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Unfinished Business -- Chapter Eighteen

Wednesday, June 6, 2007

Serenity goes down a Gopher Hole.

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Unfinished Business

Chapter Eighteen

Amphora Station was named with great optimism, a few decades back before the War. Nearly every terraformation project used some sort of orbiting platform as a staging ground for the first grueling steps in the process, and later as a conduit for equipment, men and supplies from off-world. But after nearly forty years, those hopes were long dashed, and the station was a tangible stain of the dashing. Its form was perhaps more graceful than similar stations elsewhere, as it was designed to look like the ancient wine vessel of the Greeks. The serene curves that had become the hallmark of Achaean civilization and earliest symbol of international trade had not been chosen for their sublime aesthetics, however. It was a marketing gimmick, pure and simple.

The moon it orbited, Bacchus, had looked like a perfect candidate for terraformation and colonization – over 9000 miles wide, comfortably within the important “Cinderella Zone” (that critically important distance from the primary where water was naturally a liquid – not too hot, not too cold). It had a robust magnetosphere to shield it from cosmic rays, and it had a period of twenty-five hours. A local ring system had adequate frozen hydro to provide the seas and basic atmo. The heat radiating from the jovian planet would keep its eventual temperature balmy. It looked perfect . . . on paper.

In fact the early computer projections indicated that the lifeless orb would eventually have a warm, Mediterranean-style climate, perfect for vinoculture and similar agriculture. The announcement of the terrasayers’ findings was hot on the heels of the first hugely popular vintages of Athenian wines hitting the Londinium markets to rave reviews. The investing public had been enthusiastic about the prospect of another wine producing moon on par with the finest of the Central planets wineries. It became a hot investment tip, fueled by romanticism, an economy as yet unblemished by war, and a top-rate marketing firm.

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Comments
Wednesday, 06 June 2007 22:43
I'm back. Again. Sorry for the excessive exposition, but it was necessary.

StA
Wednesday, 06 June 2007 23:01
This one was very funny, and typically they are amusing. Glad to see another chapter up, look forward to the nest one already.
EPM0001
Thursday, 07 June 2007 01:53
Happy to see another posting. This is very good.
Thursday, 07 June 2007 02:57
I can entirely forgive you for the exposition for one reason and one reason only:

"I can write it out in meters if you go get me a crayon.”

That was one of the funniest and best exchanges between River and Mal that I've ever read.

This is #2 my favorite, right behind the River/Simon/Kaylee exchange in the shuttle.

Keep 'em coming!

Thursday, 07 June 2007 05:09
I loved the exposition, it makes what little we know of the verse seem much more full this way. and also:

“Mighty noble of you,” Mal grunted.

“You used to be just like us, Mal,” Rachel observed.

“I got over it.”

That exchange seemed so very very Mal. I loved it. I only have one question. What would this base do if they found out about the new Imperial bastion formed on Epiphany in the last book?
Thursday, 07 June 2007 05:42
Repetitive is not what I'm about, but the exchange between Mal and River is priceless. And that's hard to create because we can only speculate, post Miranda, what her character will be like; a more... lucid traumatized mind reading genuis killer women...someone said there was talk about making her gay too??

Your characters are spot on in this fic Screw, and the second war premise works well in this verse big or small. "Treasure" was a little too "Indie" for me...by any comparison, Mal is a more bitter and darker character as you've been accurately portraying him here.

love Jayne's last line
Thursday, 07 June 2007 08:08
I am all manner of worried at the kind of *goushi* Mal and his crew may be dragged into with this new 'war waiting to be waged' view of die hard Browncoats. Loved River's comments and Mal's reservations are echoing inside me like a gorram wind chime. It was a long wait for this chapter but ultimately worth it, even if I had to go back and read the last chapter to make sure I was on the same page. Ali D
You can't take the sky from me
Thursday, 07 June 2007 18:56
Great work as always. Shiny.
RANKTYRO
Thursday, 07 June 2007 22:10
This chapter was well worth the wait. Can't wait to see how Mal and Zoe react to their cause rising from the ashes.


Great chapter!
Friday, 08 June 2007 07:11
Let me just say this first, Screw: when I read Mal's exchange with River as she was piloting "Serenity" toward Amphora Station, I honestly busted a gut laughing my ass off. The climax of that mirth came with River's utterly brilliant jab about writing down her results in metric with a crayon. Cuz I don't care if it's speculation...that's how River post-Miranda should be! That's Wash-type snark, but just filled with River's brand of egotistical genius:D

Another utterly fabulous chapter hers, mi amigo! Really can't wait to see what you come up with for the briefing:D

BEB

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