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Eidolon (Chapter 8)

Friday, July 8, 2011

"The day is young," Zoë replied wryly, idly pulling her sawn-off and checking the magazine, then shoving the forty-four home. (Morning and night)

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Too quiet. Now Finagle's Law must intervene, deus ex machina with infernal engines and guns materializing out of the nothing. Then let there be light, but it must be dug up, it hides in a palace in a cave over the horizon, afraid to look on the misdeeds of the early hours.

He may understand better than anyone of misfortune and the curse of breath. Doesn't dare to exhale, though it won't prevent the loss. Cradled in darkness, his heartbeat so loud it might leak out his ears. The yells and shouts of a final murmur thunder around him in the dead silence. A large shadow moved cat-like across the tiny sliver of light, the one crack in his fortress. Nowhere to go, no matter how much he curls in on himself, all boxed in. Drops stained a pristine white carpet and sharpened steel rasped harshly back into place before the muffled bootsteps finally went away.

Even when the others came, cleaning up and arranging, he didn't emerge. He knew this game, he'd been playing before. But this wasn't for fun now, he didn't know these people in their suits and with their bags and chemicals that made his tear ducts sting. They took the face in the mirror with them, took nobility and innocence. A voice that whispered then called his name lifted him out of the cubbyhole and held him like something precious, but there was only cold comfort and fear in her familiar blue eyes.

Those eyes darken to the blackness of space, and the stars go out. History repetitious, the snake bites its tail without seeming to recognize the pain. Three little sisters, a tall one with dried blood stained into her skin. Marching steadily forward, before her eyes she would hold steady the image of what she wanted but will not turn to embrace. She won't look at the echo waiting behind her for fear the memory will disappear.

Delight has a flavour like strawberries, but they are tasted on stolen time. Pretend to not crave them in the open when they grow so near the fresh graves. Fruit is best if it is forbidden.

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Comments
Friday, 08 July 2011 22:48
That's actually not an inconsistency. Generally, people with PTSD shouldn't be allowed to fall asleep with guns strapped to them.

Or anyone, really, but them especially.
Saturday, 09 July 2011 01:32
So many things to love about this chapter, Inara's bare legs with a ruffled hem, poor Mal, and Zoe's stoic sarcasm about her needing the coat in the heat, Zoe’s admittance of not liking the Companion in the beginning, you’re a master at the type of character moments, which made the show great.

Thanks for posting
Saturday, 09 July 2011 02:39
They're cute when they're not fighting, and hilariously cute when they are!

I try for nuance when I write Zoe, she's subtle.

Thanks for reading again. :)
Saturday, 09 July 2011 03:19
I like how you've written Zoe, and especially enjoyed the bit about knocking the Captain and Inara's heads together and locking them in the shuttle until they figure things out, and what you wrote about a "prank war" between Mal and Wash in early days. I can just see it.
I was confused about whose POV we're in, in the first part.
Always look forward to your next posting.

Saturday, 09 July 2011 15:42
That would be River. I'm one of those people who wonder about just how much "better" River can be after Miranda. So, a compromise. My take is that getting the secret out calmed some of River's emotional turmoil, allowing her to better cope with some of the other stuff going on in her life, so she feels clearer after it. But when stress starts building up, like her foreseeing some danger, her thoughts start getting confused and muddled again.

These limitations keep her more even with the rest of the crew, ability wise. I think in terms of story and characterization, it's important to have reasons why one character doesn't just outshine all the other characters if they have as game-breaking powers as River does.
Sunday, 10 July 2011 15:32
I particularly love the way you write the dialogue between Mal and Zoe, I can so see that kind of interaction. And Jayne just makes me chuckle. Ali D :~)
"You can't take the sky from me!"
Sunday, 25 September 2011 23:24
loath to stop reading for now, but it's way past my bedtime. Wish I didn't have to go to work in the morning and read it all in one sitting.

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