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Eidolon (Chapter 10)

Sunday, July 24, 2011

What they were was stuck and more stuck and spinning their wheels was going to get them nowhere fast, seeing how their ride didn't have any. (Anchors)

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The first breath of air was the worst, like coming to life only to drown again, choking on water still in the lungs. The amniotic seal popped and the last of the fluid drained away.

"Lucy? Are you all right?" She fell forward bonelessly out of the cell and caught herself on the curved barrier, still sputtering and bedraggled. Cho was hovering over her, his almond eyes wide under black a black fringe of bangs.

She smiled up at him. "Better than," she answered, and started wringing out coils of copper hair, dripping a puddle at her feet onto the brightly lit pristine white floor. "Except for the last part, that was actually somewhat relaxing."

He shook his head, the perfect image of amused skepticism. " Pì huà ."

"No really," she insisted, reaching for her white coat and shoving her hands through the sleeves. "Like sensory deprivation therapy or something." The hiss of hydraulics as a security door slid open and shut drew her attention back to the floor level, and she sighed, rolling her eyes. "Speaking of which, here come The Machines."

Cho leaned out, frowning in dislike down at the two blonde men. "Think I'll take my chances in there."

"Wha-" she spun back, but he was already making his escape. "You can't just leave me to deal with them! They're creepy!" she objected. Creepy nothing. They were cold, calculating, expressionless, and their arrival aboard the I.A.V. Ratched had generally made everyone uneasy, even the captain. Identical black suits… And why did they have to wear gloves all the time, anyway?

He smirked and climbed into the capsule. "Bet I can last longer than you did." He crossed his arms, daring her.

She narrowed blue eyes, then slapped the controls. He grinned, membrane closing again around the opening and backlights flicking on as the fluid began bubbling around his ankles. "You still have to check out that virtual reality sim

Comments
Sunday, 24 July 2011 02:27
I have to admit that the Ratched here is heavily inspired by the prison ship in Screw The Alliance's Unfinished Business. Hopefully, though, I've presented some new ideas here, and it won't seem like a complete rip-off.

Next chapter has some fun and excitement. :D
Sunday, 24 July 2011 13:22
I don't like Mal and Zoe being at odds, feels all wrong somehow but good to see that Inara is busy thinking of how she can help, dead or not. I like Simon's comments and feel a chill just thinking about the Ratched. Ali D :~)
"You can't take the sky from me!"
Sunday, 24 July 2011 17:33
There are some nice crew moments in this one B.

If you read Better Days, you’ll see it has some interesting Mal and Zoe tension, over Zoe’s back story.

Plus, Zoe’s not a mindless robot; I don’t think Mal would respect her if she didn’t at least challenge him once in a while.
Sunday, 24 July 2011 19:37
The Mal and Zoe situation here is a little complicated. Despite the fire-forged friendship, they're different in a lot of ways - Mal is unorthodox, reckless, and impulsive; Zoe is coolheaded, stealthy, and by the book. Zoe is loyal and always a professional, but she will on occasion question orders, and sometimes she thinks that Mal is being too dangerous, and losing Wash has her reevaluating some things as well.

Inara steps up here, which is nice. And I'm glad that both the Ratched AND the hands of blue are suitably creepy.

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