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Eidolon (Chapter 34)

Friday, September 7, 2012

Stars scattered in the night, coalesced from the stellar dust from a far away sun and others that came before. A spark, scintillating into a network, a stream, like the lights and streets of a city. (Cascade)

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Inara could not decide which seemed bleaker, their situation, or the sterile, featureless surroundings the guards escorted them through. The space was otherwise abandoned, and the unsettling desolation crept through her like frost warning of further bad weather. In the disquieting dreams she'd had, River had shown her a place like this in stolen visions. A glimpse, that had morphed into a surreal journey through frozen worlds and battlefields and tombs.

As a girl Inara had entertained herself with fairytales and stories about the spirit world. There, she could escape from the tower into the wilds. Then her mother crossed over, and the fantasy lost the appeal. Later she learned she had always been far closer to that world than she wanted to be, halfway there already; living, and in some ways already gone. She had been specially selected, and it wasn't as beautiful or lovely as she had hoped. Story of her life, really.

She knew this place like her last breath. If she should stay here, and allow her friends another chance, she would. She couldn't offer much else for them anyway. So it wasn't her fast approaching end that frightened her, but rather the prospects of who else she might find there with her.

Surrounded as they were, it wasn't until they had nearly passed through that Inara realized the foreboding gates had finally opened for her. The soldiers packed them into the lift tight, an oubliette of smooth steel walls. Another disappearance, unheard and silent through the black soundless and crushing around this prison. She was determined that would not be the fate of her friends. A blessing, that they were all standing so near; Kaylee was right beside her, and the soldiers were paying more attention to Zoe and Jayne and their penchant for brawling as the two gunhands slumbered.

Serenity 's mechanic was just a girl, barely into her womanhood, and Inara sometimes wondered what Mal had been thinking, letting such a dear heart into the dangers they faced aboard the ship. Yet

Comments
Saturday, 08 September 2012 18:58
Unrelentingly bleak and depressing, Bytemite. Was hoping for at least a spark of hope somewhere in this rather forlorn chapter. Leaves me wishing this whole piece was just a convoluted dream sequence, sorry, nightmare. Maybehaps they will all wake up soon? Ali D
"You can't take the sky from me!"
BYTEMITE
Saturday, 08 September 2012 19:10
That's me! I serve up a hefty meal of all the angst forever.

But, actually I do have a way to resolve all of this in an equally relentlessly upbeat manner. Everyone lives! Sort of!

It's not really a spoiler, don't worry. If anyone can guess it in advance though, I'll think up a suitable reward.

Except for EBfiddler. (unnecessary friendly-antagonism) Because I'm betaing for her and she kind of already guessed. Though I could draw her a picture too, October is going to be pretty much arts up the wall.
Saturday, 08 September 2012 22:22
Thanks for the prospect of a shiny outcome (sort of) Bytemite! Ali D :~)
"You can't take the sky from me!"
BYTEMITE
Sunday, 09 September 2012 02:27
Haha, no problem.
Wednesday, 12 September 2012 03:15
Good use of images and language in the first section to convey that sense of foreboding and ominous potential. I've said it before, but I just *love* how sneaky Inara is with her pickpocketing sleight-of-hand skills. River's got some kind of electrical connection. The Ezrans are rising against the Alliance troops with their Pax: I'm glad of it, although I'm sorry to see Pvt Josie and Mick caught in the thick of it, with an irresponsible lieutenant in charge. I rather liked them. Great job with getting inside the Operative's head: so messed up, he almost makes Mal look well-adjusted. And one heck of a cliff-hanger. (I'll keep mum. I'm not in the running for the "guess how it ends" contest.) And so begins the action-packed peak of Eidolon. Looking forward to the next few chapters.
BYTEMITE
Wednesday, 12 September 2012 04:51
Mal taught her some of it, Nandi some of the rest, but she's also always had her own talent at the surreptitious.

That lieutenant has kind of sucked from the beginning. He's straight out of officer school. Means well, but a little too gung ho to approach a situation with any ability to diffuse it. Josie and Mick get how the world works. They're good friends, Josie is a little hotheaded and Mick is the levelheaded one - I actually think of them as reverse gender versions of Mal and Zoe, Mick's maybe a little more zen than just cool, and Josie is almost trigger happy but otherwise yeah.

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