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Unfinished Business -- Chapter Twenty-Three

Sunday, February 10, 2008

Serenity arrives on the Suri Madron.

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Unfinished Business

Chapter Twenty-Three

“Thank God!” the sergeant said, as the hatch to Serenity’s cargo hold opened onto a sad and decrepit old shipping bay. The sergeant didn’t look much better than his gloomy station – his uniform was several years out of date and unbuttoned, exposing his faded undershirt, his cap was on backwards, and the smoldering stump of a cigar protruded from the left side of his mouth as if it had taken root and grown there from a seedling. If his face had seen his razor recently, it hadn’t been a long reunion. “I’ve been getting my gorram ass chewed out for days, wondering when this fei oo is gonna be in!”

Malcom and Kaylee were already moving the pallet that held the relay around to prepare it to move down the ramp.

“Well, ni hao to you, too,” Kaylee muttered. It was typical, she thought, whenever they put in on some forsaken frontier shithole, it didn’t matter what the situation was, everyone was always nice and polite. As soon as they docked with anything corewise, it was automatically a hurried, rude business. She could deal with it – had to deal with it – but after a week dealing with real mechanics and engineers who had fallen all over themselves to help her tend to the girl at the Gopher Hole, this was a rude awakening.

“Someone order a pizza?” Mal quipped as he steadied the relay. “Got a hot charter outta Persephone –”

“Yeah, yeah,” the sergeant dismissed. “Part of that was keeping your mouth shut. Remember that.”

“This some kinda secret spy base?” Kaylee asked, handing the sergeant a clipboard with the shipping receipt attached.

“Yeah, that’s us, keeping the Alliance safe from the alien hordes,” he grumbled as he inspected it. “Your tax dollars at work. I’d keep your questions to yourself, missy, if you know what’s good for you. Kwan ni ju ji du shu!”

Kaylee pouted, but nodded. The sergeant looked up at her expectantly. “This relay all you brought? You guys didn’t, uh, didn’t bring anything decent for a little off-the-books trade, did ya

Comments
Sunday, 10 February 2008 18:50
Woohoo! Two in one week! See what good comments inspire me to do?

ScrewtheAlliance
Sunday, 10 February 2008 19:30
Yeah! More great fic! Glad to see the rescue is commencing at last. The baboons are really creepy. Why do I get the feeling that Zoe's presence is going to be very very missed since Mal is bound to find a way to get into trouble. Loved the pizza delivery scene. As always, your writing is fabulous!
LITTLEDORA
Sunday, 10 February 2008 20:30
Another chapter so soon!! I'm thrilled, thanks! Simon has certainly come into his own. He's raised snotty superiority to an art form,LOL.
Monday, 11 February 2008 01:49
I liked this one a lot, one of your better chapters and thats saying a awful lot.

Hopefully you can keep up the pace or at least a once a week chapter pace. Hey i can hope anyways.
Monday, 11 February 2008 04:22
Happy dance! Loved the chapters. And the tension is really amping up. What did we do to deserve it so we can have more?
Monday, 11 February 2008 15:01
I've recently finished reading Brust's, My Own Kind Of Freedom.

Your stories blow that away.
Monday, 11 February 2008 15:49
Simon is a damned riot in this! It's good to see him finding his talents. ;) I hate to think of Mal's reaction when he hears how the prisoners have been lied to... how horrifying.

Thanks for the chapters!
Monday, 11 February 2008 19:45
StA you continue to flat out rock!! I especially liked how Mal gets to double dip on this leg of the journey.

Simon can be his evil self and out sneer the Alliance brass?... what fun!!

Many thanks for keeping this story alive!!

Keep flyin',

K
FIREFLYCRACKHEAD
Monday, 11 February 2008 20:03
Fantastic. I love the parallels you've made between the Browncoats and what the Bush administration is doing Guantanamo Bay where the "unlawful enemy combatants" aren't given Geneva Convention rights nor Habeus Corpus (until very, very recently). Keep up the good work!
MISAIM
Monday, 11 February 2008 21:58
This story is made of 100% awesome and win.

I like how Simon avoided the 'engine trouble' excuse to avoid tossing out Serenity and his discussion with Chen was well crafted and compelling.

The calm before the storm utterly rocks, and I can't wait until we see more!
Tuesday, 12 February 2008 06:30
I was quite chilled at how the alliance justified the actions of the Suri Madron. Excellent read Screw.
Tuesday, 12 February 2008 16:23
Two in one week?! What did we do to deserve such goodness?! And will it continue?!

This was a most excelent chapter and I was on the edge of my seat waiting for Chen to reveal that he knew who Simon was.

It's good to see Simon in some form of his element for a change.

Looking forward to the next chapter!
SLICK
Saturday, 16 February 2008 17:46
Your writing is as always very shiny. Simon's growth into the role of criminal master mind continues. Wonder where he will be in ten years if he stays on the run in Serenity? Hope you will be there to tell us STA. Sortof brings up the question of character growth overall. Its temptin to want to see it all too fast. Glad you have resisted and kept it to a normal pace. Makes one think the story will just continue ...
EBONWOLF
Monday, 18 February 2008 05:56
So Shiny! I've finally managed to catch up on all of your wonderful fics! I love the character developement and your plotline.. Can't wait for more and thank you for sharing!
Saturday, 08 March 2008 16:34
Wow.


That is all.
HYDRATIC
Wednesday, 09 April 2008 07:45
c'mon! we need more!!
FIREFLYCRACKHEAD
Saturday, 26 April 2008 01:40
We miss you.

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