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SCHISM part 4: ECHOES

Monday, December 6, 2004

There is no escape from your fears...

CATEGORY: FICTION    TIMES READ: 3978    RATING: 9.0 (NC17)    SERIES: FIREFLY

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A HUGE thank you goes out to AmDoBell, GuildSister, Phaedra and SoulOfSerenity (and all Browncoats) who've been following this crazy story arc. I never planned any sequels, but your comments and support have been keeping me going. THANK YOU! The action will now be turned up a few notches. Constructive criticism is always welcome.

Enjoy!

PERSPECTIVE: River

River awoke in a cold sweat. A sharp pain filled her lungs as she sat upright in bed. It was dark, but she realised that she was still trapped in the Alliance lab.

She pulled the cover off her legs and sat on the edge of the bed. She placed her feet onto the floor and stood up. A light bulb suddenly came to life above her head.

River frowned, perplexed by its timing. She checked her surroundings.

The bodies that lay nearby had now disappeared. Whether she noticed it or not, the sharp smell of disinfectant had gone too.

She found herself drawn towards the doorway. River slowly opened the door and stepped through to the other side.

The light vanished, and River found herself standing in a long dark corridor.

“You’re late.”

River gasped, startled by the tone of the voice. A figure loomed ahead. She peered through the darkness, recognising the outline of Badger’s hat. Confusion swirled inside River’s mind.

“I ‘aven’t got all day.” he moaned

She frowned, stepping closer, until she caught a glimpse of Badger’s head. All that remained of his cheeky face was a skull.

“This is embarrassing…” he muttered

River screamed, but found that she was unable to make any sound. She quickly turned on her heels.

She turned a corner and now found herself on the balcony overlooking the cargo bay floor. Her eyes lingered across the room. It was empty - until she saw Mal lying against a container from below.

River moved across the balcony. A man in a black suit suddenly appeared at the other end. River recognised the familiar blue gloves and edged backwards.

Mal looked up, blood pouring from every orifice in his face.

“It’s ok

Comments
Monday, 06 December 2004 17:51
Oooh, very much wishing this was longer. You have built up some very nice tension and the way you write River is excellent. I hope not everything in her dream comes true!
Very shiny, Ali D :~)
You can't take the sky from me
Monday, 06 December 2004 19:26
This was amazing! It reminds me of one of those bad nightmares where you "wake up" from one dream only to find yourself trapped in another. Is this the end (because it does make a perfect rap around to part 1) or is the crew trapped in some kind of time warp?

Phaedra (a bad luck name)

P.S. Why is Badger in River's dream?
Monday, 06 December 2004 19:53
This is good! Nice and all sorts of scary. Is this all in River's head, or is the crew of Serenity in for a real life nightmare...

Keep 'em coming, Cos!
Thursday, 09 December 2004 01:03
Ooooh! Profoundly creepy and suspenseful.

Uh... "suspenseful" implies "more to come", you do realize?? ;-)
Thursday, 15 September 2005 18:47
huh? wha-? NO!!!

b

p.s. the NO!!! refers to what appears to river's capture and the crew's deaths, not the brilliant story you are currently telling
Saturday, 12 November 2005 18:00
Gimme more, Cos. It's like a drug. I'm supposed to be getting ready to go see Serenity for the 3rd time, not reading this tale, but you've got me hooked.

"The bodies that lay nearby had now disappeared. Whether she noticed it or not, the sharp smell of disinfectant had gone too." I like how you planted that "whether she noticed" bit, tells me how preoccupied the girl is. She's so hyper-aware most of the time, that this bit is very telling as to her state of mind. Poor little moonbrained critter.

Lovely voice command on all characters. Wish you'd add more Badger sometime since you do so well with the Brit-speak.
Thursday, 18 May 2006 17:05
I know I am reading these more'n a year after you wrote them, but they rock. You are very good at keeping things mysterious and horrifying.

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