for Inara. But then he thought about Zoie naked and didn’t give a (rat’s ass) about what the others thought. The last few years with Zoe made this the best cruise he had ever landed, even with the constant danger, petty bickering and abject poverty. Despite a sneaking suspicion that his lady wife might not approve of his actions, he knew where his duty lie.

The Belladonna had never been grand, but the madam of the establishment had done a credible job giving the non-descript building a shabbily opulent interior. It looked, Wash thought, what Inara’s shuttle might look like on a really restricted budget. Plush pillows, overstuffed chairs with thin upholstery, faded oil paintings done, no doubt, by talented local amateurs, some elegant

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ANONYMOUS
Sunday, 31 July 2005 00:30
*bouncing up and down, clapping thunderously*

What a rich (and tawdry) tapestry you've woven.
-WildHeavenFarm
Sunday, 31 July 2005 00:50
You are officially my hero, you know what!

That was absolutely brilliant. Abso-positively. Gorram shiny too. I don't think I could pick a favorite part, though I adored when it was revealed that Kaylee hit her head on the headboard. I want to be the one to tell Simon, dong ma? ;)

Meanwhile, you keep on writing this genius work. I expect to see more from you soon, y'hear?


Keep Flyin' Under the Radar!
- Anna -AKA- FightOn4God -
Thursday, 04 August 2005 08:39
Shiny!

That is all.
Friday, 12 August 2005 13:35
GO KAYLEE! GO KAYLEE!
*does star-jumps, waves pom-poms and cheers like she's a wind-up toy*
ANONYMOUS
Monday, 29 August 2005 06:22
I'm really loving this fic.

That said, I have a couple of nitpics you might want to address in a future edit.
1. A 10mm wrench is an itt-bitty little thing, wouldn't make much of a weapon. FYI, wrenches are labeled in re. the diameter of the head of the bolt they turn. 10mm is only about 3/8". A 20 or 24mm wrench, otoh, is a hefty piece of hardware. If I were going to carry just one wrench around, I'd make it an adjustable. Those are sized in re. their overall length. An 10" (25cm) wrench would make a formidable weapon. Overalls typically have long pockets for tools like that.

If you're looking for a helpful way to keep your "there"s straight: "They're docking their ship over there."

One last nit and I'll stop picking: In a later chapter you wrote about a scooter that would do 150kph in "under a minute". That is not very fast. A high-performance motorcycle can do 150kph in under 4 seconds.
ANONYMOUS
Tuesday, 28 March 2006 14:20
“You know,” Simon said, cutting off Book’s inevitable snappy retort, “I keep forgetting that. And it is somewhat refreshing – if the Alliance wants me dead anyway, then I don’t really need to worry about how a little larceny beforehand is going to affect the outcome.”

Mal grinned. “Liberating, ain’t it?”
Yes, It is .. Oh yes it is.
So Shiny.
I wish I could write like this.

Friday, 01 April 2011 12:04
More, please!

- oh, wait, there IS more! Shiny! :)

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