Snowball - Chapter 7
Monday, January 7, 2008
Mal and Jayne both ease their way through treacherous encounters with the Cottonwoods Ski Patrol. This is the seventh of eleven chapters. You can find out all about it in my blog.
CATEGORY: FICTION TIMES READ: 3197 RATING: 9.0 (PG13) SERIES: FIREFLY
Set six months after the BDM, with standard pairings: Simon and Kaylee, Mal and Inara angst.
If you haven’t read from the start, I would recommend going back to chapter 1 - http://www.fireflyfans.net/bluesun.aspx?bid=19146
Of course - Its Joss’s world and his characters, but I sure enjoy playing with them.
I need to give many rounds of thanks to Mal4prez for the wonderful beta type advice.
My thanks to all the folks who took the time to leave me such wonderful comments.
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Chapter 7
Inara gave Mal a slight smile as they raised the tips of their skis in preparation for getting off the chair lift. Mal could tell she was getting into her character, and he tried to reciprocate, but it was forced. He had not had the practice at hiding thoughts and emotions that she had, but they only had to pretend for a few minutes, just long enough to ski through the barricade of ski patrol members and Alliance soldiers waiting at the exit to the chair lift. It would not be a problem, they had built a thorough cover story, and he was confident that this strange posse was not looking for him. After the doctor’s transmission, Mal knew something had happened; he’d bet his ship that this lift top sting operation was after Simon.
The lift descended allowing their skis to finally touch the icy snow that served as the lift’s exit point. He stood, using the momentum of the lift to give him a slight shove down the incline and out of the path of oncoming skiers. As he started to glide however, he caught sight of a silver glint in the trees not ten feet behind the men. These wang bao dahn had a semi automatic rifle aimed at the ski lift. They were determined not to let Simon slip through their grasp.
Suddenly, the slim grip he had on his ability to stay upright with sticks attached to his feet became somewhat precarious. The glint in the trees had taken his concentration from the act of getting off the lift smoothly, causing the tips of his skis to cross. He leaned unsteadily to his left and attempted
Found it difficult to follow the Scott and James scene because they came into the story so abruptly. That the two women that they were eyeing were River and Zoe wasn't really clear until near the end so I was a bit baffled as to why we were glimpsing this scene.
I'm not sure I can quite wrap my head around why Kaylee wanted to get into Simon's pants at a time like this. But, I suppose, in the earlier chapter you had her not nearly as concerned as Simon about his cousin, that it could work, but after Simon told Kaylee about what type of woman Cassandra was, I thought she'd understand the urgency of the situation a bit more. An enjoyable scene, it just rang a bit unbelievable to me.
The Jayne and Adria scene was hysterical. Even if I can't believe Jayne knows anything about skiing to begin with, his arrogance in trying to get into this woman's pants is going to get him into all kinds of trouble. Which will be very fun to see!
Seriously though, I like this series. It's alot of fun to read.
Keep flying ;)
I don't mind seeing the crew through the eyes of a few stranges. But I can see that it might have been less startling if there were more sections of outside pov's scattered about.
Fun tale! Looking forward to the race! ;)
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