Blue Sun Room FICTION - GENERAL

Eidolon (Chapter 20)

Sunday, October 16, 2011

The hard shining lines of steel brace sharpened. Faster now, the pace picking up, blurring, and the future as ever seeable but not knowable. They go to die, or to live, and the house might collapse but for words. They will all go together. (Wandering)

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Jayne Cobb had a lot of grit behind him. He'd breathed it as a boy, bounty hunting for varmints around the spaceport where his folks lived, the soot from the old factories thick enough that it fell like snow – in inches. If you weren't strong and didn't watch yourself, or didn't have someone looking after you, way you ended up was shanked behind the speakeasy or conscripted for the ring fights. Kind of place where you grew up fast or died young.

Most people wouldn't think it to look at him, but he had his fetters same as everyone else. Had a kid brother to look after, sickly sort, born wrong on account of the air. His pa used to say both his sons been poisoned, but that made no sense to him.

Never really seen eye to eye, even when he'd caught up in height. The old man had a stubborn and old fashioned streak. Kept him in his nowhere job metalworking, off and on because of his bad arm always flaring up from that old lathe tweaked him the once. Man was well liked, friendly with just about everyone on the docks, but closed off too. Cared for the family in his own way, though they never had much, so Jayne was running with the gangs before he'd gone through the mill. Almost come to blows a few times over his peccancy and mama had to come between them.

Then there came a month they couldn't scrape together for Mattie's medicine. He'd messed up a job trying to earn some cash, and hidden out with some of his girls he'd befriended. Turned out they'd been playing him for a while, knocked him out and tied him up for the thugs to fetch back to the boss. Was his own pa pulled him out of the brothel, and went to settle up on his behalf. Told Jayne to get off world, so he took his money with him and went mercenary. No loyalty to anyone, except when there was.

He was about ready to shake the dust from Ezra off his boots too. Driving over miles of dunes under moonlight, blowing cigar smoke to the wind hadn't eased his temper any over them being stuck and being broke an

Comments
Sunday, 16 October 2011 15:18
Oh dear, sounds like River is getting worse and even less coherent. Why can't things ever go smooth? Ali D :~)
"You can't take the sky from me!"
Sunday, 16 October 2011 21:58
Love your view of Jayne's background. Industrial grit and grime, and an uncomfortable relationship with his father--just what I imagined for him.
River's thoughts very interesting (and well-conveyed in lucid prose). They are revealing, insightful, confused and confusing all at once. I loved that she took a tour of the ship (no doubt in bare feet--whether the excursion was real or in her mind hardly matters) and communed with the essence of each space within it. I liked how the bridge is pervaded with Wash in River's mind, and I just loved her mental encounter with Book. Glad you brought Book into this--he is such an interesting and enigmatic character, and you seem to have a good handle on him, through River's eyes. Things are about to happen, here on the ship, and we already know the goushi is hitting the fan over at the councillor's estate. Whatever can go wrong, will go wrong, eh? That's the motto.
Monday, 17 October 2011 01:26
There's a few things in Jayne's backstory that cause his present and some of his relationships on the ship to make a lot of sense.

And of course Jayne has had it up to here with all the crew dramatics.

This was my chance to really introduce Serenity. There's a hint of giving the layout in the first chapter after the prologue, but you can miss it with all the character introductions and tense rescue mission and get away. No better person than River, who can get into the ship and the emotions that permeate the space.

Book doesn't get a lot of chance to shine in fanfiction, especially post movie, but I like to imagine his memory is always there. Wash too. Just waiting for one of the crew to need that memory, to get them through the hard times.
Monday, 17 October 2011 18:14
I'm going to agree with ebfiddler regarding Jayne's backstory. I wonder if his father still hold that resentment, since he has sent money home in the past.

...perhaps that is for another time.

Monday, 17 October 2011 21:08
I probably won't ever get to exploring Jayne's family close up in this fic or any other, so I'd say my impression is no. I think Jayne's mother is the only one who still talks to Jayne, and has to hide the money Jayne sends home, because his father knows what jobs Jayne is doing for that money.
Thursday, 05 January 2012 22:21
You put so much care and thought into this series, Byte. Getting back to Serenity in the midst of the actiony action shows that. It does make sense that Jayne would stick around for one simple reason, like a sick brother. Especially if life on Serenity is slightly preferable to the one he left behind. 'His Own Bunk!'
Thursday, 05 January 2012 22:27
Yeah. But he still has a fondness for his old family even if they had to chase him off. He kinda gets why, too.

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