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Stay - Epilogue

Monday, September 22, 2003

Mal, Jayne and Kaylee are working on a heist aboard a cruise ship. They realize their undercover job might be jeopardized by Inara, who happens to be sailing in the same ship with one of her clients.

CATEGORY: FICTION    TIMES READ: 3676    RATING: 9.0 (G)    SERIES: FIREFLY

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“Stay” – EPILOGUE

Usual disclaimers and acknowledgements.

“They’re not coming, sir. Everybody dies alone. I’m a mean old man. A gust of warm air pushes through the cargo doors as they slide open. Is this what you meant by ambush? You want me—You want me on your ship. Tell me where the goods are at, so I can shoot ya. Just when I think that I have you figured out. Her hand makes a loud slapping noise when it connects against his cheek. Don’t you dare speak to me! These are not times for extraordinary men. Serenity feels cold, lonely and empty. Four per shuttle, Nara, four. The strident sound of gunfire rings in his ears—a single shot. Mal! Mal, stay with me, Mal!

Darkness…

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One week later, engine room Serenity

The glow of the turning engine was all Kaylee had been staring at for the past three hours. Lost in thought, she couldn’t get the events that had taken place during the dreadful cruise out of her mind. Her heart caught in her throat as she remembered their last hours on The Majestic.

Shaking her head to clear it, tears welled once again in the corner of her eyes, and the now familiar tightening of her chest returned. She shifted in the hammock, trying to find a more comfortable position on her side, and let out a shaky sigh.

“Kaylee?”

Simon’s voice came from the doorway, but she did not bother to look up or even acknowledge him. Cautiously stepping inside the engine room, Simon walked over to the corner where she lay on the hammock and offered her a cold drink.

“You should at least drink something. You haven’t had any food or drink since…”

“Not thirsty” was her stoic reply.

He stood in front of her, glass in hand, but dared not push further. Instead, he opted to lean against the engine shell and observed her. Her eyes were puffy, her lips were dried and chapped from partial dehydration, and her face was taut and haunted.

“I know you blame yourself” he fina

Comments
Monday, 22 September 2003 17:54
Excellent, full of emotion and tension right until the end. It still left the ending open not resolved which presumably was your intent. I would have loved it if we had seen Inara's resolve finally break and the admission that she could not really leave him and ever hope to be whole make her take that final step of commitment to stay. Thanks for a good story, Ali D :~)
You can't take the sky from me
Wednesday, 24 September 2003 12:57
Aw! That was lovely. And I like the lack of definite conclusion, because that's what keeps the Mal/Inara relationship interesting.

And that line: "He looked at her questioningly before swallowing hard and fixing his gaze on the ceiling with a sense of dread " perfectly encapsulates what a dumbass Tightpants can be!
Wednesday, 24 September 2003 18:46
The hopeless romantic in me is well satisfied. Good one, keep writing.
Wednesday, 24 September 2003 20:32
I loved the ending. Well done.
ANONYMOUS
Sunday, 09 November 2003 16:42
I have just read all of the parts of this story, and I absolutely loved it! You nailed the characters so well, I can really imagine them saying those lines. Great Mal and Inara stuff. Please write more :)
ANONYMOUS
Tuesday, 27 July 2004 19:39
Bravo! Loved it, and the ending was well done.
ANONYMOUS
Thursday, 09 September 2004 02:45
Wonderful twist with MJS! You're a great writer. Enjoyed every bit. Keep writing. I'd love to hear more about Jayne and Kaylee, though....
ANONYMOUS
Saturday, 09 October 2004 16:32
i'm just going to choose to forget that you tried to kill my cappy. besides the huge blank there now is in the story cause i don't *remember* what happened when Mal went to get the stone, it was awesome. I loved it. The ending was perfect. not to mention the fact that your characterization of kaylee was dead on.
Sunday, 14 May 2006 05:58
Wow....great fic! I just loved this, you captured the Mal I adore just perfectly, and the story was great. Loved the Mal and Inara interaction, the Mal and Kaylee interaction...lovely.

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