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Unfinished Business -- Chapter Sixteen

Wednesday, April 11, 2007

Life on the good ship Suri Madron.

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Unfinished Business

Chapter Sixteen

“We’re clear, Sir,” the corporal called from the hatchway before he sealed it from the outside with a decisive hiss. Colonel McNab looked around at his dinner companions, and waited for Gizu to look up from his rat’s nest of electronics and nod that they weren’t being electronically overheard. That meant that the “officer’s mess” – an empty cargo locker left over from the Suri Madron’s heyday as a terraforming freighter – was as secure from human and electronic surveillance as was possible in the Brown Zone. Not that that was often a problem – the Administrator and his lackeys didn’t give a dingo’s right testicle about what the prisoners did in their off time – but it was tradition. More, it was good security. McNab ran a sloppy outfit in many ways, but security was one area where he could not be faulted.

Hell, there wasn’t anything better to do.

“All right, ladies and gentlemen, time to tuck in,” he said with a weak grin. “Mr. Gizu assures me that we aren’t being overheard. I think we’re all arrived, now. I therefore call to order the two thousand, three hundred and eighteenth session of the Independent Armed Forces Prisoner Escape Committee and Dining Club.

“Tonight Chef has prepared us a modest repast of green protein soup delicately seasoned with the salt of his tears, an intriguing Type Four protein cutlet in a dashing gray color, complimented by some amusing little protein sticks broiled with multivitamin extract an’ covered with an allegedly cheese-flavored liquid protein, an’ for afters we have a delightful runny yellow protein gelatin that is either authentic artificial lemon flavored or laced with the spiteful bastard’s piss. The sommelier will be around shortly for your wine selections – I recommend the toilet-fermented, vacuum-distilled ethanol for it’s sunny bouquet an’ it’s bold aftertaste. In the meantime, let’s start our weeklies, shall we? Lois, shall we begin with you?”

“Trevor ain’t said much, last time we was together,” the lean,

Comments
Thursday, 12 April 2007 01:51
Very interasting to see whats going on, on the ship. Though of course can't wait till you get back to the crew.
Thursday, 12 April 2007 02:53
WHOA.

Pax used on (un)cooperative POWs from a war long done? Genetically-enhanced Primate spies (I hope!)? And unspeakable horrors in the bowels of the prison ship? Quite the chapter! Rescue cannot come quickly enough for the thousands of brave souls onboard the Suri Madron, especially with the ship about to be detonated over their heads so as to hide evidence of misdeeds from the Alliance...

Although I can't help wondering if the vessel of the "government inspector" will turn out to be a familiarly dilapidated (dilated!) midbulk transport...

In short, AWESOME.
~MG
FIREFLYCRACKHEAD
Thursday, 12 April 2007 14:06
Thank god! I've been going through withdrawal for weeks now. But now I have my fix...and I want more. One of the best things about the way you write is your character development. You definitely channel Joss in this respect. When I first saw that this chapter wouldn't have anything about the crew I was a little skeptical. But your introduction of Romano and the further insight into McNab sucked me in. Now I'm gonna read this again 5 times and have cold sweats and be incredibly unpleasant for the next 2 weeks. Damn you for being so good.
WOONSOCKET
Thursday, 12 April 2007 19:29
Screw's back!!!
And the dialogue just gets sharper.
Friday, 13 April 2007 03:12
Happy, happy, joy, joy Screw's posted another chapter, and a good'un too!!
Saturday, 14 April 2007 16:22
Tis a nasty spot to be in, for sure. And I too can't help but imagine what colour of coat the inspector might be wearing ;)

Great stuff!!
Sunday, 15 April 2007 18:08
Oh...won't that be just the greastest future scene: Mal & co. taking a page from Simon's playbook and impersonate a group of Alliance inspectors taking a looky-see at the Suri Madron;)

Definitely a mucho brilliant chapter here, Screw! Between the scene featuring the Independent Armed Forces Escape Committee and Dining Club, and McNab's meeting with Romano...I was completely sucked in. Can't wait to see how the Suri Madron Gang get their act together to make things fun for the eventual arrival of the inspectors.

BEB

P.S. Colonel McNab's first name and initial wouldn't be Bruce J., would it? Cuz as a fan of WEB Griffin's "President's Men" series, seeing a "Col. McNab" makes me wanna cheer for dear ole "Scotty" and his brave bunch of Delta Force troopers. But they're not, are they?
NEILEI
Friday, 20 April 2007 03:43
Great read and shiny background info. I am looking forward to our crew's arrival. I like it mucho!!!
NeiLei
Tuesday, 24 April 2007 21:41
GREAT STUFF!!!!! Any chance we'll see Robert E Lee Fexive chasing our Miss River? I'm sure they could use the Imperial Intellegence's help on this job, and it wouldn't surprise me if there are a few Imperials on board along with the imprisoned Independants.

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