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Eidolon (Chapter 31)

Saturday, June 23, 2012

Such a landscape was treacherous as sand, shifting and burying, flitting across the mirrors to distort and shatter the image until everything overlapped. Her own fears in three echoes and relived through different perspectives. Answers in hidden tendencies, honed from pre-existing inclinations. (Reflections)

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There was a moment, breathless, rushing as the air parted. A meteoric ascension towards one small spark from amid the screaming inferno looming above, detached and blank before convergence. Nightmares wandered through the labyrinth; grasped, captured, victims dragged away trying to escape the needles and machines. Strapped them to tables in sterile rooms behind bolted steel.

They were pleased. A mistake had been corrected, and one of their more elusive subjects was within their grasp. Ten years of carnage ended . An accusation. There are many kinds of monsters out there. None better or worse than others, just more self-aware.

"I don't -" Feeble denial, spoken in tandem.

" Yes you do. I know you do ." Painful truth, haunted by the past. They could wake up from nightmares, but not from reality. Not from what they were and what they'd become.

Then she was River again, standing in the cold harsh-lit parallel. Outside they were planning, and waiting, as the lounge function demanded. She had to hurry. Prove them all wrong. They'd saved the dawn rose from the frost, and this time the spindle would wake her. She settled on the perch like a little bird and whispered in sleeping beauty's ear. "I'm going to tell you a story," she whispered.

- - - - -

Inara was lost. The abyss crushed around her so she couldn't breathe, couldn't speak. She was abandoned and alone, hostage to her fears. Sinister shapes hovered at the edges of her sight, and her only company was a repetitive echo, dripping water and a rhythmic beating rendered in electronics like a measure of her life.

" It's a fairy tale ," said the voice. " Because I'm -" A terrible piercing screech rose to drown out the explanation, like feedback from over the cortex, and a girl fluctuating between an alarming mix of children's laughter and sobbing.

" River ?" The thought filled the space around her like a shout. The air

Comments
Sunday, 24 June 2012 04:50
I'm going to admit that I saw an earlier draft of this, and it is very cool to see how it has evolved.
There are *so* many things going on in this chapter--it's very rich with symbolism and foreshadowing. Every time I read it, I'm seeing more. I especially like the Beauty and the Beast references and their conflation with Sleeping Beauty: both the prince and the princess need saving. Loved Zoe's recollections of Mal in the war; builds more backstory. The many references to Reavers are very disturbing.
Sunday, 24 June 2012 16:21
Beautifully written and by turns lyrical and disturbing. The dream sequences fogging up what is or is not the reality of the situation. That last paragraph was such a good depiction of River even if voiced by dream like nymphs. Hopefully with more clarity in the next chapter will come the hope of a successful outcome for all. Ali D :~)
"You can't take the sky from me!"
BYTEMITE
Sunday, 24 June 2012 16:55
Symbolically I tried to remove some of the unfortunate implications of sleeping beauty while still keeping the basic gist of it, though I guess beauty and the beast has that whole weird abduction stockholm thing going on. In my defense, Mal kind of abducted her from the training house, though she also went along willingly, and then there's the whole unhealthy codependence thing with the beast nearly dying because she leaves for like a week. Though that's STILL better than the sleeping beauty stuff.

In all honesty Snow White would have been the better reference, though I'd have to use apples to wake Inara up as a subversion, and with Mal that symbolism might have become more explosive than I really needed.

I guess I just couldn't resist throwing roses in there.

As for Zoe's recollections, this was my attempt to reconcile how optimistic Mal seems in the war and magnetic and friendly, with how kind of disturbing it is to be all that several years into a vicious and bloody war. I suspect that most of it was keeping up an act for his troops so that they had some way to cope with the stress, and that Mal never broke character until they lost. But I also can't rule out that he was trying to deal with some stuff of his own and maybe he was just a little crazy then too.
PLATONIST
Sunday, 24 June 2012 17:11

Very insightful dream sequence, is River trying to bridge Mal and Inara?
BYTEMITE
Sunday, 24 June 2012 17:43
EB, you and platonist have been an incredible amount of help, essential even, as I've been getting into these really tricky chapters and this vague uncharted plot territory. That has to be said and I should have said this much earlier.

Platonist: River has been implanting a lot of ideas with these dreams, and that will be very important in chapters to come. But this time there's a lot of information that's very immediate, things Inara needs to know about what Mal has been through that even he doesn't always acknowledge, and also a connection to his fears and what he's currently going through. So yeah.

Ali: yep, some scariness. We still have some chapters to go, so I can't promise a resolution by next chapter.
ALIASSE
Sunday, 24 June 2012 19:32
For me, this is Byte at her Byte-ist: multi-layered, cryptic. Demanding! I find it very poetic, the way atmosphere is built. Inara's state contrasts horribly with the last chapter. And at the same time you manage to move the narrative forward and build back story. The word 'manic' is perfect for Mal. I clung on to Jayne's horrible prediction as one of the few bits of fact in this. Are you going to be brave enough to show us what's happening to him?
BYTEMITE
Sunday, 24 June 2012 19:55
The good news is, I think there's only one really cryptic River point of view part that I have in mind coming up, but it's exposition heavy so I'll also probably have a character find the related information and translate.

There's some hints already what's happening to Mal and what's being done to him, but we'll see eventually how bad he is.

There's actually a lot of facts in here, since a lot of it is symbolic foreshadowing. Thanks be to River for her ability to turn nice dreams into nightmares. But, the nightmares are important, and River being eerie is in her nature, so that's probably just inevitable.
ALIASSE
Sunday, 24 June 2012 20:53
I think I got those hints. Poor Mal. Give him a pair of slippers and an armchair somebody. I wonder how eerie River was before she was got to.
BYTEMITE
Sunday, 24 June 2012 21:24
Apparently in the top secret labs on their capital ships the Alliance likes to use 1950s interrogation and psychiatric techniques.

River was plenty weird, but at least then her weirdness was mostly play with no connection to reality.

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