Blue Sun Room FICTION - GENERAL

Eidolon (Chapter 18)

Sunday, October 2, 2011

She felt the exact moment Mal's already well-formed suspicions became concrete certainty. "Don't," she pleaded, even as she heard him firing up the shuttle engines for a fly-by and some daring getaway, cursing as he struggled with the start up sequence as usual. (Realization)

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Inara prided herself on her ability to feel at home in any situation, from the Sihnon New Year's Ball in the Palace of the Eternal Thousand Lotus Petals to the dark corner of unnamed bars out on the border and rim. Perhaps her time on Serenity had changed her; surely she had admired more majestic and extravagant decor in the riches of her homeworld, the shining lights and culture of the core.

Yet the lavish display of wealth for the welcoming reception seemed ostentatious to her. The interior of the Councilor's estate was Londinium style, a neo-Victorian with expensive pastel prints and imported wood carving. To further divorce this world from the reality outside, baroque colonnades clashed with the arabic arcades of the exterior, and armed security guards patrolled the hallways. Amid all of this: bondage, indenture, excesses of wealth of the worst kind.

There was the Councilor out on the terrace, in a conservative black dress with blond hair styled high and adorned in pearls to stand out from the white gossamer of her attendants. There was a brown-haired marine in navy greys with two silver rank bars on his sleeves, the apparent leader of the taskforce assigned to Ezra, bringing with him civilization through suppressive artillery fire.

What might her other clients have hidden? How common were functions for the military like this catered by slave girls? How many others were there, silent and invisible and suffering? Two of the students during her stay at the Training House had been raped by Alliance soldiers from an otherwise reputable core regiment. Her call for help had been answered by the Operative, who had threatened more of the same if she refused to cooperate.

That a crime of this magnitude could happen with any degree of regularity was almost unthinkable, and thoroughly unacceptable.

She had agreed to the dangers of this infiltration hoping to find some way to help. Her decision wasn't about Mal, much as he wanted to believe she was just being contrary. When he couldn't diss

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Sunday, 02 October 2011 23:14
Been working on something this weekend, so my usual stuff kind of took a backseat. I've caught up with everyone's postings now. :)
Monday, 03 October 2011 04:32
Oh, now. This is good. I mean the writing, not what is about to happen to our BDHs. Your description of the Councillor's house, with its imported style misplaced on Ezra, is fantastic. Really gives a sense of how disconnected the rulers are from the populace. I liked the line, "Even his breathing was distracting." I can see Inara being distracted in that way. I'm not familiar with the Clay Cart, so I looked it up. Seems very apropos. "Another facet of Malcolm Reynolds, another mystery to puzzle over; his obvious education, insight, and occasional unexpected and startling refinement." I also think he is much better educated than he generally lets on, and think this is a mystery worth exploring. I am wondering about the significance of the Councillor's first name of Judith. I really like Inara's moment of realization: "All that mattered to him really was her safety. Not the past, not her profession. Just her." and then "High time to get unruly."--She aims to misbehave! Awesome set up. Looking forward to seeing the action in the next chapter.
Monday, 03 October 2011 05:01
I'm impressed and gratified you did look it up. How much out there was there?

There's symbolism like everywhere in this story. Throw a rock and you'll hit Shakespeare.

Mal really is smarter than he lets on, some sources have him as smart as Inara, he just applies it in different and riskier ways. But he's pretty good at reading people, probably something that catches Inara off guard. He knows something is up with her, but unfortunately for both of them, he's mistaken about what. Also, I like to write him with this whole warrior poet vibe.

The moment of realization is an important one I think, because ultimately I think their relationship really isn't so much Inara's profession. At this moment, Mal happens to let show a little what's really important to him with her, the moment she needs help he drops all the the nonsense he's brooding about with Inara and Simon and her clients.

Ultimately, none of it changes how he actually feels. And it does set up for the chance for both of them to be heroes.
Monday, 03 October 2011 13:10
I liked how you describe how Inara and Mal try 'to protect each other with unkind words neither meant or believed' and cheered at the end when Inara decided it was 'high time to get unruly'. Oh yes, the bad guys have seen nothing yet! Ali D :~)
"You can't take the sky from me!"
Tuesday, 04 October 2011 13:58
Very good chapter, I agree with Amdobell about the end, very shiny!
Tuesday, 04 October 2011 15:33
I try to let every character have a chance to do something cool. Some of the characters' moments are coming up later.
BREWSTER
Thursday, 06 October 2011 04:02
I agree there's a ;ot more in Mal's background than is usually known - he seems to have knowledge on a wide range of subjects.
Thursday, 05 January 2012 22:08
Such a good chapter: the way you intersperse the play with the narrative is masterful!

And ooohhhh! suspense!

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