Blue Sun Room FICTION - GENERAL

Eidolon (Chapter 15)

Saturday, September 10, 2011

Mal didn't react to the offer, his focus only on her, his expression guarded but his eyes striking blue and stricken. "I can't ask this from you," he told her, roughly. (Sacrifices)

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She'd gotten a big hug from the captain meant he'd been worried, the hair ruffle hello as he climbed up over into the driver's seat. Then was Inara, captain being gallant again and another of those moments passing between him and her friend that made her squirm in delight. They were all sweet and teasing, and she always liked them like that.

Next up was Jayne, like he was too manly for all the fuss, but he grudgingly wrapped his arms right back around her, like usual, and she reflexively swatted his hands away when his hands started drifting too southward, like usual. She smiled up at him. It was all so familiar and right they were together again, and she could just burst she was so relieved.

The truce didn't last long, especially when they came up on the big worship house they were told they could stay, smack in the center of a cobbled courtyard surrounded on all sides by a bazaar with colourful streamers everywhere. It looked shiny to Kaylee, the same stone made to look like marble, carved into swirling shapes and patterns. A dark, almost still hologram pool wavered at the base of the monument to reflect the glow of some flood lights, the only electricity she'd seen in the city so far.

Jayne had been a little wary, started ignoring the church for all he was worth, but Captain hadn't been happy at all, bickering with Inara even as he helped her down to the ground again.

Kaylee frowned, worrying her lip. Last mule they'd had, puttered like the harvester someone'd thrown the engine back together from. It'd been Wash's most of all, she remembered with a pang, him playing with it like a toy, like he did Serenity sometimes. They'd set it on fire, the first time when they'd went up against Niska. She never could get it to start up after that.

The hover-mule had been hard earned, them having to cooperate with that xiāfà huǐfù Saffron, then when they'd had trouble finding a buyer for the take.

Machines were just like people, wasn'

Comments
Saturday, 10 September 2011 03:54
Lots and lots of things to like about this chapter.
I liked the Kaylee POV at the beginning, and her understanding of Jayne. I really liked the paragraph about Shepherd Book, and the notion of conversations with Jayne about Jayneism. "Book was a rare man of faith wasn't too particular about which"--excellent. Just loved the way you expressed Inara's feelings: "She was always astounded to find how insulting Mal could be, how obnoxious...How completely and unmistakeably right." And I liked River's bit: "Forsworn by Apollo, Asclepius, Hygieia and Panacea." Besides the many fine glimpses of what makes these characters tick, you've (again) done some mighty fine depiction of evocative settings. You're able to call up such rich images with so few words.
Saturday, 10 September 2011 21:18


Mal's threats to Jayne, perfect:)

Could be Inara's more modest than Mal, nice twist.
She always has a sheet wrapped or a robe on, we never see her prance around completely naked.

Love your implications of what the cultural expectations for women are, also, I like how uncomfortable Mal was with it, but played along quickly, and how he distinguished between his sister and his wife, Kaylee and Inara, respectively.

You weave a rich tapestry, Byt.
Saturday, 10 September 2011 22:29
Here, Kaylee is a little like she was with your Ip, EB.

Oh Jayne. He doesn't one hundred percent understand Christianity, he just knows he "don't wanna get smote." So he has some rather interesting philosophy along those lines.

Little bit of an anti-climax to finding River, but it sets up for something.

Inara's very modest I think. Even Atherton notices that she blushes when people express desire for her, and Atherton barely even sees her for HER. Too busy with his head up his, well. So when Mal teases her, add that to the fact that she likes him and he can just be so embarrassing sometimes! First he calls her his wife and then he watches her disrobe! But then, she did frisk him last chapter, he has to even things up somehow.

I don't take credit for descriptions, that's entirely thanks to Mal and Inara, as inspiration and because they both have an eye for pretty and poetry.
Thursday, 05 January 2012 21:33
That's a 10 for me. Eating a whole packet of biscuits as I read.
Thursday, 05 January 2012 22:31
It's you!

And those biscuits are really good. I like the ones with the currants.

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