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Unfinished Business -- Chapter Nineteen

Friday, June 8, 2007

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Unfinished Business

Chapter Nineteen

“This is going to make winning the War look like a quick game of go,” the Brigadier said with a sigh. “If I had to apply to the High Command for permission and resources, like I did in the old days, I wouldn’t even try it. Luckily, as a bandit kingpin and underground cell leader, I’m a little less restricted in my operations.” He surveyed the lecture room where nearly a hundred volunteers associated with the rescue had been gathered.

“As you may have heard, all of our preliminary operations were successful, to some degree or another. We have the tools now to plan the rescue in detail. We have as much intel as we’re going to get. I think we also have the manpower. So let’s start breaking this down.”

The Brigadier crossed to tag the holographic schematic of the Suri Madron, and it floated in the air behind him with helpful bits of data displaying all around it in different colors. Then he promptly ignored it. “The existence of the Suri Madron has become an embarrassment to the current government, in the wake of the Miranda Affair. As I’m certain you have heard, there is widespread dissatisfaction with the Unity Party in the Alliance Parliament that runs from outraged editorials in the Central worlds to riots and near-insurrection on the Rim. The caretaker government is struggling to hold on to the reigns of power even as it tries to answer the outcry for accountability. The opposition is poised for a strong attack in the next election. The party stalwarts are regrouping and throwing the responsible parties to the wolves. Corporate shake-ups are happening daily. It’s a real gorram mess.

“Which means that someone, eventually, is going to want to investigate the Pax. Where it came from, who was responsible, that sort of thing. Which will lead them to the Suri Madron. In fact, the Public Policy Oversight Committee has even authorized an inspection of the facility, though they cannot agree on who should do the inspection. There is another faction wit

Comments
Friday, 08 June 2007 17:02
Oh, hell, why not post another chapter? It's Friday, after all . . .

Anyone want to hazard a guess what the "one other thing" Simon wants might be?

StA
Friday, 08 June 2007 18:55
Loved the haggling, it was very well written and sharp.
Friday, 08 June 2007 19:16
While this was very well written I really *really* don't like the Brigadier. That threat was chilling in particular as he is supposed to be one of the good guys, that alone would make me ten times more wary of trusting him as far as I could throw him. And another worry, with Serenity and her crew inside the Gopher Hole I'm guessing not a one of them could get out if they decided NOT to go alone with what the Brigadier and his mob want. I particularly loved Simon's dialogue though I can't see him using 'gorram' all the time. Am curious what the one other thing is that Simon wants. Ali D :~)
You can't take the sky from me
Friday, 08 June 2007 19:35
What can I say? Simon's been hanging out with a bad element. It's affecting his language.

StA
Friday, 08 June 2007 19:45
Ohh, a whole chapter on Simon. I love it! Well done. I like his sarcasm and his demands. I really hope the last thing he wants has something to do with Kaylee as he didn't seem to think anything about her until he got to mentioning the 'junk heap of a ship' he lives on.
NBZ
Friday, 08 June 2007 19:58
Wow, I gotta say I am really uncomfortable with the new browncoats.

Gotta worry about the safety of River. Who says they will not try to take her *AFTER* Simon has done his job for them?

It would be good for them (and only them) to have a reader on board.
Friday, 08 June 2007 20:18
This rocks, as always. Wow--2 chapters in a week! What'd we do to deserve this?!
Friday, 08 June 2007 21:10
Oh, man...well done. I was hoping our BDHs would get a more direct role in the operation, and how it came about was hilarious- I can really envision Simon cussing up a storm from the back row.

Hmm. What would Simon want, other than to borrow one of the Angel fighters for the brother-sister aerial sensation known only as the Flying Tams?

...You've really stumped me on this one!

~MG
Saturday, 09 June 2007 00:52
Could be a number of things, my first thought was a real wedding for him and Kaylee, but sure we will find out soon enough.
Saturday, 09 June 2007 01:12
Uh...just as a point of order, I'm a history student, not an engineering one;)

And AMDOBELL...I seriously hope you're referring to McBane rather than me. I know we might not see eye-to-eye all the time, but...

;D

Utterly fabulous work here, Screw! Between the newest chapters of "Unfinished Business" and reading one of my local library's copy of "Sparticus"...you are just entertaining me out the yinyang this past week;D

And I too really wanna know what the hell Simon asked for from McBane. I seriously hope it's a free upgrade to Serenity on Kaylee's behalf or a lifetime's supply of parts for a Firefly-class transport vessel. Though I imagine you will hold off on revealing THAT tidbit until the very end of this epic:D

BEB
Saturday, 09 June 2007 02:06
This is the best, the absolute best chapter yet with that lovely mix of humour and terror that you've given it.

*“Oh, bloody rutting HELL!” came a loud, plaintive wail from the back row.*

I fell off my chair laughing reading this, and whatever you're feeding that portion of your brain that is coming up with the Simon snark, feed it more!

I like that you kept Stooge Simon, but introduced these nuances of Competent Simon. He seems to have the same kind of snarky wit that River has, and this is very nice.

The bargaining he does with McBane is chilling as well as funny, and I have to wonder what would happen if McBane attempted to execute any of his threats.

And Mal going 'Bomb?', oh that was classic. Love the man for defending Simon and his choice to not participate.
Saturday, 09 June 2007 03:21
Brilliant piece of writing as always - and so happy to see so much so soon. Very interesting direction you're going down - looking forward to more soon. Your Jayne sense of comedic timing is the best.
Saturday, 09 June 2007 11:22
I'm glad to see Simon getting a chance to recover his medical career and possibly secure a cure for River, but where does that leave the rest of the crew?

In saving River, Mal lost his job contacts, Zoe lost a husband and Inara her vocation, plus a lot of people, like DIED...hopefully Simon remembers their sacrafices, when asking for things.

And since they all know the existence and location of this underground haven, how will they be allowed to leave?

You've sucked us all in Screw, please post ASAP!
Saturday, 09 June 2007 21:33
Great.
Monday, 11 June 2007 07:38
Fabulous chapter, loved it, really loved it.
RANKTYRO
Wednesday, 20 June 2007 05:09
Good story, as always.

I especially like the stance the Brigadier is taking, it feels very real.

A person in his position would have to consider the implications of River's abilities, as well as her value as a hostage in order to coerce Simon into doing what he needs.

However, his reluctance to do something like that to a young girl that has suffered so much at the hands of the Alliance seems very real and very human.

Great chapter Screw!

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