Blue Sun Room FICTION - SUSPENSE

Point of No Return, Part V

Monday, May 30, 2005

Jayne's plan backfires big-time; Kaylee is rescued by an unlikely hero with a troubled past; Book and Wash have words; and Mal considers a change of heart.

CATEGORY: FICTION    TIMES READ: 3406    RATING: 9.0 (PG13)    SERIES: FIREFLY

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Disclaimer: This story is in no way meant to infringe on the rights of Joss Whedon, Mutant Enemy, or 20th Century Fox. Just wanted to have a bit of fun with these characters is all. Please don’t sue me.

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Rated R for violence.

“Point of No Return, Part V”

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He was getting closer. He could smell them. He didn’t know how far he’d just run, and he wasn’t sure where he was. Not that he cared. There was only thought in his brain.

Meat!

He stopped abruptly at the opening to the under-dark and hunkered down on all fours, listening. It was difficult to focus, between his own hunger and the still voice that hummed in his ears. He realized he was panting. Difficult to sneak around like that, so he held his breath and went inside, crawling on spindly limbs like a pale spider stalking its trapped prey.

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The front door opened with a creak. The keys jingled lightly in the lock as Sunyi peered into the dark living room.

“Guys?” she said softly. There was no answer but the steady patter of the rain outside. A feeling of dread suddenly washed over her, and she didn’t know why. She flicked the wall switch, but no light came. Only the empty darkness greeted her.

Sunyi ventured cautiously into the apartment, leaving the door open to allow the soft blue light from the street to illuminate the room. She gripped her umbrella like a spear, her shoulders tense with the fear of…she wasn’t sure what. She made her way to the kitchen, then the den; both were empty. She turned and headed for Kai’s room.

As she passed the main hallway, a sudden wind drew the front door shut with a slam. Sunyi jumped. She held her breath and continued in total darkness, her eyes wide open more from fear than from making any effort to see. On occasion, she imagined this is what death felt like; eyes open but not seeing, ears listening but not hearing, feeling nothing but the black all a

Comments
Monday, 30 May 2005 08:36
aaaawwwwhttp://www........good Kai.
I really like this story. I feel so sorry for poor Kai, after having gone through so much. I really like how you've actually told u about his past, rather than him being just another Reaver with no past and no future.
I just wonder whats going to happen when he finds out that Mal is an Independent.

No Power In The Verse
XOXOX-FREDIKAYLLOW-XOXOX
Monday, 30 May 2005 10:53
Very good. I feel sorry for Kai but am comforted that there is a part of him that can still respond to other people and even with the extreme circumstances of his own evolution he is still cognisant enough to be a Big Damn Hero his ownself. Shiny! And I loved the Captain telling Simon he would have to be his responsibility because he didn't want the Reaver sleeping in his bunk. Ali D :~)
You can't take the sky from me
Monday, 30 May 2005 16:20
I wanna pet reaver, now! Kai could kick an umpa lumpa ass any day of the week and twice on Sunday.

Great myth, keep it going.

Phaedra
Thursday, 02 June 2005 14:57
Can't wait for the chapter detailing the "reaverizing" of Sunyi and family, while on their way to their "new start".

Nice story line, especially since Jayne now has competition for his "Merc" job slot!!

Keep flyin',

K
Wednesday, 21 September 2005 11:43
And now, not only fabulous words, but a triumph of structure too. Damn good.

From a reader's point of view, it's very satisfying to have a suspicion raised and then confirmed.

What I liked most about the Sunyi misdirection was the way it suggested the relief was only temporary. Masterful.

Nice snark from Wash too. Always of the good.

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