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La Escorpiona/The Scorpion-Chapter 5: Passion Play

Wednesday, April 4, 2007

A Bounty Hunter,torn from her home remolded by the hands of blue. She escapes into the black.Her only target- River tam.But can she kill her? Or can she go back to being normal? Takes place after BDM(No Wash or Book). This chapter is not tame.Rayne lead up.

CATEGORY: FICTION    TIMES READ: 2918    RATING: 8.0 (NC17)    SERIES: FIREFLY

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Author: Tinadoll (aka Tina- That’s me!)

Setting: After BDM

Rating: PG-13- NC-17. This chapter is R- Nc-17. I am not sure. It started out smuttier but then got all poetic. Sorry Joe.

Spoilers: probably-But who cares? We have all seen the episodes?

Author’s note: I have written fan-fic before. But this is my first Fireflyfic and my first serious (kind of) one. Scorpion is mine. All Spanish, Latin or any other language will be in parenthesis. This could get messy folks. My spelling and grammar is horrible. But with help I am working on it.Also, my humor is odd. And I’m a fan girl. LOL ENJOY

Disclaimer: Firefly et al. Are properties of Joss Whedon- Those who don’t like that will get punched in the Kidneys. You can't stop the signal.

Beta'd By Jetflair

Translations:

Muchas Gracias = Thanks a lot

dong ma= Understand

Chur ni-duh = Screw you

Pendejo = Asshole

Chapter 5: Passion play

The Captain snickered at her and put her eye patch back on. “Muchas gracias,” she said. He didn’t respond.

He proceeded to carefully untie her legs and arms, re-handcuffing them as Jayne looked on. She didn’t even make a peep. The captain led her out the door and down the corridor to one of the passenger rooms which were converted into a holding room some time again, with River and Kaylee looking on. . She looked up at them and Kaylee was staring at her with big doe eyes. River was another story; she narrowed her eyes and looked over at Simon who was sitting on a chair.

Maria closed her eyes and River responded by closing her eyes also. Again- They stood toe to toe.

“I’m this close, River,” Scorpion said. “Can you taste it?”

“This close to what?” asked River.

“This close to having your man at my mercy,” Scorpion said with a smile, eyes shining.

River screamed and the Scorpion quickly opened her eyes.

“What’s wrong?” Kaylee asked as she tried to calm River down who was going wild.

Scorpion just smiled and stood there as Simon hurried up the stairs to try

Comments
Wednesday, 04 April 2007 18:43
I really like the way the scene between Jayne and the Scorpion is written. Well done. Very powerful stuff. Two hired guns, two lost souls.
Wednesday, 04 April 2007 19:57
Whoa. Good chapter. Very good chapter. Better continuity, well formed flashes, action (descriptive without being explicit). I'd hate for it to end but I can bet that it will be such and end.
Tuesday, 10 April 2007 07:03
Definitely some great work here...if still a bit rough. Mainly, I guess, from how things move rather too quickly for my tastes and certain...issues...got resolved too easily. But then again, I like me complicated angst;)

This has been quite the enjoyable tale in any case, Tinadoll. Interesting and multi-dimensional OC, complicated scenario and the right amount of philosophical navel-gazing for the Serenifly 'verse...can't wait to see more from ya.

BEB
Thursday, 31 May 2007 13:39
best fan fic ever, though this chapter is pretty cool,

*don't you mean to say sex*

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