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Somewhere Down the Crazy River (4/10)

Sunday, June 14, 2009

Simon and Inara go on the job. Of course, nothing goes according to plan. What fun would that be?

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Inara’s eyes narrowed in concentration as she maneuvered the shuttle past another hairpin curve. The journey to the job had begun boringly enough but after an hour of the seemingly endless flatness the barren landscape had changed drastically. At first, Inara was happy for the challenge the new terrain presented - she needed a diversion to keep her mind occupied on anything other than the idiocy that she and Simon were about to undertake. But her happiness was soon replaced by fear as she realized just how tricky the route was.

Another blast of wind pushed the shuttle toward the wall of the canyon. She heard Simon’s swift intake of breath before she quickly corrected the shuttle’s course. Her hands tightened on the steering column and didn’t relax until they reached their destination.

“We’re here,” Inara said quietly as she circled around the meeting spot before finding a satisfactory place to set down the shuttle. After powering down the shuttle, she unstrapped the safety harness but couldn’t seem to rise from her seat. Neither, apparently, could Simon. In nervous silence, they gazed out the window.

They were in a deep, uneven valley. Brown and rocky still dominated the landscape but whereas the terrain surrounding Serenity had been devoid of any life, here, there were big clumps of brown, tough grass. The tufts littered the landscape, rising to over three feet tall in some places but they were dwarfed by the rise of red and beige rock formations that grew out of the ground. Inara admired the gentle lift of the rocks. The formations made her think of what a wave would look like, frozen in time, curving up on one side, falling away on the other. Her eyes continued to scan the valley until she noticed how low the sun hung in the sky. Almost time for the meet.

“Should we wait here or out there?” Inara asked.

“I think out there.” Simon unbuckled his seatbelt and got up. “That way they’ll know we’re not…”

Afraid. Inara took a deep breath pushing aside the nagging realization that this endeavor w

Comments
XARLEM
Monday, 15 June 2009 17:44
Fun fun! This story reads like an episode of the show and I love it :) Can't wait for more!
Monday, 15 June 2009 20:47
So much good stuff happens in this chapter, it's hard to pick out just a few. But I love the fresh characterization of the sheriff, and her little exchange with Zoe and Jayne. And aaaah, I felt so miserable for Inara and especially Simon, fish out of water that they are in a situation that is quickly turning very very grim. There's a lot to look forward to in the next chapter!
Tuesday, 16 June 2009 03:02
Wow, no shortage of eventfulness here! Loved the dynamics with Zoe and the sheriff. Jayne's little fantasy was a riot. Seeing Zoe through Jayne's eyes seemed to bring home the point that much better of how much pain she was really in. Loved the stun settings - poor Mal! The fact that his unconsciousness enforces Zoe's loneliness and isolation didn't hurt too. Of course you couldn't let the job run smooth, could you? Simon and Inara will be back for the next chapter, right? Lots of great stuff here - write faster!
Tuesday, 16 June 2009 04:14
Swampy rivers possibly haunted by "natives?" Ooooh. Intriguing. I'm getting SUCH an almost Mystery, Incorporated vibe from that. I'm expecting an old man behind it all and the line "I would've gotten away with it, too, if it weren't for you meddling kids!"

This is going to be fun.

Also, love the "guilty-Jayne" look cluing Simon in to the turn coat. I'm a little confused by why Jayne might be blaming Mal for their incarceration, but maybe that's just Jayne's own bizarre skewed perceptions on everything.
Tuesday, 16 June 2009 13:14
What a cliffhanger... into the Crazy River, love that by the way and Simon's reaction was perfect.

And yeah, this one reads like a show.
The turn of rolls is brilliant, and for humour sake alone, I could see the original writers creating scenarios like this.

Jayne's fantasy was so him, although I think HE may want to be Captain with Kaylee, Inara, and Zoe as the crew:)

write more!
Monday, 27 July 2009 08:14
Okay, you really piled it all up now.

We have the Resentful Trio locked up and useless and mired in misery. Or unconsciousness.

We have the Inept Bandits hurled over a cliff in what I can only hope is a rather large Crazy River.

And what we have left is River and Kaylee who have all that Simon tension between them, Ooooh. I really really really want to see those two come up with some kind of plan and work together to do.. something, Save Simon and Inara! These four have been holding the family together to the best of their effort, I want to see them save each other! *G*

Or.. I want to see a new part of this series, regardless where you're going with it! I'm biting my nails about this!

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