Back Stories III: Chapter 23
Wednesday, December 21, 2011
The BDH’s find themselves enmeshed in too damned many OCs. But hey, they’re necessary. Plottiness and all.
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Chapter 23.
It belongs to Joss and all those business people. I'm just playing.
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, , , BS Book II, BS Book III, Chapter 1. Timing, pairings, and canon blurbs are in my . Many thanks to desertgirl for the beta read. And many more thanks to the readers who have waited for too long to get to the end of this one.
A toothy grin lit a strong, square jaw under an even stronger, squarer haircut. “Morning, Ell!” the patient in the hospital bed called out in greeting.
“Aaron,” Doctor Ellen Rowlee replied with a fond smile. “How are you feeling today?”
“Ready to get off my back, ma’am,” he replied.
“My dear boy, I will be the judge of that.”
As she glanced over his chart, Ellen had to remind herself that her patient, at twenty-six years of age, wasn’t technically a boy. Fully grown and muscular, he must be imposing enough when he carried his anti-riot shield and baton against unruly mobs. But her seventy-year-old eyes tended to focus on the age of minds rather than bodies, and this bright-eyed soldier was limited in real life experience. She doubted that he’d ever bothered to ponder the political complexities of the remote world of Oeneus, beyond those he could handle with a club and some well-aimed blinder spray.
However, Ellen would never hold youth and inexperience against any person,
Welcome back, Mal4prez. Your posting is most welcome. This chapter has several intriguing developments. I'm wondering how Dr Ellen fits into this, and her connection with Trevor Marone. I'm still wondering about Marone's role: you left me with an ambiguous impression of him. I liked your inclusion of details about Westfield: his trust in paper records vs electronic; and Lt Brady's impressions (how he "should have been kind" and how his smile was "tight and didn't reach his eyes"). Thank you for picking up on Inara's story. I liked the way the beeping connected her dream/memory to the present. I hope you will continue to weave her backstory in as this develops. I want to know why Lina insisted that she not see him. I REALLY want to know what's up with the Chancellor's interest in Mal as "the final subject." And what is this about a Permit for Seizure of Citizens/Part-time citizens of the Alliance? Will Inara find something in the fine print? And you've let the Alliance take Mal away, with him in such a state! (And, not a word about all the crewmembers that you left stuck in that cave, other than obliquely through the Chancellor and Deadbranch's conversation about the Reaver attack.) M4P, thank you for posting. Your whole series has been such a good read. Please post more soon.
Anyway, I like the exchange between Doctor and patient, Doc Rowlee & Aaron, also I’m liking Evan, codename: Deadbranch, Davis. Be interesting to get a little background info on him.
I’m very curious why Mal is being taken off the ship. Not that he doesn’t have a ton of folks searching for him, for all sorts of reasons, still, I’ve got some catch-up reading to do.
Very interesting tone for this episode, I’ll be glad to get the next one soon as you put it up.
BPZ
(Now I'll actually go back and read this.)
This is getting even worse, isn't it? Somehow I doubt that they're interested in helping him, but far more interested in using him as a test subject.
Hopefully he's deteriorated too far to be useful for them, so they'll let him go, but something tells me they don't need him alert to experiment on him.
MERRY CHRISTMAS ONE AND ALL!
Really like how powerless Inara is here, I can imagine Zoe doing an eye roll when she turned over the paper work...and how Inara almost incriminated Mal by asking about an arrest.
Hope we don’t have to wait too long for more.
I have the next chapter in beta, but my beta reader's a little busy with Christmas. I hope to get posted next week, and another chapter soon to follow.
Almost done!
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