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The Guns of Yamenmiao (Pt. 3)

Monday, May 5, 2008

The Old That Is Strong - Book 1, Part 3. Mal has a mission, but he also has competition - and a strange clue when he encounters the competition.

CATEGORY: FICTION    TIMES READ: 3438    RATING: 9.0 (PG)    SERIES: FIREFLY

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As ever, beta-thanks to PhyreLight; blurbs and disclaimer in the prologue. Chinese phrases in this post should be familiar (both of them).

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http://www.fireflyfans.net/bluesun.aspx?bid=20157>Prologue

http://www.fireflyfans.net/bluesun.aspx?bid=20189>Part 1

http://www.fireflyfans.net/bluesun.aspx?bid=20233>Part 2

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Wash had observed, and he had cogitated, and he had even dabbled in a little bit of considering. In his near monastic meditation he had concluded - though it remained to be seen whether the conclusion was safe - that his impromptu date with Zoe was not facing the imminent threat of ruin in their current surroundings. The tavern they had happened upon was by no means the type Mal might patronise looking for a "quiet drink" on Unification Day, relieving Wash of the inclination to stay on his toes. Zoe had excused herself a few moments ago: for what, Wash hadn't the foggiest, but at length he realised that he was still bracing himself for unwanted attention from one source or another.

In awaiting the return of his beloved he embarked on studying his surroundings, and Zoe's notion about the old-fashioned way of life here rang truer yet. The walls of the tavern were not so decorated with holographic captures of prairie life as with old representations of the small frontier towns of Earth that was. In one nearby picture a street corner was shown, and beneath it nestled the frame label: VIRGINIA CITY, NEVADA, CA. 1880. On the opposite wall, a painstakingly hand-drawn broad view of Yellowknife, Northwest Territories in its infancy hung just below the ceiling, and beneath it was nailed a wood carving of a wagon train crossing the plains. Yet Wash's attention kept drifting back to a large colour photograph hanging directly above the bottle rack behind the bar. Most of the colour had faded, but the still-legible caption described Dabaliang, China, 1989. Immortali

Comments
Monday, 05 May 2008 14:54
As always, really good. I liked Wash's thoughts at the beginning and you make your action seem flawlessly smooth. Nice one! Can't wait for more.
Monday, 05 May 2008 15:13
That was very nice, especially River's lines. Now I'm just worried about Inara and Kaylee.
Wednesday, 07 May 2008 22:32
Thank ya both!! :D Yinyang, special thanks for your remark about River's lines - I'll find some encouragement there for what's to come.

Angellemarcs - back when I was writing Star Wars fanfic, I got a lot of praise about the action scenes from my readers. Both of them.

Yeah....thanks a mil to both of you for commenting....as you're the only ones who have so far, here or anywhere else....glad to know somebody stuck with it.
Saturday, 10 May 2008 12:13
Lots of action in this fic. I haven't read your work before but you certainly pack in the characters and events. Very interesting word choices, especially in your descriptions of places. I liked how very true your characters stayed to the series. I'll be reading more soon!
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Monday, 19 May 2008 14:35
Great action scene, lots of excitment! Now I'm wonderin' why exactly these guys thought Mal would be lookin' for Lickey Banker, and who that is, and if they were acting on orders from Carabello or on their own... curiouser and curiouser.

I like Mal's no nonsense manner, how he's to the task and the rest can wait till later. Feels very much like him.
Wednesday, 18 June 2008 13:15
When trouble comes calling it never rains but pours. I was a mite amused how one of the would be ambushers tells them *not* to go looking for Lickey Banker. Huh? How dumb and stupid is that? You don't go giving that sort of information to someone if you DON'T want them to do anything with it but then I suppose it was a plot device to give Mal and co a clue where to look next to find out what is going on. I am not sure if the welcome committee's first intent was just to rough up Mal and co or to kill them anyway as they went in brandishing clubs first. So glad they got foiled and good that River was able to give Zoe and Wash a timely warning. I also liked very much that one of the bystanders warned Mal who had sent them and the danger they were now in. Seems like that Carabella has spies everywhere. Ali D :~)
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